@Raijin:
Alright Raijin... There are still problems here unfortunately. The Pilot is perfectly fine, but the Framework, I believe, may need to be overhauled.
I don't like this. It fulfills two roles; melee and ranged supremacy, and even though it can switch between them all, the weapon-grade would be on a level on a mass production level rather than on the experimental level like the others since the Nanobots are doing so much work. If you want, pick only one weapon, and one weapon only.
After a lot of thinking, I've decided that something like this shouldn't really be on a Pointman, as it belongs more so as a Special Power, or on a Sniper or someone from the back lines. I'm also making a special note of this because you would be stealing the thunder of someone else's role.
This is... very problematic. While I do like the idea of nanobots, I myself can seem many problems arising with it in the RP when certain fights do break out. Comparing that special ability to the others we have, it's VERY overwhelming, and it wouldn't make sense in-story for just one Framework to have such a power. I honestly think it would need to be changed to something else.
Edit: Oh, and also, there's a limit to only one Sign-up per Player.
@Green:
Pilot is good, although I would like you to remove the " and put in a mech with no real explanation other than "go there kill cruxi lol"." bit.
The Siegfried seems pretty good, and as long as the special ability doesn't make anything advanced, then it should be fine.
Accepted!
@Thanatos:
I really, really like Zan, to be honest.
My only concern is this!
Are you sure about keeping it like this? I am more than fine with you having it like this, but I want you to be sure you want it like this, based on your backstory. If you are, then it's fine.
As for ... -tries to say the name- ... the Framework, again, you are more than able to have some extra stuff for it. If not, they're both Accepted as they are!
I am really, really sorry, but I doubt there will be any magic in this setting. >_< I thought about it at first, but it didn't seem right with what I wanted in the end... I'm really sorry Dead Cruiser...
Alright Raijin... There are still problems here unfortunately. The Pilot is perfectly fine, but the Framework, I believe, may need to be overhauled.
Raijinslayer said
Primary Weapon-Type:Nano Omni-Matrix: A circular holographic matrixthat forms design frames for Nidhogg's Elite nano-bots, which are able to create more powerful weaponry than the O.I. nanos. It can form into any offensive weapon that it has the code for. At the moment, this include Greatsword, Assault Rifle, Dual Longswords, Concussive Wave Rifle, and Dual-sided Energy Blade.
I don't like this. It fulfills two roles; melee and ranged supremacy, and even though it can switch between them all, the weapon-grade would be on a level on a mass production level rather than on the experimental level like the others since the Nanobots are doing so much work. If you want, pick only one weapon, and one weapon only.
Raijinslayer said
Secondary Weapon Type: Battle Scanner: This device allows him to assess any situation as well as the weak points in any known enemy types. It can carry a contsant feed to the Izanagi during stealth Op's, as well as transmitting data on an unknown enemy for real time analysis. Can also tell him what kind of weaponry the enemy has if it's registered in the database.
After a lot of thinking, I've decided that something like this shouldn't really be on a Pointman, as it belongs more so as a Special Power, or on a Sniper or someone from the back lines. I'm also making a special note of this because you would be stealing the thunder of someone else's role.
Raijinslayer said
Special Ability:Ragnarok: Nidhogg overloads the Omni matrix in order to temporarily deconstruct itself into a swarm of nano's, except for the cockpit which is shielded from enemy fire. The swarm assumes the shape of a serpantine dragon-like creature, which then sets upon the enemy. Immune to small arms, it can charge through a frontline and wteck havoc, growing bigger and more powerful with every enemy that it deconstructs. It can also form itself into a more humanoid shape, which seems to almost warp between enemy's, as it cuts through them at high speeds.
This is... very problematic. While I do like the idea of nanobots, I myself can seem many problems arising with it in the RP when certain fights do break out. Comparing that special ability to the others we have, it's VERY overwhelming, and it wouldn't make sense in-story for just one Framework to have such a power. I honestly think it would need to be changed to something else.
Edit: Oh, and also, there's a limit to only one Sign-up per Player.
@Green:
Pilot is good, although I would like you to remove the " and put in a mech with no real explanation other than "go there kill cruxi lol"." bit.
The Siegfried seems pretty good, and as long as the special ability doesn't make anything advanced, then it should be fine.
Accepted!
@Thanatos:
I really, really like Zan, to be honest.
My only concern is this!
Thanatos said
•Hospitalized Special One: None of his immediate family, if any of his family is hospitalized it is unknown to him. (Meaning his Mom, Dad, Siblings, and Grandparents.)
Are you sure about keeping it like this? I am more than fine with you having it like this, but I want you to be sure you want it like this, based on your backstory. If you are, then it's fine.
As for ... -tries to say the name- ... the Framework, again, you are more than able to have some extra stuff for it. If not, they're both Accepted as they are!
Dead Cruiser said
Alright, question for my potential application: what is your stance on "magic" be in this setting? The source I'm drawing inspiration from uses it as the primary source of power for mechas and characters, and I'd like to port it over in such a way that would fit into this setting. I was considering writing in some really hand-wavy "quantum" mumbo-jumbo, but what do you think about it beforehand?
I am really, really sorry, but I doubt there will be any magic in this setting. >_< I thought about it at first, but it didn't seem right with what I wanted in the end... I'm really sorry Dead Cruiser...
