Description and personality are good but we'd prefer a bit more detail.
As I think Lone mentioned, a bit more history continuing into the present day would be good as well.
Just to be clear, these projections don't have physical matter, right? As in, if you create the illusion of Mike Tyson, Illusion-Iron-Mike can't actual beat the hell out of me, correct? Given his age, I'm okay with his having less in the way of concrete weaknesses, as it stands to reason he'd have better mastery of his powers. Not accusing you of anything, but you should stick with the fatigue angle if that's the main drawback-I've been in a fair number of RP's where people whose powers are physically exhausting are curiously able to keep at it for pages and pages on end...otherwise good. You could consider headaches, astigmatism/blurred vision, etc, from overuse as well. Is he only able to create visual projections? They can't be accompanied by other sensory details? (if so, he WOULD need a more definite weakness, as you could really subtly and effectively kill people by messing with all of their senses)
No, no physical matter. Think of it as a hologram: you can see it, but your hand would go right through if you try to touch it. Sorry that I haven't seen this before, I'll try to edit some more stuff in.
Also, the projection only affects the vision: there is no sound or smell or anything.
@MrDidact Your sheet check out - but you didn't put the info in the indents in a few areas (Attire, limits, weaknesses, interests, etc) and it looks weird compared to the parts that are indented.
Make those edits, and you can throw him in the character tab.
Those shall be fixed and explained, some of which right now.
His hair is naturally black and died white, will put into sheet.
the machete isn't in the sock it's tied on the outside of the sock (so it's attached to his leg) - could have explained this better, being edited into the sheet
And your right about the ability/weakness stuff, the stingers is a good idea, and i'll take away the exoskeleton and keep the wings.
For his motives,wants are things I wanted to keep in the IC, especially why he's been looking for and attacking people who run with The Pure. But I will add a personality.
Also only honey bee's lose their stinger when attacking something.
I don't want to sound snarky,rude or anything.thank you for pointing these out to me.
Okay, this sheet is the bare bones of the bare bones, but I wanted to get it out here so I don't get power-jacked again by accident:
Basic Information
Name:
Amy Suzuha
Nickname/Alias/Etc:
Heisenberg (no one’s ever told her that this name is a. incorrect and b. ripping off Breaking Bad), Supergirl by others
Gender:
Female
Age:
26
Height:
5’10’’
Weight:
68 kg
Home District:
Knightdale Rows (grew up in Eagle-Rock Row)
Appearance
Hair Color:
Black
Eye Color:
Dull Green (can be Bright Green in the right light)
Ethnicity:
Asian-American
Physical Appearance:
Attire:
Personality
Innate & Outward Personality:
Hobbies/Interests:
Skills/Talents:
Pickpocketing, lockpicking, breaking and entering, seduction (it’s for the best if you just remain distracted by the sexy and not ask where she learned to be so good at this), learned the basics of Krav Maga at some point but doesn’t find many occasions to use them
Prized Possession:
Quote(s):
*accompanied by repeated posing and teleport spam* ”I’m fast. Faster than you. Faster than anyone. Faster than a speeding bullet, faster than a meteor! Fastfastfastfastfast!”
History/Bio:
Relationships
Family:
None
Dynamics:
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Abilities
Power Class: Cosmic Elemental Power: Higgs Field manipulation Description: Amy's power allows her to directly manipulate the background Higgs Field that exists throughout the universe, giving particles mass. As such, she can selectively modulate and turn mass "on and off" for herself and any objects she's in direct contact with. This allows her to become completely massless and move at the speed of light or become incredibly dense and heavy and survive superhuman amounts of damage (imagine punching something as heavy as a mountain except in human form). It also affords her the illusion of super strength as she dials back the mass of something like a statue or a car to the point where it can be lifted and tossed effortlessly. Thanks to her power, the details of which are unknown by most, she's garnered a reputation as a powerful example of the stereotypical "flying brick". Limits: She has to be touching the object whose mass she wishes to affect. Weaknesses/Drawbacks: Most of her reputation is founded on misunderstanding and misinformation, as she actually has none of the powers attributed to her and her combat effectiveness is basically limited entirely to defense and running away. Using Higgs manipulation to become massless and move at the speed of light sounds formidable, but when she's in this state, or any state of decreased mass, her punches become correspondingly weaker as her overall kinetic energy decreases with her mass. At lightspeed, she hits like a light breeze. Similarly, since her super strength is also only an illusion, she can't actually move when she becomes super dense and heavy because her muscles can't produce enough energy to move her and she's likely to fall through the floor due to her increased weight (her heart will even stop functioning temporarily due to this effect, meaning her heavy mass state has a very limited timeframe of effectiveness). Even her ability to make heavy objects light, which sounds like a great way to throw cars at people, isn't combat-effective, because as soon as the object leaves her hands it regains all its mass and retains the same amount of force imparted on it originally (read: very little) and quickly drops like a rock. Taking all this into account, her only real option in a fight is to run or take the hits and hope her heart doesn't give out.
@Turboshitter That power is kinda ridiculous. She can travel at lightspeed, is super durable, and can render objects weightless, more or less. Even with the drawbacks, I don't really think it's balanced. Also... you know that traveling at lightspeed would basically send her across the planet like a thousand times?
Required Secondary Powers dictate she knows when to stop :P
Also, I explained in the drawbacks why it's nowhere as convenient as it first looks (not that I'm implying you didn't read it or anything). Her ability to interact with her surroundings when traveling at light speed is incredibly minimal due to being massless, and her abilities are practically useless for offense unless she feels like dropping herself from somewhere high up when she's super dense, which is both easily avoidable and likely to send her crashing down through the mantle like a bullet. Her super durability can be maintained for like five seconds at most before she needs a few minutes to a few hours to let her heart recover from being stopped for so long, and objects are only weightless when she's carrying them, meaning it's great for stealing stuff (which is what she does), but not so great for anything else.
Basically when she's confronted with adversity her only real option is to book it. Great for stealing stuff, not so great for superbrawls.
Barring the fact that this is dangerously close to gravity manipulation, which is banned, there's the issue that it's still way too easy to kill someone with it. She has to touch someone's head, make their skull way about a million times more than their spine can support, and even when their head drops past her finger, they're dead.
Not to mention that, since f=ma, if your character lowers their mass to move faster, they're still hitting with the same amount of force. In other words, near light-speed, your character hits with the same force while being impossible to hit back. Your character could also dodge any attacks thrown at them. Also, the ramifications of moving that quickly would utterly destroy them, as we already touched on with Didact's speedster, who runs into the same problems at far lesser speeds.
Her being able to increase her own mass means she can become pretty much invulnerable whenever she needs to, and there's not even the drawback of her falling through the floor because she can increase the mass of the floor beneath her as well.
Objects being weightless while she's carrying them is a nonissue. Again, run past someone with a car/aircraft carrier/family of rhinoceroses and drop it on them. She's gone because she can move so absurdly fast before they know what's happened. She could stop bullets as they hit her, do the same with punches, any objects, etc. Given that she can move at light speed, her being limited to things she can touch isn't that much of a drawback.
Your character is incredibly powerful and I don't see any way this power will work. I think a new one would be better.
Knightdale Rows. She lives in a row house here a few blocks from Academy 12. Her house is about three blocks from the beach as well.
Appearance
Hair Color:
Platinum Blonde
Eye Color:
Sky Blue
Ethnicity:
¼ Greek, ¼ Italian, ½ English
Physical Appearance:
When one sees Eva, a sense of calm and peace washes over them, as if they were looking at a beautiful painting or nature scene. Eva has a very firm, fit body, with an average amount of cleavage and a fit, hourglass figure. She has the body of a dancer, with graceful limbs and somewhat broad shoulders. She looks almost immaculately healthy, with a little mediterranean olive complexion, contrary to her hair color. She walks with an overarching sense of grace and poise, never seeming to trip or stumble no matter what she’s walking on. Eva has a humble attitude and body language. She looks down when she walks and looks whoever she’s addressing in the eyes when she speaks. Her hands are smooth and her body devoid of any kind of scarring. Her face is heart-shaped, with high cheekbones, a small forehead, and beautiful sky blue eyes speckled with green. All in all, she is quite beautiful, and her default facial expression seems to be a kind, toothless smile.
Her voice is high and melodic, the makings of a good singer. It’s about an octave above your average woman’s voice. She very rarely laughs more than a quiet chuckle. When Eva gets angry, she seems to go into a shell and naturally draw away. Her smile disappears and she has a habit of hugging herself tightly, as if very cold. Eva’s hair is always a bright blonde, though with the coming of the full moon it becomes lighter and lighter. Eva takes a lot of care of her long hair, usually keeping it in a braid which lays across her left shoulder.
Attire:
Eva, being a more girly kind of girl, is fairly fashionable. She loves dresses, wearing them even in winter. Anything made of fur immediately repulses her. Her clothing changes a fair bit according to the season. In springtime she’ll wear yellows, seafoam greens, and light purples. In summer she wears whites and bright pastel oranges and reds. In Autumn she dresses more earthy, wearing light browns, tans, and greens. In winter, she dresses in whites and greys. Her favorite article of clothing is a flowing white sundress with a golden belt that she wears on a fairly regular basis. Eva generally wears sandals or flip-flops when out on the town, but generally dislikes shoes, choosing not to wear them when at home or in the woods. Everything which Eva wears is made by companies which do not use sweatshop labor or are made using fair trade.
Personality
Innate & Outward Personality:
Eva is generally known to be a rather temperamental girl. She is generally kind and sunny, with an almost motherly aspect to her. However, she is known for her mood swings and can become enraged rather easily. Her angry spells can be intense but rarely last long, and by the end she usually becomes happy again. Her temperament has been described as being similar to that of the Earth.
Eva is somewhat competitive, but not in the fighting or hunting aspect. She has a fox-like sense of cunning and has worked hard to figure ways out of situations that do not require violence. She is very good at reading others from their body languages or stuff like that, and is good at picking up innuendoes or subtext. Eva is generally a pacifist, preferring not to fight unless she finds it completely necessary. She is a vegetarian because she cannot stand to eat something which was once an animal, and absolutely cannot stand animal skins or mounted heads, finding them to be extremely offensive.
Eva has a love of nature. She spends the majority of her time in the woods, playing with or tracking animals. She loves hiking, tree-climbing, swimming, kayaking, stuff like that. She is generally opposed to city life, preferring to live in the country where there’s less pollution and honking horns. When she is in the city, Eva finds herself daydreaming, often staring out of the window at birds flying by or trees growing.
Socially, Eva is fairly extroverted. She has a natural grace when talking to people and has had many a boyfriend in her time. She is appalled by smokers, however, and generally tends to avoid them at all costs. She once went ballistic when a classmate blew a puff of cigarette smoke in her face. She tries to be somewhat ladylike and proper, but can lose her temper occasionally and shrink away to contain herself. When Eva is angry or upset, she goes into a kind of antisocial shell where she’ll draw away from people and stop speaking. It is not uncommon for her to cry when in this state. Depending on how much isolation she can achieve and the season (it’s worst in the winter), Eva’s blue periods can last days.
Hobbies/Interests:
She spends incredible amounts of time out in nature; hiking, exploring, tree-climbing, playing with animals, tracking, etc. She loves dancing and listening to music. Eva’s music library contains mostly pop, light indie, and singer/songwriter (so imagine things like Jack Johnson, Jason Mraz, Ingrid Michaelson, Ed Sheeran, Twenty-One Pilots, etc). She’s good with making arts and crafts, especially dreamcatchers, which she learned how to make from a friend of her’s. She loves being around animals and plants, and has several pets as well as a beautiful terrace garden. This said garden grows year-round no matter the weather, and is home to an incredible variety of plants, from Hibiscus to Corn to Tomatoes to Squash. Essentially anything will grow in Eva grows most of her own food so that she’s sure that it’s all organic.
Skills/Talents:
Eva is incredibly dexterous, flexible, and graceful. Dancing and gymnastics have given her an excellent sense of coordination, making her an excellent climber (though that also has a little bit to do with her power). She’s not particularly good with new languages, and has no clue how to fight whatsoever. She has a great singing voice, but cannot play any instruments. Having grown up in the country for most of her life, she knows a lot of wilderness survival skills. She’d make a good boy scout.
Prized Possession:
Eva’s favorite possessions are probably her animals, which live in her room. Currently, she owns a European Kingfisher, three poison dart frogs (a cyan-colored one, a blue one, and a red one), a Green Basilisk, a Rhinoceros Iguana named Goliath (which wanders her apartment like a dog), a Mudskipper, and a pointer named Orion. This small menagerie of her’s is kept mainly in her bedroom, and she takes special care to make sure that everything is well taken-care-of.
Quote(s):
”Hello little squirrel! How are you today? Oh my! Your family was eaten by an owl last night? Oh, I’m so sorry!”
History/Bio:
Eva Chilver was born one minute and five seconds before her twin sister Selena. Eva’s mother left when she was very young. She doesn’t know what happened to her, though has always been curious. For the first few years of her life, she bounced back and forth between her uncle and father with her sister. Her father worked on an oil rig, and so was gone for many months of the year. From an early age, Eva showed herself to be good with animals and people alike. People felt comfortable around her, and she was quite the social butterfly. She was smart, too, and her dancing and gymnastics hobbies kept her graceful and ladylike, unlike her sister. When Eva turned ten, she was offered a scholarship to go to a prestigious boarding school in New York for her dancing. Knowing that this would give his daughter a better life than he could give her, Eva’s father allowed her to go, and for four years Eva lived at the boarding school, learning expert dancing and becoming rather intelligent. She returned home a new woman, sophisticated and graceful. She no longer fit in at her old home, and she soon began to feel quite isolated and lonely. So, she left again. This time, she travelled to Academy 218 in Alaska, where she finished high school. However, Alaska wasn’t really Eva’s favorite place due to the temperatures, and so she travelled next to Academy 12 in Verthaven. Here, she is double-majoring in Biology and Environmental Science, hoping one day to become a conservation biologist.
Relationships
Family:
Dan Chilver- Father - 50 Selena Chilver- Twin Sister - 20 Ben Chilver- Uncle - 44
Dynamics:
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Abilities
Power Class:
Super-System Animal, Other
Power:
Earth Mother. Eva is the queen of nature. Whenever any living being, be it a human, an animal, or even a plant, is near Eva, they feel an aura of reassurance and warmth. Eva’s presence naturally calms living things nearby, decreasing aggression. Prey animals like deer, rabbits, and rodents seem to flock to Eva when she is near, and predators bow their heads and stop their hunting at sight of her. In her presence, living things often find their natural abilities to be strengthened. Plants grow taller and greener and animals find their senses and natural instincts increased by the touch of her hand. This limitedly affects humans but does not strengthen supernatural abilities. Simply Eva’s presence has an effect on the wildlife around her. The leaves of trees above her thicken in her presence, providing her shade, and animals bow their heads at her presence. This ability does not affect animal metas as much as it affects normal animals, but they too seem to have a sort of reverence for Eva, and are greatly calmed down in her presence.
Eva can communicate with animals as well. They seem to understand her speech and she understands the sounds they make. Animals naturally respect her, and wild animals address her as “Earth-mother”. She communicates best with mammals, but can also do the same with birds and reptiles. If around her long enough, animals will begin to obey her commands. If a wild animal sees Eva in danger, it will attempt to defend her. While Eva is unable to communicate with plants as well as with animals, she has the ability to limitedly command plants. She climbs trees so well because at her touch the trees grow footholds to help her climb safer. When she is trying to hide, plants grow thicker around her, shrouding her from sight. If Eva were to fall from a tree, the plants below her would grow thicker leaves to cushion her fall. Branches strengthen themselves when Eva crawls along them, adding to her excellent tree-climbing ability. If she is in major trouble, hard-stemmed plants like trees will actually change their shape to protect her (causing some really wonky-shaped trees in the woods). Being pure, Eva has the ability to clean water of disease or dirt with her touch.
Animal Replication: Another aspect of Eva’s power is that she has the power to replicate the aspects of animals. By touching them, Eva can copy evolutionary advantages which animals possess, like the gills and flippers of a fish or the agility and keen sense of smell of a deer. Once she touches the animal, she can keep their adaptation for a limited period of time, based on the extent of the alterations and the size of the animal. Using this ability slightly changes Eva’s physical characteristics to a degree. For example, if Eva replicates the adaptations of an iguana, she would grow scaly skin, claws, a long tail, and a reptilian face. Her first ability actually assists her second one, as non-domestic animals become calm around her. She can control whether or not the aspects of an animal are expressed or not, so as to avoid walking somewhere with the nose and fur of a deer or something.
Limits:
Firstly, there is a time limit to Eva’s replication ability which depends on the size of the animal and the extent of the alterations. A rhinoceros, for example, is a very large and heavy animal, and so Eva would only be able to copy the adaptations of a rhinoceros for a very short amount of time. A smaller creature like a poison dart frog, for example, is much smaller, and so Eva can keep its adaptations for longer. The longest that Eva can keep an adaptation for is twenty-four hours, and she can only do such for creatures no bigger than a squirrel. There is also a limited weight restriction on Eva’s powers. Eva cannot break the law of Conservation of Mass, and so she cannot grow much larger than she already is. She has a way around this to a degree, as she can temporarily exchange mass with large or small things which she touches, but once the animal adaptations wear off she becomes incredibly exhausted and often has dangerous weight fluctuations if she replicated a creature larger than herself.
Weaknesses/Drawbacks:
Well first and most obviously, the first half of Eva’s powers only work in rural environments. The concrete jungle is simply not her cup of tea. There are no plants to catch your fall when you’re in the middle of a city block with no trees. Eva’s animal magnetism also does not work on domesticated creatures, as they are detached from nature. The better trained an animal is, they less they will obey her, though animals which she herself owns are immune to this weakness. Eva is weakened by pollution, another reason why she doesn’t live in the city. When exposed to large amounts of carbon dioxide or smoke, she exhibits the symptoms of an asthma attack. Polluted water burns Eva’s skin (I know this seems like it contradicts her water purifying power, but her pollution cleaning has to be activated).
As far as the secondary animal replication goes, Eva is confined to use of one animal at a time. If she replicates the aspect of another animal, she loses the aspects of whatever animal she already had in her. Eva cannot choose what aspects of an animal she gets. The power only works on non-domestic animals (unless she owns the animal herself), so she cannot copy the aspects of your average pet dog or cat. Eva is confined to the traits of female animals as well, being female. This means that things like the antlers of a deer buck or the tusks of a bull elephant will not replicate for her, even if she does replicate a male animal. If Eva replicates a male animal, she remains female with female animal characteristics. Also, she has to actually touch the animal, so going to a zoo or something won’t help her unless she breaks into the tiger cage. Finally, Eva lives in Verthaven, California, not the African savannah or the South American jungle. She’s not exactly going to find a tiger wandering through the ghetto or a wild monkey swinging between the power lines. Eva is confined to what animals she has to work with, which are generally your usual North American animals like deer, foxes, wolves, bears, hawks, etc. For some reason, Eva cannot replicated bugs.
Other:
Sample Post:
Like a splendid doe Eva Chilver raced through the forest, graceful as a ballerina as the skirt of her dress floated behind her feet. Though it was cold and winter, she wore no sleeves and did not appear to feel the cold. Her bare feet kissed off of the snow with every step, oddly enough leaving no footprints. She came upon a fallen tree propped against another and nimbly climbed its trunk, unaffected by ice which clung to the bark. She ran through a fork in the next tree and vaulted into another, landing on a branch that seemed too thin to hold her weight. The branch did not waver in the slightest, however, and Eva crawled along it and climbed across to the top of the trunk, where she rested as a soft wind began to blow through the woods. The woods were quiet now that the stream had frozen, and a thin layer of snow laid across the ground and tree branches. Eva heard a crunching below her; Fred must be taking a walk. She looked down at the tremendous turtle-like man below her and then continued to climb through the trees like a squirrel, never once losing her footing even when clamoring on icy branches. She moved with grace and poise like a dancer. She came to the end of the row of trees and rested on the top branch. In front of her was an enormous oak, bare of leaves and rocketing high above all of the other trees. It was the eldest of all the trees in the wood and happened to be the only tree which Eva had yet to climb. Perched upon the top branches of the tree she was in, she squatted down low and launched herself at the trunk of the great tree. She held on tight to the thick bark, though there seemed to be nothing to hold onto, and quickly began to scramble up the bark like it was a climbing wall. As she approached the top of the tree, she could feel something very wrong. The hand-holds she had been using to hoist herself along the tree were beginning to disappear. As she approached the top of the tree, she pulled herself up onto a branch and heard a loud, definitive “crack!”. She jumped up in the air and grabbed onto a branch above her as the branch below her cracked and fell to the ground where it turned to splinters. Cracks began to echo through the tree as the trunk shook and shuddered. Eva willed the tree to stop, but dead wood was useless to her. A monstrous roar echoed through the trees as the branch Eva held onto split and fell from the tree. Nearly fifty feet she fell, far enough to kill. She tried to scream, but no sound came out. Just as she was about to hit the ground, something soft and vine-like grabbed her around the waist and pulled her in. A nearby pine tree grabbed her out of midair and wrapped itself almost snakelike around her as the tree collapsed. As she curled into a ball and the pine tree’s soft branches wrapped around her to keep her safe from harm, she connected to the tree. She felt what it felt and sensed what it sensed, and it was beautiful. It was near-impossible to describe, the senses of a tree. The sweet smell of pine needles filled her nostrils and the tree gripped tighter as the sound of roots pulling from the earth echoed through the trees and the trunk struck the ground with a mighty “BOOM!” The tree unfurled and Eva gently stepped to the ground before the connection to the tree fell silent. She looked over and saw that in its efforts, a massive branch from the oak struck the base of the pine tree and snapped its narrow trunk. She knelt before the dying tree as it resumed its natural shape and began to die. She placed her hands on its trunk and felt its pain. Once more her breaths were filled with the smell of pine needles.
“Thank you, my dear friend.” she said “You have saved my life, and I will be forever grateful.” The tree remained motionless, but she could feel it trembling in her mind. It was strange to feel what a tree felt, completely indescribable with human terms. As she touched the bark of the tree and ran her fingers through the pine needles, the tree felt happy. Then it’s feelings left her and the smell disappeared as the tree died.
@Aphelion Only thing I want you to tone down is the size manipulation. Either remove it, or tone it down a lot (Dunno about turning a wall into a small brick). Other than that, she's solid.
