[OOC] RWBY: Atlas Academy

[Xiphonic]

@OneWayOut The baby that could punch through a stone wall...

[Karos]

@Xiphonic If you're happy with your character, you can slot them into the CS tab.

[OneWayOut]

@Xiphonic 16.5 still the baby XD

[OneWayOut]

@Karos Okay I made edits to her skills. I took out Corruption and replaced it with Transfer and I edited her Mirror skill, giving it more limitations/restrictions because I really wanted to keep that aspect of her ability. My main idea was for her to be able to use someone's aura against them, and with Mirror gone, I can't really do that. Hopefully my changes are OK. Also, I'm nearly done with the history.

edit: All done with my CS now.

-moved to bin-

[FateWeaver]

I'm toying with the idea of pulling a gender-swap on Brenin. Mostly because the imbalance would slowly drive me insane, but also because why not? Not much else would change, but it's going to take some editing and I figured I might get your opinions in the mean time.

[OneWayOut]

@FateWeaver I think you should stick with what's most comfortable for you. I don't think it matters.

And I totally feel special for having the only girl character ^^

[FateWeaver]

@OneWayOut Fair enough, no change then. It was mostly just an idle thought anyway.

@Karos I have to work tonight so I'm done for now, but let me know if you think I need to add more.

Brenin Lloyd

Name: Brenin Lloyd
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Appearance:

Equipment:

Weapon: Shadow's Reach - CPBB - Conventional Projectile Blade Bow
(I know, the color is all wrong. Imagine that the green parts are a more appropriate color and please ignore the leaf emblem.)

Weapon transformations/derivations:

Shortbow - The primary form of Shadow's Reach, and the one most used in combat. Brenin uses bodkin arrowheads, with a hollow in the head for a small vial or crystal of Dust. He generally keeps a few already prepared with various Dust types, but these are more likely to break to and somewhat dangerous to store. These arrows are stored in a durable case-like quiver that is slung across the small of his back. To avoid losing all of his ammunition, the inside of the quiver is magnetized to keep hold of the arrows.

Gladius - A short sword with a wide and heavy blade. Brenin prefers this form when on the defensive, or when the full bow form would be too much of a hindrance. This is also the most compact form, and the one used to store the weapon. The quiver doubles as a sheath for this form.

Kukri - A pair of long and slightly curved daggers, suitable for both slashes and thrusts. These are most often used when Brenin is going for an all-out attack in melee combat. While not offering much defensive capabilities, these blades allow him to be extremely mobile and efficient even up close.

Armor: Brenin wears very little armor, as it would hinder his ability to move swiftly. Typically, reinforced boots protect his lower legs and metal bracers encase his forearms.

Other: Dust vials and crystals are kept in a pouch at Brenin's right hip on his belt. Another pouch closer to his quiver contains spare arrow parts, mostly including heads and fletching since those are the most easily damaged.

Semblance: Focused Burst - After taking a few seconds to steady himself and focus his Aura, Brenin is able to push himself far beyond normal human limits in terms of speed and agility. During this time, he moves quickly enough that he perceives others to be moving in slow motion. No other factors seem to be affected by this state, and he can easily injure himself if he doesn't take things like velocity and momentum into account before making his move. This ability can currently be maintained for a maximum of about five real-time seconds in one go, or until his focus is disrupted.

While there is no limit to how often Brenin can push himself, using his semblance repeatedly will exhaust both his physical stamina and his Aura. He has been known to damage muscles and ligaments when going too far. The more complex his actions are, the less time he has with his unnatural agility. As it stands, he can't attack with any form of his weapon more than once without ending the effect immediately.

Skills:

Dexterous - Even without his semblance, Brenin is still fleet of foot. As well as being fast and agile, he has an incredible sense of balance. Overall, this allows him to remain on the move while using his bow's range to his advantage. His hands are as quick as his feet, a necessity for his chosen styles of combat.

Silent Step - Due to long hours of practice, Brenin is rather accomplished when it comes to feats of stealth. He has learned to walk and even jog in near silence, as well as fade into the shadows or quickly break an opponents line of sight. When focused on maintaining cover (i.e. sniping from the sidelines while his comrades do battle in the open) he is nearly imperceptible until he takes his first shot.

Intent Focus - Brenin excels when he can focus on one thing at time. This mostly translates into his archery. After spending a few moments studying his target and intended strike zone, it is incredibly unlikely that he will miss due to a fault of his own. This has its downsides as well. If he's focused on sneaking up on an opponent to incapacitate them, he would be highly unlikely to notice someone coming up to flank him.

Personality: At first, Brenin tends to come off as arrogant or rude. This impression generally isn't helped by the fact that that it seems like he rarely ever speaks. When he does it comes out blunt and direct. Because of this, he tends to end up with a lot of enemies from pointing out things he considers problems. This is especially true because he's stubborn and doesn't know when to back down. It takes a lot to really get under his skin, but it turns out he's at his most verbose when he's actually pissed.

Of his friends he is rather possessive and defensive. Brenin does not trust easily, and those he considers close enough to call 'friend' are few and far between. While he is generally found to be more talkative around those few, he is still fairly quiet and reserved.

Short Bio: Brenin's life was far from simple or easy, as he grew up outside the kingdom of Atlas. Life was harsh, especially since his father did not stick around for long after he was born. The boy's mother seemed to take single parenthood rather well, as she was a fairly capable woman in her own right.

As he grew, Brenin's priorities became survival and becoming stronger. His mother taught him to handle a bow so he could help her hunt and defend the small village. Learning to handle blades came later, when he became stronger and was forced to fend for himself more often. What eventually drove him into Atlas proper and the Atlas Academy's Junior section was the desire to continue to grow stronger in order to defend others when they were unable to help themselves.

While he flourished as a fighter in the Academy, Brenin remained in the background socially and was only an average scholar. Intent on proving himself worthy of becoming a Specialist, he worked hard to improve on all fronts. Finally moving on to the Senior section, he considers being assigned a team on of the greatest challenges he will face. In the past he had always preferred to work on his own.

[Karos]

@OneWayOut Looks like you're all good to move to the CS tab, just keep in mind whilst you may steal a semblance you might not know how to use it safely. If you stole Brenin's semblance for example you might collide with something at high speed. If you stole Actus' then you might become quieter but still be noticeable as you haven't practiced with it.

@FateWeaver All good, move 'em over to the CS tab.

[Karos]

Alright, give me some time to have breakfast and I should be able to get the intro fully rounded off and posted. You can expect it 09:30 GMT at the latest.

[Karos]

@OneWayOut I just realised something actually. I've been re-watching RWBY whilst sorting this out and I've realised that your aura draining ability might unbalance things quite a bit more than I previously thought. Mainly because aura is used to determine whether or not a person can remain in a fight. So as it stands all your character would have to do is touch the enemy and they'd essentially be able to win the match rendering all blocking methods useless.

Perhaps instead of any form of contact being able to drain the victim you have to make physical contact with the person in question. Not merely their weapons, so that way you can still use your ability, but its just a little bit more balanced.

[OneWayOut]

@Karos I see what you're saying, but the thing is, if she were limited to only physical contact it would be more dangerous to her trying to remain up close and having to keep her physical hand on that person. It's a bit unreasonable.

I mean, for one, it takes time, a lot of time, for her to be able to drain aura from someone. She already will have to take it little by little, because how often do you see someone actually touch someone else in combat for more than a second? She wouldn't be able to win with a single toich. Fighting her over a long period of time would result in getting your aura stolen.

Does that kind of clear it up a bit? I certainly don't think it's any easy win as it may look

[Karos]

Whilst Understand that it limits the use of it, it is still possible. As it stands at the moment lets say you were fighting Cardin, you hit his mace. He blocks your attack, now all you have to do is stay there and drain him dry. If he holds his block he loses, if he tries to attack you you can quickly strike him repeatedly still drawing aura from him and damaging his aura with conventional attacks. It's the same if you fought someone with a shield like Jaune if he blocks you, you could simply stay and drain him dry.

If you have to make contact with a person however its a bit more balanced. Take yang for example, she has to punch people to do any major damage. That means getting in close getting around weapons etc even if just for a moment. This would be the same, you'd have to get under their guard and then all you have to do is touch them. That's before considering the additional bonus that the healing gives you in a competitive setting, especially as no other character has any way to heal.

[OneWayOut]

I see your point, but I still don't think you're taking into account how fast typical battles go and why it wouldn't end up like you think. Forgive me, but I'm hoping we can come to some sort of understanding about this with us both being happy. I'm really urging this idea because I like it a lot and want to keep it as is. Hopefully I can explain it properly.

Whilst Understand that it limits the use of it, it is still possible. As it stands at the moment lets say you were fighting Cardin, you hit his mace. He blocks your attack, now all you have to do is stay there and drain him dry. If he holds his block he loses, if he tries to attack you, you can quickly strike him repeatedly still drawing aura from him and damaging his aura with conventional attacks. It's the same if you fought someone with a shield like Jaune if he blocks you, you could simply stay and drain him dry.

@Karos

If you really think about it, attacks that are blocked are immediately followed by some sort of counter move. The idea that my character would stay there for any period longer than 3 seconds is unlikely. She won't just stand there and leave herself open to an attack just to try and drain his aura. If she were fighting Cardin, she'd have to keep hitting him, taking his aura in small bursts through her attacks, knowing he's a heavy hitter and one strike from him could do some serious damage. If her move was blocked, she'd immediately fall back to avoid getting hit. Block or not, there will be no point in time where my character is going to just be standing still long enough to drain someone to the point of them being in immediate trouble of losing. Her Semblance works gradually, not all at once.

If you have to make contact with a person however its a bit more balanced. Take yang for example, she has to punch people to do any major damage. That means getting in close getting around weapons etc even if just for a moment. This would be the same, you'd have to get under their guard and then all you have to do is touch them. That's before considering the additional bonus that the healing gives you in a competitive setting, especially as no other character has any way to heal.

@Karos

You can't really compare my character to Yang because she can take a hit, where as my character is more like Weiss, one strong hit can knock her down for some time. As I said before, being restricted to physical touch is unreasonable because she literally would have to poke someone like a hundred times before getting anywhere. She strikes fast with her weapons, which, may I add, further restrict the physical part seeing as she'd have one hand on her Rapier at all times. Assuming she wasn't using her dagger in her other hand, i still cant see her attacking and then just quickly patting someone with her free hand. It just can't work that way in my opinion.

[Karos]

@OneWayOut Okay I'll give you a compromise then. I let you keep the ability as is, however if I feel it's becoming excessive or too overpowered, we switch to the other version. Does that seem fair?

[OneWayOut]

@OneWayOut Okay I'll give you a compromise then. I let you keep the ability as is, however if I feel it's becoming excessive or too overpowered, we switch to the other version. Does that seem fair?

@Karos

Deal!

[Karos]

@OneWayOut Okay good, I didn't want to be too harsh as I see why it'd be a cool ability and you seem keen to take part. I just don't want to get any situations where your character just takes out all the opponents just by draining them.

[OneWayOut]

@Karos Trust me, I won't abuse her power. It's more fun to make it a challenge. But yeah, hope I didn't come across too forceful as well. I was feeling so passionate XD

[Karos]

@OneWayOut Well passion's always good for an RP.

But now that's all cleared up, you can get posting. :)

[OneWayOut]

im well rested and ready to write!

[Karos]

This episode! This episode! GAAAHHH

http://roosterteeth.com/episode/rwby-season-3-9