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@Cyrania
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I dunno if @The Kid Lantern wants me to accept/deny folk but if you want at Lunch I can offer up any critcism/advice based on your sheets.
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Alright thanks!
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I am in the TitanPad chat if anyone needs me as well.
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Abilities: Seem fine to me. Just Generic Spiderman/Venom like abilities.

Weaknesses: Seem nicely balanced to your abilities.

Personality: Not much to say here.

Motivation: This is alright, though there should be why it's a challenge, why he/they want to fulfill this challenge.

Bio: This is where things for me get a bit iffy.

1) Alright bio bots made to clean up oil spills.
2) How did they adapt to learn to use creatures to collect oil? How did said creatures not die.
3) How did they self replicate before collecting minerals?
4) How did the scientists not keep control off it?

This is my most important point and key to the whole thing, if you control all/most of the savage land why Neuva York? Also why do you need people? Why would people act normally? Dinosaurs? I dunno I really don't like the concept of you controlling the savage lands and those on it as then you could effectively just take over Neuva York.

However I know you are contemplating bringing in a Crimson Dynamo, Iron Man, War Machine or other suited hero.
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I'd love to see an Ironman! Gonna check the titanpad really quick before I go into work for a few hours. The most of my opening post w/o the rules and synopsis added is in the pad if anybody wants to read it beforehand.

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I'd love to see an Ironman! Gonna check the titanpad really quick before I go into work for a few hours. The most of my opening post w/o the rules and synopsis added is in the pad if anybody wants to read it beforehand.

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Already read it. Mr.IgnoreSep :P
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I would like some advice too, @Sep.
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I would like some advice too, @Sep.


Will get too it once I get home then Cyrania.
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Tanks for the feedback @Sep. I am working on an Ironman character now so I won't be using the Spiderlings. I'll try to make a better backstory for him than the Spiderlings and as for personality I'm defiantly going to try to expand that more.
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@rocketrobie2 If you go a Stark route Ghost will not be you best friend, lol.
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Powers: These seem fine to me, I personally would be wary to add healing. At most highly resistant too physical damage.

Weaknesses: Loyalty is a mild weakness, the energy one is a bit better. Anything else though? These weaknesses are a bit standard to most people what is a specific weakness too this character?

Personality/Motivation: This kinda ties into your history as well, why does she want to be like Captain America from the Heroic Age (What some 2099ers call modern days)?

History

1) Why was she chosen/accept to be one of Alchemexs test subjects?
2) How was she rescued?
3) At any point did she become suspicious of who he was?
4) How is this sword DNA locked? What stops someone else from being able to wield it?
5) She went back into the city, just like that?
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^^^ I would also need to add, the Alchemax Avengers have only been around a few weeks tops. If she's a test tube baby like them her exp would have to decrease drastically. Like Sep mentioned a lot of things don't sync up or make sense. The Avengers are also all pre-programmed with bits of their namesakes' personalities. However they are completely unwavering and do the bidding of their superiors in Alchemax. So the Thing is ever loving to a point till he needs to break a superhuman in half for his bosses. They don't have real feelings exactly, just what's been programmed into them.

I should've been more specific about that. Black Panther will think he's royalty, Cap will think this country is still morally just, Quicksilver will be a cocky asshole, Rogue will be southern, etc...

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Nice way to get around the exp thing LOL, and the fact she's not named after another hero from the Heroic Age. I like everything so far, a bit powerful... but she's a test tube hero and a lot of them are uber-powerful [see Rogue].

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We should stop collabing before the IC starts @Forsythe

It creates long posts of longness.

Also @The Kid Lantern

I am a manly man of manliness (Cause I'm Scottish) just so ya know.
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If IC didn'T started why the hell are there posts? XD Me no understand.
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If IC didn'T started why the hell are there posts? XD Me no understand.


I meant we started this collab before the IC was started and then got long.

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<Snipped quote by Forsythe>

I meant we started this collab before the IC was started and then got long.

Hi @Natty


Let me snoop in peace :P
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<Snipped quote by Sep>

Let me snoop in peace :P


Never.
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LOL!

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