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DaDrummer676 said
Matsuo's Kekkei Genkai would go against his Kaimon. Seeing as it completely destroys the user's body.


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The point of the KG is to help the Bushou clan recover from injuries quickly. They are incredibly valuable as warriors due to the rate at which they recover from wounds that would incapacitate or even permanently cripple other ninja. It doesn't go against Gates, it actually pairs with them fantastically.


Essentially what Beta said. I mean, opening a gate is still really risky for them, (see: Matsuo's week long coma) but for the most part, the kekkei genkai is what allows Matsuo to practice the Gates without being out of commission for abundant amounts of time while you guys are out saving the world.

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But it says the more pain the user feels then the more tired they feel. While using Kaimon, the user's body undergoes immense amounts of pain. So wouldn't every time Matsuo uses it, he would fall asleep, or black out?


Lee was able to remain standing and even move quite abtly after opening Kaimon, albeit he was presumably far more used to it then Matsuo would be at this point in the RP, but you're forgetting a little tidbit: some Bushou can fight off the drowsiness with willpower, and I'm sure anyone's get an adrenaline rush from "I opened a Gate and somehow this dude is still alive?" And I wouldn't say Kaimon itself is the one that destroys the user's body, rather puts it under immense strain from the 100% output. But that might just be me.
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Either Sloth's Matsuo or Gowi's Nadra need to relocate to Iwa. One or the other.
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Who the heck is Howi? :3

I'll age Nadra up to fit her teammates and move her up.

EDIT: Done.

I am going to assume the genin in Iwa have been working on this team for some time now and know each other okay at this point...
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Soria of the Forest





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Yoshua and Beta have been selected as my Co-GMs. Show them the utmost respect as you would myself and adhere to their criticisms regarding characters, OOC/IC disputes and all matters pertaining to the lore of Naruto and the lore of the AU.

This should go without saying, but should either of my Co-GMs display behavior that reflects badly upon my own judgement in electing either of them to this position I will not hesitate to remove their title and smack them silly. With that said I have chosen Beta and Yosh as they have both proven themselves good writers in my opinion and I will hold them to a much higher standard than the average player. I expect them to be fair, balanced and most of all cooperative with other players.

Now let's get some posting IC guys!
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I'm almost done with my Konoha Jonin
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Ouroboros said
Yoshua and Beta have been selected as my Co-GMs. Show them the utmost respect as you would myself and adhere to their criticisms regarding characters, OOC/IC disputes and all matters pertaining to the lore of Naruto and the lore of the AU. This should go without saying, but should either of my Co-GMs display behavior that reflects badly upon my own judgement in electing either of them to this position . With that said I have chosen Beta and Yosh as they have both proven themselves good writers in my opinion and I will hold them to a much higher standard than the average player. I expect them to be fair, balanced and most of all cooperative with other players. Now let's get some posting IC guys!


So will you still be accepting characters or are you leaving it to your Co-GMs?
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Iwa still needs a jonin-sensei for it's team which I moved Nadra to...
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Just so everyone knows...

Yes, I am a huge fan of trolling and messing around. But when it comes to administration in RPs, I take the job very seriously. I will henceforth reduce the faffing about to a minimum and take a more serious tone.
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[here is my Konoha Jonin, it took me a long time to finish, and if he's accepted then the Konoha genin can start posting :)]
Name: Boru Nagimari
Alias: Demon of The Leaf
Age: 26
Gender: male
Rank: A Jonin
Appearance:
[change the forehead protector to the leaf symbol and that's what he looks like.]


Personality: Beru is a very serious and stern shinobi who will not take rudeness or snobby attitudes from anyone with the exception of his superiors. He can be merciless to those he considers his enemies and has almost problems with killing. Like with many from the Nagimari clan, Boru has dark side to him and if it is not kept under control than he could be consumed by the darkness within him. He also really dislikes the Uchiha clan, which is common among his clan, and the only Uchiha he respects is the Hokage because he is the leader of Konoha. Despite his flaws, Boru holds loyalty and honor among the highest qualities of a shinobi and considers those ideals as part of his ninja way.

Village: Konohagakure

History/Background: The Nagimari clan was third clan in Konohagakure to develop a dōjutsu Kekkei Genkai, and they prided themselves by claiming to have the strongest dōjutsu. The Uchiha and the Hyuga disagreed with their opinion, calling them an arrogant and foolish clan. The Uchiha were especially snobby in their insults to the Nagimari clan, and this soon caused there to be bad blood between the two clans. They became fierce rivals and wanted to out do the other. Because of this rivalry, the Nagimari clan grew to dislike the Uchiha, and they were especially displeased when an Uchiha was made Hokage of the Leaf Village. They are still hoping to have members of their clan become the greatest shinobi in all of Konoha.

This brings us to Beru Nagimari, when he was young, he showed only mild skill in the ninja arts of his clan which was expected since he was the son of two lower class members of the clan. This made him envious of his more skilled clansmen and he wished to overcome everyone expectations by becoming the most powerful ninja in his clan. His academy years were hard for since he wasn’t seen as being very talented and it would be years until he could possibly unlock his clan’s dōjutsu, the Eyes of The Devil. But despite his basic skills, he was determined to become a great shinobi and overcome all the doubts that people had about him. By the time he began his training as a genin, his skills improved and he had risen above the average for ninja of his age and rank. His sensei and teammates were impressed at his growing skills, but he still needed to activate his Eyes of The Devil to become great. His time came when he and his teammates were sent on a B ranked mission to Iwagakure. The mission was dangerous and his teammates were almost killed. But Beru unlocked his clan’s Kekkei Genkai and managed to save his comrades from death and complete the mission. From then on, Beru was regarded as a talented shinobi and he quickly began to rise in skill and power. By the time the chuunin exams came, he was consider one of the most powerful genin in the exams and completed them. It wasn’t long until they made him a chuunin and he was considered one of the higher-class shinobi of his clan. Now he is a Jonin and has become one his clan’s most powerful members, unlocking many of his clan’s incredible abilities. He has now been assigned to his first team of genin to teach them and prepare them for the coming chuunin exams. This was the annoying part about being a jonin, but he would have to deal with the annoyance.

Tools: basic ninja tools and a scythe

Chakra Nature: fire and wind

Kekkei Genkai:
Eyes of The Devil:
The Eyes of The Devil is a dōjutsu bloodline technique that has been in the Nagimari clan for many generations. The origin of the dōjutsu is unknown, the founder of the clan would not say of its origins, wanting to keep it secret. all that is known is that the founder of the Nagimari clan entered a ominous cave which radiated powerful negative chakra and he was the only shinobi brave enough to enter it. he did not come back out of the cave for about three hour, and when he came back out, his eyes were glowing demonic red, he had activated the Eyes of The Devil. this bloodline dōjutsu passed on to his clansmen and it made them a powerful clan among Konoha. the first ability that the dōjutsu grants the user is the ability to see a person's soul and there emotional aura. The second ability is powerful genjutsu techniques, and the third are very advanced fire jutsus. the dōjutsu gives the user demonic looking eyes that glow red and are like staring into infernos. Many wonder what was the better dōjutsu, the Sharingan, the Byakugan or the Eyes of The Devil? But the Nagimari always boasted that they had the better dōjutsu. Despite its great power, the Eyes of The Devil techniques require a large amount of chakra to perform and can have bad side effects on the user especially their vision.

Special Traits:
Huge chakra reserves
Very fast and pretty strong
Great chakra control
Skilled Taijutsu user



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Devilgan? Not sure what to think about that, or the clan's seeming to think they have a more powerful dojutsu than Sharingan. Unless of course hellfire > Amaterasu and whatever the genjutsu is > Tsukuyomi/Izanagi/Izanami.

Also, just a note: Shadow Clone Jutsu by itself is a B-Rank, so a Fire Release shadow clone would be at least B to A Rank, not C.
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Devilgan? Not sure what to think about that, or the clan's seeming to think they have a more powerful dojutsu than Sharingan. Unless of course hellfire > Amaterasu and whatever the genjutsu is > Tsukuyomi/Izanagi/Izanami.Also, just a note: Shadow Clone Jutsu by itself is a B-Rank, so a Fire Release shadow clone would be at least B to A Rank, not C.


Okay because water clone seems similar to it and it's listed as a C rank technique but I will change it to B. Also his Eyes of The Devil techniques do take up a lot of chakra and have some nasty side effects. Every technique has a way of being countered, hell if you're a water user then you can counter most of his jutsus
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Yog Sothoth said
Name: Wind Release: Blazing Twister
Rank: B
Range: mid
Nature: wind and fire
Type: ninjutsu
Effect: the user combines the wind chakra nature with the fire chakra nature to create a large tornado of fire which can do a great amount of damage to the area around the place where the jutsu is cast.
Weakness: it requires a large amount of chakra to pull off and can be countered by a high ranked water technique.

Name: Wind Release: Fire Great Breakthrough
Rank: B
Range: mid
Nature: wind and fire
Type: ninjutsu
Effect: this technique is a more advanced form of the Wind Release: Great Breakthrough technique that combines it with fire to create a powerful wave of fire that the user shoots at their opponent
Weakness: it takes up a good amount of chakra to perform and is fairly weak against water techniques.


Not without edits. Combining two natures in such a way to make a single jutsu is either a Dual-Element KG, or a collaborative technique requiring more than one ninja. So unless he magically has two Kekkei Genkai, These jutsu in particular will need to be removed or edited significantly. In addition, "Blazing Twister is basically a copy of Kirino's "Inferno Style: Flame Cyclone". I'm not too keen on that.

Sloth is also correct. Shadow Clone is a B-Rank. Adding elemental effects would increase the rank, not decrease it.

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Name: Flames of Hell
Rank: A
Range: mid
Nature: fire
Type: ninjutsu
Effect: this technique allows the user to create a huge amount of hellfire that are full of fiery demonic creatures using the Eyes of The Devil, the flames then fly towards an opponent and can be manipulated to follow its target if they try to run away from it.
Weakness: it takes up a huge amount of chakra and requires the user to have his opponent in his line of sight. When the technique is finished the user temporarily becomes blind in the eye that is used to activate and focus the technique, and that eye stays blind for about an hour.


Make up your mind if this is a summon or a ninjutsu. It can't be both.

As for the rest of the CS... it needs to have spaces between things, so it's not a huge wall of text, but does not conflict with anything in particular regarding the setting. If you edit the requested things, you have my acceptance.
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This seems to both mess with continuity in terms of there being a "demon" with which a contact can be made, though we'll have to check with Ouro on that, and it doesn't have enough specifics regarding the power of the flames themselves, which is further specified below in the rest of the review.
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Okay because water clone seems similar to it and it's listed as a C rank technique.


Shadow Clone evenly distributes chakra to each clone. Water Clones have one tenth of the user's actual chakra.
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Beta said
Not without edits. Combining two natures in such a way to make a single jutsu is either a Dual-Element KG, or a collaborative technique requiring more than one ninja. So unless he magically has two Kekkei Genkai, These jutsu in particular will need to be removed or edited significantly.Sloth is also correct. Shadow Clone is a B-Rank. Adding elemental effects would increase the rank, not decrease it.Make up your mind if this is a summon or a ninjutsu. It can't be both.As for the rest of the CS... it needs to have spaces between things, so it's not a huge wall of text, but does not conflict with anything in particular regarding the setting. If you edit the requested things, you have my acceptance.


Sorry if I didn't describe it right, the demons are not summons, the fire just takes the shape of them, like Kisame's water shark techniques. I will do the edits you requested.
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@Yog: Keep in mind that I also have a review of your character just above Sloth's post.
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lol. What degree of burn would someone get if they came into contact with fire?
I didn't realize we needed to specify what fire does to a person. I'm guessing everyone with Fireball techniques needs to elaborate because, clearly, stating it is hot enough to be an ignited energy source is not specific enough.

In any case! Ouro should post in Uzu!
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Yamigan > Satangan
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IVIasterJay said
Yamigan > Satangan


Yamigan Dojutsu sucks.
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