[OOC] The New Frontier: A Marvel/DC One Universe RP

[Sep]

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I'd been saving that one but...NAY!!

@TimeMasterX

[Morden Man]

I'll be working on getting up both my Cap and Ivy posts up today. (But I did something to my back... and sitting for too long is painful. So if it doesn't go up, I've primed my excuse!)

@Blue Demon

Hey! Who needs a back anyway? Heh, in all seriousness though, I hope your back is alright. Back pain is one of those things that you don't realise is a big deal until you have it. One of those "quality of life" things.

[Blue Demon]

@Morden ManEh, I live with it. I'll never truly go away at this point (Yay for having a bad back. I've been working around it for a few years now. If only I could go back to my teen days when I didn't have these problems yet). I'm doomed to get even worse too. No matter how much I take care of it. (Go Family Medical History of Bad Backs! And Knees. I'm just waiting for my knees to go out in my thirties. I baby those suckers like no tomorrow. Walking is too good to give up!) But your well wishing is appreciated.

I'm working on Ivy as we speak type. :)

[Sep]

Trying something a little different with Hulk here than I've done elsewhere. Rather than just describing what he's doing I'm trying to give y'all a view of what's going on in his head.

Feedback is heavily appreciated :P

[Blue Demon]

Ivy's up.

And it kind of ended up a lot more morbid than I planned. Maybe I shouldn't have switched POVs? I had just done it on a whim, but I did not expect that result. :|

(And it looks like we just got 3 posts in quick succession. Go us!)

[Sep]

Ivy's up.

And it kind of ended up a lot more morbid than I planned. Maybe I shouldn't have switched POVs? I had just done it on a whim, but I did not expect that result. :|

(And it looks like we just got 3 posts in quick succession. Go us!)

@Blue Demon

Woulda been funnier if I took longer.

Then it woulda went from Clark weeding to Ivy.

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Make that Four.... but are they fantastic?

[Sep]

-Doublepost-

[Morden Man]

4 IC posts in twenty minutes? Well, today isn't quiet.

[Blue Demon]

I'm impressed myself.

Trying something a little different with Hulk here than I've done elsewhere. Rather than just describing what he's doing I'm trying to give y'all a view of what's going on in his head.

@Sep

You asked.

Hider

1) Spelling error:

the smallest move could elad to ....

lead not elad. Obviously.

2) I did like the view into Banner's head. +1

3)

As soon as the small and fragile form of Bruce Banner doubled over the bullets started firing, soldiers moving around him as quickly as possible to evacuate nearby dwellings. What they didn't realize was that the worst thing they could possibly have done would be to shoot at him. As he doubled over his fists went down onto the ground, however instead of the pavement standing firm it was broken by the impact of the two growing and now green fists. He looked up at them, anger in his eyes as he did so, bones grinding and clicking into place as his entire form changed. Then as he stood tall he ripped off what was left of his shirt in what could only be described as a roar. He then turned to look at Ross.

In tense action scenes shorter sentences convey quickness, a sense of dire-ness, not having enough time to react. I found myself immersed until this point (That I bolded). In my opinion something like:

The small and fragile form of Bruce Banner doubled over. Bullets started to fire. Soldiers moved around him quickly. Seeking to evacuate all they could. Green fists hit the ground. Pavement caved from the force. Broken, shattered, ruined. Green eyes full of anger looked up. Bones grinding and clicking into place. Banner was gone. Hulk stood up. Shirt tearing off as his great chest expanded. His earth shaking roar filled the room. Then silence as he turned to Ross.

But again, that's just my opinion. But I still thought it was good. Very interesting (despite the fact I'm not a fan of the Hulk/Banner)

[Sep]

I'm impressed myself.

<Snipped quote by Sep>You asked.

Hider

1) Spelling error: <Snipped quote> lead not elad. Obviously.

2) I did like the view into Banner's head. +1

3) <Snipped quote>
In tense action scenes shorter sentences convey quickness, a sense of dire-ness, not having enough time to react. I found myself immersed until this point (That I bolded). In my opinion something like:

The small and fragile form of Bruce Banner doubled over. Bullets started to fire. Soldiers moved around him quickly. Seeking to evacuate all they could. Green fists hit the ground. Pavement caved from the force. Broken, shattered, ruined. Green eyes full of anger looked up. Bones grinding and clicking into place. Banner was gone. Hulk stood up. Shirt tearing off as his great chest expanded. His earth shaking roar filled the room. Then silence as he turned to Ross.

But again, that's just my opinion. But I still thought it was good. Very interesting (despite the fact I'm not a fan of the Hulk/Banner)

@Blue Demon

How dare you help when I asked you too!

[Blue Demon]

@SepSadly, I've gotten that response legitimately before. :o

[Kingfisher]

4 IC posts in twenty minutes? Well, today isn't quiet.

@Morden Man

Full disclosure; I cant produce posts nearly as quickly as y'all.

Doing my best here, but I cant manage much more than two a week.

[Sep]

@SepSadly, I've gotten that response legitimately before. :o

@Blue Demon

Nah I appreciate the help, the transitional sequence between Hulk/Banner (Such as the bit you highlighted) I feel has always been one of the hardest ones to write. So I do appreciate the input.

[Morden Man]

@Kingfisher Heh, I wish there was some rhyme or reason to posts coming all at once sometimes but I think it's just a happy coincidence. Ultimately all but one of those posts were standalone so there's no pressure to get round to reading them straight off the bat. You take your time and tell the story you want to tell at the pace you want to tell it. As long as you're happy with what you're putting out, I'll be happy with it.

[Blue Demon]

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Nah I appreciate the help, the transitional sequence between Hulk/Banner (Such as the bit you highlighted) I feel has always been one of the hardest ones to write. So I do appreciate the input.

@Sep

I hope it helped you some. I've always struggled with being too long winded in sentence length (during action scenes like that). Just something to think about for next time.

[Sep]

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I hope it helped you some. I've always struggled with being too long winded in sentence length (during action scenes like that). Just something to think about for next time.

@Blue Demon

It is actually a more interesting way to do the transition.

[Kingfisher]

[@Modern Man] Thank you for your understanding. I'll try my very best to keep posting at a respectable rate.

Great writing all round, BTW everyone. Some really awesome stuff.

[TimeMasterX]

Oh, if anyone finds the little easter egg cameo in my last post you win...umm...a virtual high five :P

[Sep]

Oh, if anyone finds the little easter egg cameo in my last post you win...umm...a virtual high five :P

@TimeMasterX

I'm pretty sure I noticed that Thor was in it.

Am I right?

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In terms of why Colossus has his own post it's because it looks neater, and doesn't have me double posting.

[TimeMasterX]

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I'm pretty sure I noticed that Thor was in it.

Am I right?

@Sep