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@Siber
Very nice. I've fixed it for you, so it's similar to the others.
i.imgur.com/9lq5Kl8.png

@Krash
I've got yours too here, so you can put it in the character sheet.
i.imgur.com/1JMOdVE.png

@Prosaic
Are you still with us? Giving you a nudge, either way.
@DeadDrop
Cool concept. Got me thinking of all those Top Gun: Maverick trailers that the YT feed has been spamming me.

What you can do is to add a little bit about Robert's reputation as an Aeon, generally. And then, maybe something about his time in the Navigation Division—just to expand the Chronicle just a little bit.

A strong mix of Fire and Earth spirits would work for what you describe as the destructive side. That is, this mix would entail a more molten/lava kind of fire, "hellfire" as you worded it.

While the picture is terrific, are there any 'real life' options? If not, then that's fine too, but have a look around if you haven't already.

@Siber
Very nice. This is the caliber I was looking for—great comeback.

I have just one tiny thing to comment on, which is a lore thing. You wrote this: "back when the UDF was pairing Archons and Human soldiers together". Did you mean to say "Aeons and human soldiers"? That was and still is the primary means of doing things in the UDF. They have Aeons lead groups of human soldiers wherever possible, but Archons do not meddle with human affairs in this sense. Archons are more likely to disrupt human efforts or interact with them on a very personal one-on-one basis.

Also, the picture—great choice, although a bit low resolution. Did you look for a 'real life' option? If you still want the metal arm sleeve to be visible, we can include a separate picture of concept art, just like @Archangel89 has a separate image for his character's weapon.

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Tagging the rest of you here: @RezonanceV@Martian@Krash@FollowthePath
I've generated a world map using some site, which was kind of neat. I've added a black band across the whole thing to indicate the comet's orbit. This will be the main war zone or 'dark zone' for the conflict, you could also call it 'the scar' or something like that.

So, those of you who created locations, look at the map and determine where they would be, so that I can add them there.


Direct link:i.imgur.com/2TwD3Lx.jpg
My last post here was 13 days ago, which feels like yesterday. The post before this one, right now, is 4 days ago, which feels like 2 weeks.
@DeadDrop
Nah, it's not quite that rigid. Everyone can be one, if the need arises. But, there is always personal preference.

@Siber
Hah, it wasn't a bad job. It was a good start.
@Prisk

You explained it well! :)

I think lol.

Let me reframe and see if it adds up the same on your end. Aeons are hosts to Spirits. Spirits are controlled by their hosts. Spirits execute moves/attacks/techniques through the host's body via their permission. Therefore, the blood manipulation is being done by the Spirit, not the Aeon. The Aeon is simply directing the Spirit's actions?


Yes, spot on. So, what I want to say is that you can treat blood as an element. I simply listed the common ones seen, but they're by no means the only ones. And then, either apply the techniques I listed as well or apply one or more of your own, but stick to them. I did it this way to sort of balance it all out and prevent participants from making up things/powers on the fly. That is not to say that it's impossible to learn new techniques, but it should be like any other skill in life, which takes time to master.
Sorry if this seems slow. The whole forum is slow these days, so I'm trying to adapt to it by slowing down myself. Hopefully everyone is still with us.

@FollowthePath
Ah, got it. No, no, the levitation can stay—it's a neat trick, indeed.
Could you put your character sheet in the character tab into a 'hider'? That would be awesome.

@Krash
Don't worry about it! I don't mention it anywhere in my text that it's a fictional world—it's not even implied. So, don't beat yourself up. Put your character sheet into the character tab whenever you are ready.

@Martian
Cool, cool. Put your sheet into the character tab whenever you are ready.

@Siber
It's a good start! I think I need a bit more, though. Check the character sheets from the other players here and try to match their caliber, to the best of your ability. Even if I'm pretty liberal with character sheets, it does require a little bit to get to know the writer behind it.

@RezonanceV
Awesome concept. Truly, great backstory as well. I just haven't thought about the relation between blood and spirits, yet. Technically, if spirits are in everything, then blood must be part of it somehow. I'm terrible at explaining this, but 'Aeons' don't control their 'magic' directly, but rather control the 'spirits' associated with that magic/power. So, any kind of arbitrary manipulation such as 'something-kinetic' wouldn't be what is happening. Instead, your character would know a couple of moves/attacks/techniques that his spirits are willing to do for him, which gives the impression of 'blood magic'. Did this make sense at all? I don't think I'm wording it in a good way.

@DeadDrop
I can't escape you, can I? I tried to put everything I've done so far together. You are always welcome, of course!
@Archangel89
Great. Here's your character image. Put it together with the sheet in the character tab: i.imgur.com/GBPZXMw.png

@FollowthePath
Looks great! I don't have much nitpicking to do. I was on the fence about the levitation, but why not. It might as well be a technique. I'm just going to remind you of the timeline. The comet arrived ten years ago, which would put your character at 16 years old at the time. Your Chronicle is vague enough to fit with any scenario here, but right now it seems like your character was going to become an Aeon even without the comet event, which is totally fine. Am I right in this? I'm just curious. Here is your character image for scale: i.imgur.com/3ynKZf0.png . Put it in the character tab with your character sheet. Was the code for the character sheet difficult to copy? I can fix it for you, if you want.

@Martian
Man, I recognized the very first part of that theme song like crazy. It took me a while to place it, but it's heavily used in the Jason Bourne movies. Great nostalgia.

So, this world is a fictional world. Usually, I write a whole bunch of lore for each area of a map that I include, but I didn't for this iteration. The only thing I'd ask you to do is to replace all the 'actual' world places such as San Fransisco with a fictional name. You can make these names up. Do this for all places and that University.

Also keep in mind the timeline. The comet arrived when your character was 13. I think your chronicle makes sense in terms of timeline, but I'll just put the reminder here, anyway.

Other than that, it's great! I've edited your picture for the character tab: i.imgur.com/7iT0HiE.png .

@Krash
Awesome. I think the timeline is a bit wonky here. I understand that it's easy to miss, though. The comet/Stigma arrived 10 years ago, which would put your character at 26 at the time. I think you have to edit your Chronicle for this sake. Think about it and make the edits that you want, and then I'll look at it again. This is my fault for not making it more clear in the Premise text.

Also, this world is fictional. So, think about a name to replace "Crete" with. It can be a similar place in terms of geography/environment, but it should be fictional nonetheless.

@Siber
Absolutely there is room! Welcome.

@Archangel89
Nice and to the point, clear cut backstory. I'll run your character image through photoshop for size and filters when I'm home again. Check your text for spelling, though. After we've done these things, we can put your sheet up in the character tab. You are still fast, as always.

Edit: You could add a few lines about Aaron's reputation as an Aeon. This is what everyone else will know your character by, if they haven't met before.

@Prosaic
Awesome.
We staying healthy? My body is fucking ready for another post.
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