@Anonymous@AliceinRedHeels I think his personality is fine. Its like, he has this façade of being this scary guy, while being a kindred spirit on the inside. I don't see how that's too deviant. We could definitely use an intimidating guy who is actually really normal and likes to have a good time. I think we should give him a weapon that suits his personality like maybe rapiers. Rapiers are nice and quick weapons, I think it'd be good for an agile harlequin-esque fighting style.

I'm going to shamelessly copy Alice's formatting, because I think it looks nice and is something my character would totally do. This is what I have so far, I'm hoping to use my limited battery time to finish the biography while I wait for my brother at the hospital. Name: Hajsafi, Maya Alias in the DgtWld: Atomik Age: 24 Personality:

• +Intelligent: Given the amount of time Maya has spent in the DgtWld prior to being a connector, he is very well versed in how it works and any exploits that might be available.
• -Unmotivated: As such, Maya is adverse to doing any kind of work, so he prefers to do as little as possible. If anyone is going to do a job, Maya is more than happy to let them do it for him.
• +Defender: Given the way he has been treated in his life, watching or hearing someone being ostracized for no good reasons is a sore spot for Maya and will inspire him to act. If anyone is being ignored or bullied, Maya will step in immediately on their behalf to fight for them.
• -Naive: Given his lack of social interactions in the real world, sarcasm is something of a foreign concept to Maya. So is deceit. If something sounds plausible, Maya will believe it, and combining that with his need to defended the "downtrodden" can get him in a lot of trouble.
• +Upbeat: In contrast to his real life mannerisms, Maya actually feels so at home in DgtWld that he sheds the introverted shell that he has cultivated offline and becomes completely relaxed and optimistic, more in tune with his current avatar.
• +Loyal: Once he gets to know someone, Maya will back them wholeheartedly into whatever situation they may face, as long as it doesn't interfere with his previous tenets of not picking on the "weak gazelle" so to speak, or if he can find someone to do the actual work aspect of whatever needs to be done to follow.

Background: Maya is the only son of an Iranian immigrant father and a Japanese mother. He was born and raised in Niigata, while both his parents worked for a telecommunications company. His father was an electrician who moved post-Revolution and worked his way up the ladder of the union while maintaining a strict paternal structure in the home that when combined with his mother's cold passive attitude meant a very tough and rigid childhood for Maya. School wasn't much better. Lacking the immigrant populations of Tokyo and Nagoya, Maya's half-Iranian heritage made him stand out among his peers and he was a ripe target for bullying. This constant belittlement in all aspects of life made Maya very timid and quick to withdraw in the growing online world at a young age. He refused to take out his frustrations on other people though, even when putting bullets into brains when playing popular online games. Instead he let himself get lost in whatever he was doing online at the time, music and visuals carrying him away from Mehdi's fiery anger over his slightly imperfect grades, and Ayame's indignant stare at his few successes. Even in school, when Ono Kenji slammed him against the fence every day for a month straight after accidentally scuffing his shoe, that anger and hatred washed away while Maya was lost in the online world. When the DgtWld system was first gaining steam in Japan and the U.S., Maya was quick to hop onto the phenomenon. He saved for a few months to get one of the first MChips implanted and took to the virtual reality like a monkey to a hot spring. At first it was just a few secluded trips to his own private island to get away from it all and listen to music, but he started spending more and more time in the DgtWld. He was so enthralled by the potential this technology had, of being able to leave the physical plane behind and transport yourself anywhere you wanted your music to take you that he dedicated his studies towards making sure he could be able to contribute to such a beautiful achievement of modern science. This newfound dedication seemed to please his parents as well, so they let Maya continue on this course. Of course they didn't know Maya would do so well that he would be drafted to the Correctors squad. Not even Maya believed it at first, but once he got confirmation, he was thrilled to be able to have a more in depth role in protecting the world...as long as it didn't interfere with his time in virtual Antigua. Given the lack of a base in his hometown, Maya was assigned to the Tokyo unit, able to leave Niigata for the first time. However upon arrival, he was subjected to the same kind of harassment he thought he had escaped a while ago, and the first avatar he was presented with prior to gaining the access to creating his own was that of a teenage girl. It was a big laugh among the senior connectors but on his first few trips into the DgtWld in this avatar, Maya wasn't getting stared at. He wasn't getting called a terrorist. He felt...normal. And it felt good. It felt liberating. So liberating that he kept the avatar even after getting clearance to change, only tweaking certain aspects to better fit the weaponry that he decided to outfit Atomik with when she first came into being. Besides, if no one was supposed to know about his role, it made sense to Maya for his avatar to be as far opposite from his true identity as possible. Despite the personal growth that has come with his time as a Corrector, Maya is still seen as a social outcast in the real world. He is known to his neighbors in the small Aoyama District flat for being a shut-off student training for his certification as a network administrator and technician, when in reality, he's just waiting for the next opportunity to get back into the DgtWld and make what he sees to be a bigger impact.

@Hella Cute I'm glad you understood the persona I was aiming for. I should have clarified that, but I wasn't sure how to word it. I like the weapon suggestion. I'll get around to editing him a little later. Thanks for giving me some advice :)

@Anonymous - I think the biggest issue wasn't necessarily the character's personality- more likely the word choice."Samaritan" is not really a descriptive trait/personality trait. Samaritan is a type of person, not their personality. A better substitute would be "Moral", or "Considerate", or "helpful/caring". Likewise "Obscure" implies that your character is an oddball, strange, or mysterious- though what you described for "obscure" would be more along the lines of "Discreet" or "Guarded", maybe even "brooding". For "Meticulous" what you've described is just a form of OCD. OCD is something you have, not something you are. Maybe you mean instead "Indecisive"? or "Hesitant"?

@vietmyke Yes, I see what you mean. I will edit the word choices immediately. I apologize for the confusion. EDIT: I've replaced the adjectives to ones more suitable. Hopefully I have made them clearer now and have also done a quick weapon change. The background will have to wait until I have fixed up the first half of the character sheet.

@NeoAC Alright, lemme start off by saying that I LOVE the idea of music as a weapon in a world that runs off of music. I might have this next part completely wrong but, I don't think that all of the threats in the DgtWld exist outside of the DgtWld. I think that there are also a lot of viruses that need to be fought, so maybe if your music acted as a more physical blast than just high frequency sound?

Hah..sorry ^^; the last part of mine was more a general statement then really direct at anyone in particular. Suppose that's what I get for doing things while half-asleep. ~ Alice

I like the unique ideas people are coming up with for this roleplay. Two characters are opposite genders between reality and correctors and the weaponry choices are quirky. If I need anything else changed please let me know. School is going to end 3 hours so I'll get to the background then.

@Hella Cute I know right? I'm surprised no one else went for it right off. Once I started writing though I knew I was going to have the sonic guns XD. The Beat Cannons can definitely have physical capabilities. I just wanted to make sure I wasn't going too OP with the weapon's functions. But I have to figure it wouldn't be too hard for a sonic blast to have percussive powers on actual targets. I'll add that into the description.

Typed up a background for Takeshi so his CS is basically complete.

@Anonymous Wow. That's a busy fellow. O.o Having family members who live IN his household has some potential for some interesting situations, since Correctors can't tell ANYONE that they exist and even though he's got that nightshift job his income would be totally suspicious. I'm excited to see how it works out. :) I like the new names for the traits, they sound a lot better now. BTW, how old is his sister?

@Hella Cute I'm glad that the adjectives make more sense now, I appreciate the feedback. Yeah , I took the family factor into consideration. I sorta hinted at complications when he didn't dig into his father's death just in case it endangers his little sister. Adding that part about his dad stemmed from an idea I could use in the future for this story depending on how things go. And about his income, I'm sure he isn't the type to spend lavishly to the point that she'd notice something was up. His sister is 16 so she doesn't need to be babied. I should probably clarify that in the CS. Thanks!

@Genkai Since I bumped her age up a year is it okay if I make up like one or two new spells and run them by you before we get started?

@AnonymousAww... I was hoping we could have a little sibling play date >.<-3

@Hella Cute Well, nothing is set in stone so I could change that easily if you'd like. Kiku's siblings are 8 am I correct? So how does 9 years old sound. I was just thinking that keeping her independent would be easier for Takeshi, but managing a little sister at that age doesn't seem too bad. Plus, this would be the perfect excuse to have our characters interact more often if their younger siblings are close friends.

@Anonymous Yeah, that sounds okay, as long as it doesn't cause problems for your back story or anything. Kiku could totally babysit the twins and her during the day if she came over to Kiku's apartment. Maybe Kiku lives near their school and they can walk to Kiku's apartment together until Takeshi gets out of school

@Hella Cute Actually, that sounds perfect. I checked his back story and her age fits just fine. So 9 she is! Want to babysit Yoi too?

@AnonymousI think I'll pass on the cat, curtains don't come cheap. XD

Alright, I have updated the weapons section of my CS. May the rulers judge and find it acceptable.

I got my time table for the next semester. I will update the dates when I can be online too. Thanks for the suggestions and feedback. I will remember and keep them in mind when I make a new character. ^^ After another reread to fix some minor mistakes I will move my CS to the character tab. Thanks for accepting me~ P.S. Can Milos buy cute little present for the two younger siblings? XD So to have a reason to buy them, and doesnt feel like a guilty man for buying adorable cute dolls in a store for himself XD?