Zapdos

Rise of the New Heroes

@Zapdos

Heyo! Pretty tempted here, but what I want to put in here may or may not work, because of the plot of the virus crossed with this has alot to do with time. A while back (I don't exactly remember when.), I started experimenting with a character whose life in crime-fighting was an experiment of the practical ups-and-downs of having time-related powers. (It was inspired by The Girl Who Leapt Through Time, among other things.) That was how I came to make Chronos, and then I made not only her alternate self (Timekiller), but a slew of other characters that were essentially the same person with somewhat-differently-nuanced time abilities and skills, each one hailing from another timeline where things are radically different. Because of the virus that killed off the supers, the time-related hero of this universe would've been killed, as well. So, unless you'd allow this one to have managed to use her power to 'skip' the virus, I dunno if I can use this one.

I could probably come up with something else, though, if we're lacking a particular dynamic. Let me know!

@FalloutJack

Yeah, the bolded would be one reason I'd have to say no. Also, the PCs are are rookie heroes who are literally just starting out, not people who have been doing this a while, so it wouldn't be a fit with the rest of the cast. Plus the time power would likely be OP anyway.

I appreciate the interest though! I'm not sure we're missing anything, but the more the merrier. I will say we're already planning how to integrate the two new PCs with the cast though, so I'll have to close the RP to new entrants once that happens.

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@Jarl Coolgruuf no problem!

The explanation of his defensive power is good, so thanks for that.

Alright, that makes sense. I don't really care so much about random henchmen or w/e, but my concern is that a supervillain or some other major character gets super strengthed to death super quickly, which is just boring story telling. I think as long as you're careful with that, I'm good with it.

Your character is approved! I'll send you the link to our Discord server.

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@Jarl Coolgruuf I liked the CS! Biography wise, the only thing I'd say needs to be changed is him knowing other people have powers. The people whose powers were "awakened" weren't really visible until the fight with Thundercloud. It's a small detail though, so I'm not too worried about it.

As for his powers, as long as he isn't instantly OTKOing supervillains with his strength, I think it'd be fine. I like the lack of control, it makes things interesting. One thing to clarify though, how much defensive ability does he have?

For the most part though, those are fairly minor clarifications/changes. I think it's a good CS and with that clarity I'll be able to approve it.

@Mintz I like your CS! If his power ends up being underpowered, I think there's a lot of room to grow, and Whitley could become a strong waterbender-esque character in time. I'll go ahead and send you the link to the Discord, welcome aboard!

@Jarl Coolgruuf @Mintz something to think about is what your characters were doing the night Thundercloud attacked. I don't think it makes sense to retcon your characters into the Thundercloud fight, so it's just something to consider.

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@ZapdosI think I might've mis-stated some things. Firstly;

1: Pete doesn't have much control over said adhesive quality at the moment, and even once he does, it won't change the fact that as far as stopping power goes, he's very lacking; he's only good for stalling adversaries unless he can put his noggin together for a creative solution, which he...Understandably struggles doing. Or assist other people, but in general this team lacks much stopping power right now lol.
2: I mentioned it rather simply. While killing him is a questionable prospect, if you can force him into something, like a jar or the sort, his liquid-like form will shape to fit the new home, and while he's stuck like that, he'll be unable to change back until he can re-assume at least a human-like shape in his slime form. Also, while he won't be dead, it's possible to tear/blow his slime body into pieces, making him take time to reform, which can take several minutes; a lot of valuable time to be effectively out of commission in a combat scenario.
3: This was just me overstating a bit; it can dissolve most things with time. Such as him absorbing theatre garbage and letting it stew for a couple of hours. It is by no means an instantaneous process, and things that strike at him aren't at any risk of being liquefied (until he can figure out how to concentrate that acidic quality some more).

Point is, yeah, he himself isn't under too much risk (unless he acts stupid....Which he certainly will), though he's vulnerable outside of this form. Not to mention, the tension is still there for him; while he's had a few times of being torn apart and put into pieces since his powers manifested, he isn't certain of the limit, nor is he eager to test it, whereas plenty of baddies would be happy to. And sure, maybe he won't have as much personal, bodily stake as some of the other heroes, but that means his stake is his fellow heroes. As the one guy both willing and able to put himself in harm's way, it falls on him to be the frontman of the group, so to speak, and any harm the others might take, he would likely feel falls onto him as the one who should be bearing that weight.

But overall, if I can't get this by, I'll shoot a different concept instead. Sometimes ya got the image in your head, and thinking of it any other way sorta scuffs the whole thing, ya feel? So I'll leave this in your hands.

@Mintz

Thanks for clarifying those points. While I do think that you addressed most of my concerns, the big one that remains is that a lot of the stakes disappear if Peter can't be killed. I'm not opposed to "tanky" characters if done right, but I think even limited invincibility is too much, so I have to reject the concept as it is. I understand not wanting to change the concept you have laid out, but I do encourage you to try the other concept you had in mind. As I said, Peter's biography was well done, and I enjoyed reading the CS.

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@Mintz your CS is interesting and I can tell you've put some thought into it. That being said, I think the power will need to be nerfed. Just a few things I noticed:

1) Peter lacks muscle, but he also has incredibly strong adhesive properties that can even beat people with super strength and can nullify most forms of harm, which seems to negate that weakness.
2) If the slime can reject/nullify most offense against it, how does one win against him?
3) If the slime can dissolve most things, it makes any physical weaponry effectively useless.

I don't know how much of the IC you've read so far, but something I've tried keeping consistent are that these are rookies who are facing real stakes. I won't spoil too much, but right now they're in the hospital after their first battle. If Peter can just regenerate himself fairly easily, a lot of the tension is effectively gone.

What I think could make sense is Peter being able to turn his arms and legs into slime and manipulating them, but not the rest of his body. That way Peter still has a variety of techniques he can use and it keeps the substance of the slime power in tact, but it brings the "power level" down to a more manageable level and there are real stakes for the man every time he fights. I think the adhesion is fine too if it's a little more grounded, so to speak; for example, he could stretch his slime to the ceiling to swing from it like Tarzan, but he can't envelope a super strength villain with it. Maybe he can harden the slime to the density of a normal human body so he can do stretchy punches with it too. I'd say the slime would have to have some vulnerability as well; something like if one bullet goes through it, it's fine, but if a slime arm gets sliced by a sword, it's gonna detach from Peter's body.

Does that make sense? I tried keeping everything organized but I feel like I rambled a bit there. What are your thoughts?

That all being said, the character's background and biography are great and I think the slacker dynamic would be an interesting fit with the team. It could be explained that Peter was really high the night everyone else fought Thundercloud, and so missed the battle :P

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A Hero RP that isn't dead? Well gosh darn, sign me on!....That, and I really dig the variety of abilities in the cast that I've read, even if it makes me a bit concerned I won't come up with somethin' that good lol. Oh well! Regardless, I'll see about posting up a CS sometime soon-ish

@Mintz

We aren't dead, but the post rate is pretty slow :P We do have a great cast though with a variety of abilities and @MagratheanWhale did rejoin us yesterday (99% of the OOC chat here is on our Discord server, which I provide to everyone who is accepted) so I'm confident in the long term success of this RP.

The main thing to remember for powers is that these are new heroes, not ones with a ton of experience, so you aren't going to be a pro with your powers right out of the gate. Keep that and the rules in the OOC in mind and you should be good to go, and as always, let me know if you have any questions!

Mystery of the Key - a Collaborative Writing Story

Ahh that is sad. I only saw your message now. I have been sick for some days.
Starting to feel better though.
I could be able to write tomorrow, unless someone else is up now.

@Stuzzie

I'm sorry to hear you were sick, but I'm glad you're feeling better. Yeah, @fusagi is working on a post now as I hadn't seen you in like 3/4 days and I didn't want to keep everyone waiting.

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@Jarl Coolgruuf hi! It is still open, yes. If you have any questions, let me know. Otherwise, the CS template is in the first post of this thread.

I look forward to seeing your CS!

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@Zapdos I might consider joining. Looks like a good RP.

@Kiragan_Natsuki

Cool! The CS is in the first post of this thread. Let me know if you have any questions!

Looking for More Writers for a Superhero RP

Hi there! I’m running a roleplay called Rise of the New Heroes. We have a small but cool group of people ( @Rekker @threetoads and @Medili ) and we’re looking for new writers to join our group!

This roleplay is about a new set of rookie heroes and their struggles to fight evil and grow. These aren’t heroes that have mastered their powers; these are inexperienced people who have and will face real stakes in their journeys as super heroes.

The short version of the plot so far is that a virus killed all of the people with superpowers; that is until a week ago, when a meteor struck, and (coincidentally or not) some people got super powers. Then those people came together to stop a notorious (and super racist) supervillain who should have been dead because of the virus. Now they’re in the hospital, recovering and getting to know one another.

It’s a good time to join as the first big battle has finished up. If you’re interested in reading the RP so far to get an idea for what this is all about, here is a link to the IC: roleplayerguild.com/topics/186904-ris…

This has been a fun roleplay to write; if this sounds like it’d be fun for you as well, let us know!