OddnessApproved

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Sounds good to me!

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I do know she'd likely have some more Star Wars tier tech like laser weapons, my question was more along the lines of how quickly do they innovate in the weapons tech department? Like for example the graphics card in your computer can be significantly outdated in less than a decade. I guess what I'm trying to find out is how old should she be? I know you don't need an exact age, but I'm guessing you'd appreciate something narrower than, say, anywhere between 30 and 80 years old, lol.

So let's say there are cooler cyborg arms out there with artificial muscles, more in line with the MGR type design, how long until her buyer went "wow, the new models are way better?" Is her family still alive after all this time? That's where my head's at, in the finer details before I grab the CS and write the story version of all my ramblings.

@Emeth

I would say towards your reference of star wars tech like laser weapons. She is probably last generation. Which means her age would be 30 to 10 years old.

I think Atlas is just getting out of the stages of Star wars, Avatar, etc... Type of technology and they are advancing past it.

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I do think I want her to start in Atlas and end up on the surface later, yes. Probably not very happy with the government, so she'd be with the activists/rebels. If her tech is (relatively) old at the time of the RP it makes sense that even if she once served as a bodyguard for some rich guy when her tech was state-of-the-art she'd probably have been sold once something better came out, and no matter where you go it seems the military is generally not a very picky customer. Maybe her rescuers didn't even have to deprogram her, they simply caught her and a few others in transit when ownership was being transferred and just booted her up again before she could be fully reprogrammed. One day she's signing paperwork in the hospital, and the next thing she knows her heads-up display is telling her that an error has occurred: orders cannot be retrieved, report to your CO immediately.

Depending on how fast technology advances in this setting, a lot of time may have passed, do you have an opinion on that?

@Emeth

Taken from the lore section of the thread:

"Atlas/Atli the majority of these places are nicely kept and have advanced technology. They brought all their old technology down from the old world which is now referred to as the surface. The technology they did bring down is the foundation for what they have now which would be around the lines of bio-metric, laser weapon technology, artificial intelligence, robotics (similar to what they use in Avatar), wearable computers (example: Pip boy from fallout), etc..."

This is a general description of what they are capable of on a basic foundation of technology. If you want to get into a deeper thought of Sci-fi technology except underwater. I would recommend reading Sci-fi books, movies, or even reading the "Technology in Science fiction" wikipedia page for a better reference till I am able to flesh out a line!

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I mean. Maybe it was just a weird server error, but I saw an image of, I guess, what looked to me like WoW universe OCs, a red devil-looking girl and a green guy, in a western comic style—no overly cutesy faces or any grossly exaggerated body proportions though, so I thought maybe that might be more of what you meant by "anime," and took a chance that something with a grittier mood might be accepted, even if the art style shared the namesake. It did look out of place, which is why I asked about it. I see what I assume is the correct image now.

You didn't give me an "oops, wrong image" or anything in your response, and I wasn't sure how to take that other than an emphatic "oh my god weeb trash alert, ew no, let me change the rules really quick." The third image is probably the least realistic of the three, but still considerably more detailed than what I put forward, so now I just look like an idiot, and... yeah. It seemed like a lost cause to try to defend any of my ideas. If "cloudinary" (never heard of that hosting site) pulled a fast one on me, I apologize for the sass.

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If body integral weapons are a problem for story reasons, like it needs to be possible for her weapons to get taken away, that's possible and we can work that out. If it helps, I did imagine her as more of a mechanical, "primitive model" whose armaments could be disabled or broken by sticks and stones if they were shoved in the right joints with enough force. On the plus side, her arm mechanisms would be primitive enough that surface dwellers could repair them—her brain, not so much. I'd want her to feel out of her element on the surface, handling surface weapons—like her arms could be disabled, someone hands her a bow and arrow and she's like "uh... what am I supposed to do with this?" I think that being a cyborg with heavy metal arms already gives her a huge advantage, so making her good with weapons in general (thank you for reminding me of the Jackie Chan ladder fight) is too much of a good thing. Filling those arms with weapons that can get jammed, twisted off, waterlogged, or just plain overheat when used too much gives me a bit more confidence in saying "yeah, this is balanced."

Following on that point about feeling out of place, I did want her to look at least a little inhuman at first glance; not uncanny valley terrifying, but just enough questionable features (white hair, red eyes, too-perfect face for example) that surface dwellers would know that she's not human and distrust her at first, even if she were dressed like one of them. Thought a "grittier" anime style might provide just enough of that effect, but now that we're here, try this on for size instead:

Hider

A fully artificial being suddenly becoming sentient would probably have a lot of explaining to do! By cyborg, I meant that she is part cybernetic, part organism. Imagine something at least somewhat human-looking on the outside, like the cast of Metal Gear Rising, but more mechanically primitive on the inside, like General Grievous from Star Wars Episode III. She used to be a normal person, once—possibly a terminally ill patient who hastily agreed to become what she did to go on living in some capacity, while her poor family receives a pittance in exchange for her service, her brain and some choice organs. As for why they wouldn't just make an android with a system that runs 100% on artificial intelligence, maybe this is a cheaper option, or maybe some powerful people are just sick and enjoy the thought that they have complete control over something that used to be a person with free will.

When I say she was rescued by activists, I didn't mean surface dwellers, but some "free the cyborgs" type people from below. If such a group doesn't exist, or aren't capable of disabling and kidnapping a cyborg, I'm fine with the receiver in her brain or whatever was controlling her having a factory defect, and my girl just casually playing it cool until she saw a chance to escape. I chose the deprogramming angle so that she could lose her memories from that time along with it and not remember any forbidden story knowledge you wouldn't want her to have. So, she could at least have been in the service of someone influential and interesting, and not just some minor B-list celebrity or throwaway NPC—could probably use some ideas there, if you're fine with that.

Please let me know if she's a welcome concept now that I've cleared up some things.

@Emeth

It was not a glitch at all, I understood from your questioning that others would mistake such a style as anime in the future, so I went ahead to change the third reference picture to something a little more pleasing.

Also, Emeth, I hope you understand we (the staff) are not here to attack you at all. We are not going to call you names or do a ‘weeb alert’, we could care less if you are a weeb or not. We just do not allow the anime picture references in this thread because it does not fit the program, that’s all.
With your statement about ‘defend any of my ideas’, you are always welcome to do that. Like I said above, we are not here to attack you. We are here to help and guide you through the roleplay, yes we might be strict with what we want, but we are not going to bash you about it.
Yes, we will comment, we will exame, approve, and disapprove, but we are not going to high tail you out of here because we don’t fully agree with a concept you share.

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About your character, she is completely fine having advanced weapons on the surface. She would just have to derive from the Atlas society (even if it was a long time ago).
The reference picture you have chosen is completely fine as well! I do like the idea of an artificial being becoming/attempting to be sentient, and I think your idea is completely fine in that way.

For your idea about the ‘free the cyborg’ activists, there could definitely be a group in the Atlas community. They are advanced enough to make, understand, reprogram, etc… such robotics.

On all your ideas, I would like to suggest a route maybe? If you do not like it, it is completely fine, but you say you want her to have weapons. She could have been an older model for the Atlas Military or mining crew. This would cause her to have weapons and this could cause the activists to want to kidnap her and reprogram her, so she is not a killing machine/guard.
Though, this could play into the story of your character having defaults in her memories about the mines, the government, etc… depending on how you want to go with it. You could either help the side of the Atlas government, the people, or escape to the surface (if you do not want to be on the surface already).

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Hahaha, lool. I fucked up. :P

Hmm,

In order to keep the surname. Perhaps her husband took her name?

@DarkStar

Nah, you're all good! I should have specified genders, but I didn't actually think somebody was going to want to be a descendant, haha.

I feel like that is very reasonable especially in a more modern society at the time and situation.

Edit:

I feel like a guy who married one of the 'creators' of the Atlas would rather take her name versus his, because everyone would know them.

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Sarah Kruze

Name: Sarah Kruze
Age: 22
Height and weight: 5"3 103 lbs

Appearance

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Where are you from? The Colony Atlas

Quick skills: Convincing lying, good with children and able to throw her voice.

Advanced skills: Hacking, self-taught from a young age. She found a glitch in a library terminal which she exploited to elevate her access from children's literature to more adult topics. Ever since then she learned more and more. Most of her knowledge comes from a small highly illegal book that resided in her families personal collection. Mechanical design and repair, this knowledge is mostly theoretical and comes from handed-down information through the generations and books from the family library. She has some limited experience from fixing the occasional clock and watch that survived the end of the surface. Electronics, again, mostly theoretical, since parts are quite rare indeed to tinker with and without a college education? Pretty inaccessible. This comes from the library and a few dozen books in the family library.

Backstory: Sarah comes from what was effective nobility. A descendant of Tenna Kruze, whom without, the Atili just simply wouldn't have existed. His skills in Multidisciplinary engineering skills were simply legendary and the family continued on in his name, every expansion and major project the Atili commenced had A Kruze at its helm or involved. That was until about 30 years ago when Lindon Azure became convinced through calculation that the surface world was habitable. Of course, the government had known this for some time, but Lindon was quick to try and spread that information in a way that was provable and easy to understand. The funny thing was, his father, and his father's father all knew this. It just was never spoken, they knew the culture of the government, they'd worked within its inner circles all their lives. He'd committed the gravest of sins, and he paid for it with his life. His son Andrew thought well of his father, and quickly dragged the family's name through the mud. By the time Sarah was born? The family's once-legendary finances were rotten. Much of the wealth of the Kruze family was in its connections and ability to get things done. With Lindon disappeared and his son obsessed with his father's work and vanishing the connections the family had maintained had dried up, once Sarah was of age for university? Well, they simply didn't have the finances, nor the connections to get her education to be formalized. It didn't mean she didn't have the legendary Kruze mind, it's just she didn't have that piece of paper to work in the fields they were famous for.

With that, Sarah began to fall in with the wrong crowds, rebels, degenerates, free thinkers. It only served to tarnish her family's name more, it didn't matter too much though, the reality was, the name was already mud. There was little she could do to recover, nor build the name back to what it once was. A few families stuck by them, but they were of lesser provenance and couldn't do much to help. Now? She's among the better hackers in the atli, and she's found quite some information that could get her vanished like her grandfather, she refused to let her dad in on anything, he was close enough to being disappeared as it was, but she wanted nothing more than vengeance on the government for their crimes. For that list is long and varied.

@DarkStar

Everything in the biography looks amazing! Though, I would like to mention that Asmus and Tenna the 'creators' of civilization. Tenna was actually a female. I know this isn't specified at all, but I would like to clear things up because you are deriving from one of the important people in history!

Plus, I think in the future when I think through it enough. We will be having a PM conversation about your character and maybe the way they can help the rebellion against the Altas government if that sounds fun!

With all said, after you make the minor changes, you can put your character right into the character section! congratulations!

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@HEAVY METAL

I hope you luck out there in finding a roleplay that better fits you and thank you for the wishes back!!!

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@Tsukai@HEAVY METAL I would say on the times and as surface dwellers, Cursive would be a quick skill and calligraphy would be a more advanced skill [since you need ink, a quill, and need to know how to use such tools]

I am with Tsukai on this, there are no countries/continents/really owned areas anymore. America, China, etc... have completely vanished and what is left of them are forgotten memories and ruins from the old world.
You have major areas like Oceania, Ortish, Caverns of Kilfi, and the Africans. You could make a sub-area for example:

"I come from a land that once was called Eastern Asia, but we are the land of the ___ monks.

I do agree, you can flesh the backstory out, but you do not have to do that right now. Also, you have to remember -- If your character is trained out of the Caverns of Kilfi when he goes to the Caverns, he will start out at square one no matter his age and experience of teachings. {Which could do a lot of character development; emotionally and mentally having to redo stuff]

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@HEAVY METAL

Once you have the backstory up and ready, I or Tsukai will be able to confirm your characters enrollment to the world. So far, your character has a great foundation!

ADD ON:

You can keep your first character 'Pops' up in the character area since you are allowed 2 characters or you can take him down before/after you are approved for your next character!

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To everyone, I have made a change at the end of the introduction to the world. It has declared that the characters and community of this thread can begin roleplay (after you have accepted characters that is!!). Good luck to you all and I appreciate all of your interest in this thread! <3