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6 yrs ago
Current Taking a hiatus - not sure when I'll be back.
6 yrs ago
It's incredible how if you give someone just the tiniest bit of power over others they'll turn into the most self-righteous, selfish, impatient fuckers you will ever meet.
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7 yrs ago
How are some writers on this site still incapable of knowing how a comma works?! It's like the second easy piece of punctuation you learn about as a kid!!!
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7 yrs ago
It'll always be confusing to me when some people regard two or three sentences in an IC post as putting in effort with the writing, yet they consider themselves at a casual/advanced level.
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7 yrs ago
Scottish twitter is doin something right lmao
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"Hi."

About Peridot


Nothing so far - will update soon!

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@Deadbeatwalking@MissCapnCrunch@KazAlkemi@Ejected@Elkhar@Garden Gnome@Aislynn@Fury Panda

Hey guys! Another update here - I have another exam coming up, so the IC won't be going live until at least the 12th. Sorry for yet another delay, and I promise I won't keep doing this, haha. Just a crazy week for me, I'm afraid. However, I've created a discord chat for us all, if that interests you guys!

@Typhon@NameUserOf@HushedWhispers@PhunkyPhoebe@TheHangedMan@SouffleGirl123@sassy1085@BlueSky44@Furiosa@BingTheWing
@PastelWriter@ZoeMcqueen95@Italicized@eldarionI@Fox

Would you guys be able to check in and let me know if you're still interested or not? It's just so I know for in the near future on whether to (maybe temporarily) close the applications when the IC launches. :)

I guess this issue isn't so much an a really prevalent annoyance, as it is... surprise, maybe, at finding it in the casual section where I most frequent (Could be in Advanced too, but I don't go there much). Or at the most, something that causes mild irritability; Guess I just wanted to throw it up here to see if anyone else agrees, or if I'm being too critical of people's writing style.

One thing I've noticed throughout various threads (Can't name any in particular, because plenty of people had done it, and this isn't so much a call-out post as it is just a way to see if I'm just being nit-picky), is a particular style of writing in which the writer has explained a situation in a really... boring manner, I guess you would call it? I'm no expert on english language terminology or rules, but I think it falls under the "Show, don't tell" rule. Instead of writing in an interesting way that their character is feeling scared, or shocked, or angry, they just state that and don't really elaborate on how that has then effected the expression of the character's face, their stance, their tone of voice, the atmosphere - stuff like that. Stuff that actually makes the writing interesting to read because the emotion has been described to make you believe it's happening, rather than just telling you it is and that's that. Not sure if I'm explaining it all that well, but hopefully you guys get the gist of what I'm saying.

I also got to thinking that I need to be more vigilant in making sure it doesn't happen in my own writing - looking back, I don't think I've written something that "lame" unless I've been struggling to write to meet a deadline or my creativity isn't working so well. But I could be entirely wrong, and I could have done it lots of times - rather be embarrassed by it over being called a hypocrite though. If I have done it, I'll be making damn sure it doesn't happen again, because I don't want people to be bored over my writing. (Could be happening regardless though lol).

So what do you guys think? Have you ever encountered this? Do you find it mildly annoying, or am I just being nit-picking? If you haven't noticed this particular thing, what is something that you've noticed other roleplayers do that annoys you? Thoughts would be welcome!
Nina van Essenhout



Location: The Facility





Despite the arrival of another enemy, Nina wasn't feeling particularly worried as of yet. Her group still outnumbered Laine and this "Wonderland", and while the metal bars were problematic, she was certain they'd find a way out somehow. Either from overriding something, or just Nina punching her way out - literally. The walls surrounding them didn't look capable of lasting very long against her strength.

Turning her attention back to Laine, it seemed he was starting to show his true colours a bit more. The charm slid off him like water on ice, and now, Nina could perhaps anticipate his actions. If not, it was simply refreshing to take his mask away. His words did nothing to scare her, though she was becoming more apprehensive of the female as time ticked on. There was a strange, almost manic look about her... a look on mental instability. Typical, of Magneto to recruit poor souls like this, but people like him always exploited and manipulated those they could get their hands on to gain power. And these poor idiots were under the impression that they were equals to him, not pawns to be spent in war. A similar thought crossed Nina's mind about Xavier doing similar things to the younger X-Men, but she'd made herself quite known on how she felt about his recruitment process. Magneto was just a bit crueller about it, targeting the mentally ill.

"And for curiosity's sake, what kind of information are you looking for?" She asked in a guarded manner, though not in the least bit perturbed by his threat. In all honesty, she was curious. From his tone of voice, this certainly seemed like something more personal than a request passed on from Magneto. Shrewd eyes swiftly picked up on the movement from Wonderland, and the adverse reaction that was occurring. Nosebleeds, plus a focused movement of her hand... she had to be using a power. Overusing, if the nosebleed was anything to go by. Using powers actively meant she would be distracted - which would make an attack much easier. All Nina would have to ensure was that no skin-to-skin contact occurred, as per Pietro's warning earlier. Thankfully, only a sliver of neck and her face was showing to the world, thanks to her combat outfit and gloves.





Charlie Farrier



Location: The Facility





Charlie was certain that he'd heard people mention an explosion at that place once or twice, but it seemed Cassandra had tactfully left it out. Clearly, it had been accidental. But then, Charlie couldn't blame people for inadvertent pyrotechnics, not with his own powers out of whack.

"At least nobody died, right?" He muttered, wondering briefly if he'd actually ended up killing someone already. Those boys from before... he'd left them in pretty bad shape, and he'd been avoiding news like the plague on the off chance he'd find out if one of them had died. They were assholes, true. But no older than him, with families. Lives. Hopes and Dreams.

Shaking the distracting thoughts from his head, Charlie glanced behind him as he heard noises in the distance. Screaming? He couldn't be sure. Still, Cassandra seemed to be fine, so he continued following in her footsteps, looking at her as she continued speaking to him.

"Sure - I'll be ready." He replied in what he hoped was a confident tone.
Will be posting tonight!
@Peridot


Oh, of course! I'd overlooked the Spanish-speaking aspect of it. Yeah, that would be awesome. I can already imagine their first interaction in Spanish - Eva would be thrilled to have found her. And I'm sure Honey knowing of Eva's crush would make for some humorous IC interactions haha. I agree with everything you've said!

Oh, and for Alistair - @Garden Gnome, too - how about the Seekers all have some kind of rivalry? Ali isn't really the competitive sort, but I'm sure he could have some sort of friendly ribbing with Honey and Heidi over Quidditch matches?

@Deadbeatwalking Ali and Iorweth are in the same House and year - could a friendship had sprung up between them, or would Ali's prejudice have been too off-putting?

@Fury Panda I've written Ali to be more intelligent and calculating than his sister, so I was thinking of having him take part in Wizard's Chess. Perhaps he and Amit could get along by playing? Up to you, my dude. :)
@MissCapnCrunch

Wow, that's incredible! All I've got is a little table to keep track of things so far, but this is awesome! Thanks for taking the time to do it!
Update folks - going to push the IC release date back to the 9th. Need to focus on revising for an exam unfortunately, but at least people will have a bit more time to polish off their characters and settle on relationships. On that note, here's some of my own suggestions:

@Ejected
Honey and Eva are both in the same house, year, and Quidditch Team - they also seem to have quite compatible personalities. Do you think they could have become best friends, or friends, in their years together? I'm also thinking of Eva having a crush on Andreas, though of course that can be entirely one-sided. Any thoughts?

@MissCapnCrunch
Are you still happy with Eva being friends with Beverly? As for Ali, while she may not like him due to his prejudiced ways, I don't think it would evolve into hatred or anything stronger between the two?

Haven't thought of anymore too much (still writing their backstories), but you guys can hit me up if you have any ideas.

Oh, and I'm also reopening all further applications in terms of houses. Females and Fifth years are still closed for the moment.
@Agent 47

No problem, thanks for letting me know! If you change your mind you're more than welcome to return, but otherwise best of luck in your other roleplays! :D
No worries. I'll amend the sheet accordingly with regards to the flexibility and the class (just felt like it was a nice touch).


Yeah, it's more my fault for not specifying that Muggle Studies wouldn't be around in the OOC, but no harm done.

The trilingual bit wasn't actually a reference to the differing dialects of Muggle society and the wizarding world - although I do think it's been mentioned enough in the stories that the differences between the two are enough to be a culture shock, which is what I was actually trying to imply here. I probably should have mentioned it more clearly, but I didn't really feel it added at all to the backstory's plot. He was raised speaking Russian and French at home, learned English with his father before moving to England and achieved fluency sometime before his arrival at Hogwarts. Also, I'm aware trilingual isn't a real word, but in my mind it ought to be. It fits lol.


The way you worded it was just confusing is all - to me, it implied that he'd learn a new language from the wizarding world, not just culture. Obviously, the cultural difference would be phenomenal. I think maybe just mention his fluent languages somewhere else in his CS, maybe the extra bit so it's not as confusing.

I know the faceclaims are two separate people because I got them from two different searches, but I figured they looked close enough for it to be passable. They have very similar features and while the first captures exactly how I imagined him when I started working on this, the second really captures the dance aspect. Maybe we can blame it on the change of lighting? I don't know, I really thought it tied together nicely. I can't actually tell how old the two look if I'm being entirely honest. I knew it was past 14, but I hadn't figured it to be older than 16, 17 tops. Initially I was creating him as a 5th year, but when you closed off new 5th year characters I switched the age and hoped it could be passable since I've made his birthday so close to the RP start. Figured if he's very nearly 15, he's bound to look a bit older. When I see his face, sure it's angular in a lot more places than you'd expect a 14 year old's to be, but can't we just call that a trick of the light and maybe some really defined cheek bones characteristic of his French lineage? To me, from the nose up he seems to fit the bill, but it's his jawline that's problematic. If that's the case, can we just scrub that detail from his overall description?

I guess I was mostly just hoping that the appearance section might be able to hold a bit more weight than the picture itself, because I really liked the fit for him. If it's still an issue though, let me know.


Agreed, they do look similar, but it's not the same person. It's more of a personal peeve of mine, but in my opinion, if you're going to have a picture represent a character, it needs to be consistent. If you're struggling to find a picture, you're more than welcome to just leave it out. Pictures are optional; as you said, the appearance section is far more important. For the fellows above though, they're far too old. From what sparse records on the internet can tell me, the first picture is of a 20/21 year old man, and the second picture is clearly far too developed to belong to a teenager, even if he is close to 15.
Here's my WIPs for you guys to take a gander at - just the backstory left to do, but there isn't much to write beyond them coming from a rich, prejudiced Pureblood family who Eva doesn't really like that much, and Ali is scared of. Let me know if you want a relationship with them!



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