[OOC] Naruto: Shinjitsu no Mon

[Sloth]

DaDrummer676 said
Matsuo's Kekkei Genkai would go against his Kaimon. Seeing as it completely destroys the user's body.

Beta said
The point of the KG is to help the Bushou clan recover from injuries quickly. They are incredibly valuable as warriors due to the rate at which they recover from wounds that would incapacitate or even permanently cripple other ninja. It doesn't go against Gates, it actually pairs with them fantastically.

Essentially what Beta said. I mean, opening a gate is still really risky for them, (see: Matsuo's week long coma) but for the most part, the kekkei genkai is what allows Matsuo to practice the Gates without being out of commission for abundant amounts of time while you guys are out saving the world.

DaDrummer676 said
But it says the more pain the user feels then the more tired they feel. While using Kaimon, the user's body undergoes immense amounts of pain. So wouldn't every time Matsuo uses it, he would fall asleep, or black out?

Lee was able to remain standing and even move quite abtly after opening Kaimon, albeit he was presumably far more used to it then Matsuo would be at this point in the RP, but you're forgetting a little tidbit: some Bushou can fight off the drowsiness with willpower, and I'm sure anyone's get an adrenaline rush from "I opened a Gate and somehow this dude is still alive?" And I wouldn't say Kaimon itself is the one that destroys the user's body, rather puts it under immense strain from the 100% output. But that might just be me.

[Ouroboros]

Either Sloth's Matsuo or Gowi's Nadra need to relocate to Iwa. One or the other.

[Gowi]

Who the heck is Howi? :3

I'll age Nadra up to fit her teammates and move her up.

EDIT: Done.

I am going to assume the genin in Iwa have been working on this team for some time now and know each other okay at this point...

[yoshua171]

Soria of the Forest

General Data

Name: Soria Senju-Tetsukuzu.
Nickname/Alias: Soria of the Forest.
Gender: Male.
Age: 32.
Age Appearance: 27.
Sexuality: Heterosexual.

Village: Uzushiogakure.
Birthplace: Within the territory of Uzushiogakure; The Forest of Ash.

Organization: N/A.

Clan/Kekkei Genkai: Senju-Tetsukuzu/Mokuton – Shizen no megumare-noroi

Rank: S ranked nin.

Chakra Nature:
Yang, Natural, and Mokuton[Augmented]. Soria is incapable of using Water and Earth individually/directly.

Other Appearance Details:
Soria's eyes are a light soft almost navy green, likened to gray somewhat often, and described as serene and expressive. He stands at the height of 5'10 with a fairly lean muscular build and a toned weight suitable to one fit for his height.

Personality: By the guiding hands of nature and fate's subtle chorus he has come to be as he is now, a man of understanding, calm, and rationale. Unswayed by the seductions of darker forces Soria has, for the moment, decided to tread quite purely through the path of light. With a kindness gilding his heart and a serenity dwelling in his emerald eyes he moves through life, assisting those who might need it, and trudging through the obstacles presented him by nature's hand. In essence he is much like his element of habit. Roots strong enough to pierce and weed their way through stone, conquering all opposition; branches ambitious enough to reach into the sky and grasp at all in their breadth; and leaves expansive enough to shade his loved ones, those whom he cares deeply and would die for. Yet, there is one aspect to his nature that is rather disharmonic to the rest, and this is the seed of anger and hatred bottled deep in his core. With so many of his dearest friends and family gone -brothers slaughtered by an unknown foe, father died at the hands of who knows, and mother who met an end from the birth of his little sister- it would be difficult to be unaffected. In this way, deep beneath the surface of his calm is a beast so horrible that it might devour him whole if left unchecked. However, this anger and intense hatred is saved only for those who provoke him or are a true threat to all that he loves, for he is not one easily manipulated, and he is far from naive. So, in the end, it is only time that will reveal the finality of his existence. Time and the sway of nature over his being, and a powerful sway it is.

History:
Soria is an individual who has been tested ever so often in his life with each successive trial being more difficult than the next, and each trumped respectively. Born to a family already with 2 siblings, Soria grew up the baby brother under his elder siblings Kentari and Kishibu. Often made fun of by his brothers for his love of nature, he was the most prominent in adapting as his Kekkei genkai took root at an accelerated rate to his brothers. Being rather diminutive in his size as a youth he did not inspire much but more ridicule as he and his brothers grew and shifted their competitions to more meaningful areas. They began experimenting in the areas of ninjutsu, tutored mostly by their father, except for Soria. Having grown tired and angry at the ridicule he received from his brothers, he would often go to his mother's garden. His dearest mother, Reisei Tetsukuzu, would comfort him, her youngest and dearest child, for many years and teach him her ways and skills, skills that she had not even taught Kishibu, the eldest among them.

His tutelage under Reisei continued even through the months of her 4th pregnancy, the one that would bear her the most precious of her children: Haruka, her only daughter. Feeling incredibly happy at his realization, Soria ran to the garden a few days after, only to be met by his father, Moriyama Senju, with a sad look and words of sympathy. Soria had never seen his daddy so distraught. Yet, even while he was told of the tragedy, of his mother's death, he noticed that neither of his elder siblings were present. Even as tears ran down his cheeks, he could not help but feel the betrayal of their absence. This was the first seed of anger in his heart. Growing ever faster he tended, and still does to this day, the garden of his deceased mother, using the abilities granted him by his heritage and her kind lessons to assure its survival. The days passed and yet still his brothers did not return, even his father had left him now, traveling alone, unable to bear the memories of his dead wife's home. It hurt and the seeds of betrayal sprouted anew, and he further withdrew into himself. His only solace was his garden, and the small child that had been left in his care, for not even her father would watch over the child who had killed his beloved. For a time Soria had thought the same, but, seeing the neediness and loneliness in the baby's tiny eyes he understood he could not let her die.

Years passed and she continued to grow. He could no longer manage her, restrict her, and protect her on his own, or so he felt. He sent out a message, she needed her family, they would have to come back. For the first time, his relatives heeded his call and so came his brothers. His father never arrived and Soria took him for a traitor and a coward. Kentari, the kinder of his elder brothers, began to take a liking to their little sister, playing with her often and teaching her small and harmless jutsu. Afterall she did have the talent.

It was in this time when Soria bid his brothers ado and departed their home, his home, for the first time. The world was in turmoil, war, and chaos. Yet in the horrible symphony of death and destruction he found a light, another garden, and a girl. Her name was Shinsei, and she was a girl who had been given a heinous blessing disguised in the face of a curse, the power over life and death. She was a sad girl and he couldn't help himself, he approached her, and guided her deadly hands with no fear of her power. He helped her tend to the garden, with a smile, and he took a liking to her. A liking that he decided to mention too late. Bandits attacked the compound and he was drawn into the fray. In an attempt to assure Shinsei's safety he threw down a bomb of smoke and quickly pulled himself and the bandits beneath the earth, the strength of his vines far surpassing their own human limits. As the smoke cleared, they were all gone.

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War and pain,
battles and strain,
loss and gain,
again and again.

It all went on, the years that followed were some of his hardest. They were the last years of his brother's lives, and the ending of his tragedies. After a time serving under his father Moriyama, he beseeched the man that he be allowed leave. He had to make sure that his mother's home had gone unharmed. Finally allowed to go he set off, only to arrive far too late. For while he had been gone dealing with the scuffles of clans and village skirmishes, his closest family members had been slaughtered....

The blood of his kin, of both his brothers, soaked the compound and he found their mangled bodies at the edges of the garden. The flowers now bloomed a crimson, dark in its color, and it was in this moment of tears and anger that he heard a voice, Kentari's voice "k-keep her safe b-brother. We...I, she is special." These were his brother's last words, last words that he would never forget. Yet, as he wept before the fire as it spread, burning at the garden he had done so much to protect and nurture, Haruka pulled at his clothes and extricated him from the inferno as he stared blankly into space. Why was he forced to lose so much? As if to ascertain the hopelessness, they were attacked on their travels back to the Senju compound. Mysterious shinobi and their kunoichi counter parts assailed them, evidently targeting Haruka. Soria was done, he would never again lose another of his loved ones and so at the risk of his life and humanity, he exerted the full extent of his control over the forces naturally present in their surroundings...

The result?

Pandemonium.

Exhausted and bloody, he was dragged, Haruka using whatever little strength she could, towards the closest safe haven she could figure. It was a miracle really, what saved them that was, for out of the forest emerged one final kunoichi: Shinsei. The same girl he had gifted those gloves so many years ago, seven to be exact. It filled him with a familiar sensation and a kind of joy, she had survived, and she had grown up to surpass the sadness he had once seen so strongly in her eyes. Not only that, but as the years continued to pass and the two of them grew closer, his dearest sister, Ruka-chan along side him all the while. Finally marrying, Soria soon received word of his father's state, he had departed this mortal coil, he was the successor.

Returning to what little family he had left, Soria would travel to Uzushiogakure where his grandfather's friend served as Uzukage. He, his wife, and his younger sister thusly settled there, with Soria becoming an integral part of the village rather quickly, and Shinsei remaining in their small sanctuary home with Haruka when she was not on missions. In this time he and Shinsei had been wedded and though she could bare him no children she treated Haruka like her own daughter. Since then he has been filled with the ambition to understand the intricacies of nature and master the power untapped in their roots. While Soria is not one to hold grudges, he has shown a distinct distaste regarding the hokage, as the man did in fact kill his father.

Theme Song:

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Equipment Data

Base Weapons & Items:

X shuriken.
X kunai.
X explosive tags.
X smoke bombs.

Additionally Soria carries several pouches at his waist, each of which contains one hundred or so seeds. There are exactly six pouches. Plants grown from these seeds will naturally be infused with Soria's chakra. However, Soria must utilize a set sum of chakra per seed to cause it to grow at its accelerated rate.

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Combat Data

Special Traits
Extremely knowledgeable in botany, natural chakra, and nature
He lacks proficiency in strength, speed, and agility
Knows only the very basics of Tai and Kenjutsu
Keen understanding of the human body
Rather vulnerable to most genjutsu
Enhanced chakra regeneration
Large Chakra Reserves
Effective at mid-range
Genius level intellect
Powerful Life Force
Incredibly durable
Skilled in Tactics

Kekkei Genkai:

Name of Kekkei Genkai:
Mokuton - Shizen no megumare-noroi (木遁 - 自然の恵まれ-呪い 'Wood release - Nature's blessed-curse')

Clan:
Senju/Tetsukuzu.
Description:
With the forbidden union of Soria's father, Moriyama Senju, and his blessed mother, Reisei Tetsukuzu, this Kekkei genkai was born. With the blood of the Senju giving its life and synchronicity with the natural world and the Tetsukuzu's nature of understanding and connection with their surroundings a new mutation in the Senju genome occurred birthing forth a unique form of the Mokuton. Rather than simply empower the bodies and merge the water and earth affinities, the Shizen no megumare-noroi causes the inheritor's body and genetics to become excessively malleable. In Soria's case, and formerly in the case of Kishibu his now sadly passed on eldest brother, it causes his mokuton nature to quite literally take root in his body. Due to the prolonged interactions with his affinity and his extensive training, his Mokuton has become less just a chakratic affinity and more a part of his being. He is something of a combination of flora and human DNA at this point, though primarily he IS in fact human. This causes Soria to have a much more attuned sense of his surroundings and actually allows him to use both created and natural vegetation to his greater advantage. While he is certainly no sensory ninja, the flora that share a symbiotic bond with his body have allowed him to better understand the forces which keep both human and plant-life around. This has caused him to have an innate understanding of both water and earth as well as a unique appreciation for the sun and its fiery light.

Thus throughout his life his body has become a unique mixture of flora and human allowing him some rather unique traits. First of all Soria, while unable to do so at a notable speed, is capable of absorbing natural energy through the plant life around him. Secondly Soria is capable of passively regenerating with the tax of his chakra and the amount of useable chakra, both natural and otherwise. In the category of a tertiary ability Soria has gained the capability to modify plant DNA on the fly. However, this tertiary capability has required rigorous training and effort for him to master and fully utilize, and, in particular, it is the ability that makes his brand of Mokuton so unique. After all, he rarely uses the 'tree' based mokuton, rather preferring to utilize the surrounding flora to his advantage. This is, in essence, his kekkei genkai, though there is one final detail to express. Simply that it is a double edged sword as his secondary ability essentially means that with every wound he progressively loses more of his humanity, gradually becoming more and more plant-like. A dark secret indeed, one that he has kept to himself above all else, in fact only his siblings knew of the curse, only his siblings...and 3 of them are dead.

Techniques:

Canon Jutsu
All basic and academy level techniques.

Mokuton: Sashiki no Jutsu(Wood Release: Cutting Technique)
Mokuton: Shichūrō no Jutsu(Wood Release: Four-Pillar Prison Technique)
Mokuton: Henge(Wood Release: Transformation)
Mokuton: Mokujōheki(Wood Release: Wood Locking Wall)
Mokuton: Daijurin no Jutsu(Wood Release: Great Forest Technique)

Custom Jutsu

Name of Technique: Shurei onjin - Shinzui ten no Utsuri(种类恩人- 真髄転の移 'Kind patron - Transference of essence').
Type of Jutsu: Kekkei ninjutsu.
Rank: B
Range: Direct or indirect contact.
Nature Type: Yang; Natural; Mokuton.
Handseals: 3.
Description: By studying his wife's jutsu, Hakei Saisei, Soria has engineered a technique that allows him to utilize his nature chakra and natural affinity for mokuton and yang to infuse dying organisms with additional life energy. However, while Shinsei's technique can also transfer and take energy, this technique cannot and only allows him to infuse flora with life. He can also utilize this technique to infuse elemental ninjutsu with strength, or to infuse naturally occurring elements with it utilizing the Shizen-kai no zōkyō.

Weakness: Direct or indirect contact must be made with the subject that Soria wishes to effect. This can only be applied via his plants or his physical body.

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Name of Technique: Shizen-kai no zōkyō(自然界の増強 'Augmentation of the Natural Realm').
Type of Jutsu: Kekkei ninjutsu.
Rank: A
Range: Direct contact; Indirect contact; Within 6 yards.
Nature Type: Natural.
Handseals: 3.
Description: By utilizing Shurei onjin - Shinzui ten no Utsuri, Soria is capable of infusing notably inanimate entities with what amounts to life. This is a rather taxing technique when used in this fashion however, this is not its only use. Generally, Soria uses this technique to amplify both his own mokuton jutsu and surrounding flora for a unique effect. When applied to surrounding flora it will amplify their growth and evolutionary potential greatly and strengthen the defense and structure of the plant(s). This causes the plants within a 6 yard radius, or subjected to his direct or indirect contact to become at least twice as resistant to normal weaknesses, such as fire (C rank resistance). When applied to his mokuton jutsu it amplifies their resistance even further due to their already augmented form via his unique chakra affinities, thus they become more resistant to B rank and below fire jutsu, though they can still be damaged if the jutsu is potent enough. Additionally they gain a natural resistance to being cut causing even steel blades to have trouble cutting through in a single fell swoop.

Weakness: Limited range. Augmenting surrounding flora is more taxing than augmenting his mokuton jutsu. Chakra cost is dependent on how many jutsu are amplified and the rank of said jutsu, or simply by the sheer amount of plant-life surrounding Soria within a 6 yard radius. Augmenting inanimate entities is twice as difficult and takes intense focus.

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Name of Technique: Chō shizen no shinka(超自然の進化 'Supernatural evolution').
Type of Jutsu: Kekkei ninjutsu.
Rank: C.
Range: N/A.
Nature Type: Natural; Yang.
Handseals: N/A.
Description: By utilizing already established connections with the plants under his control including ones formed from his jutsu directly, Soria will activate or modify portions of their DNA respectively and alter the plant's evolutionary probabilities. Simultaneously he will cause plants to cross pollinate despite the type of plant and thus cause them to share or take on processes of their neighbors upon dropping seeds. In essence this technique speeds up the growth cycle of the particular plants and allows Soria to also alter and activate dormant strands of DNA to his own purposes.

Weakness: Despite the processes of the plants being much quicker than normal, the technique still takes time to so greatly modify their nature and purpose. Depending on the complexity of the changes to the given organism, this jutsu will take anywhere from 30 seconds to 5 minutes. This techniques takes a constant, but negligible drain on Soria's chakra.

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Name of Technique: Shizen niku no dōka(自然肉の同化 'Assimilation of the Natural flesh').
Type of Jutsu: Kekkei ninjutsu.
Rank: A.
Range: N/A.
Nature Type: Yang; Natural; Mokuton – Shizen no megumare-noroi
Handseals: 6.
Description: By utilizing his own flesh and unique DNA sequence, Soria propagates his symbiotic cells and either splits them off from his body or further amplifyies their growth speed with yang while regulating their purpose and balance with natural energy and the Mokuton - Shizen no megumare-noroi. This propagation and purposing of cells takes two turns which each chain into their own unique technique. The cells created from this technique are especially vulnerable until entered into their completed forms.

Weakness: Chakra and focus intensive.

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Name of Technique: Kyōsei(共生 'Symbiosis').
Type of Jutsu: Kekkei ninjutsu.
Rank: S.
Range: Direct or Indirect contact.
Nature Type: Yang; Natural; Mokuton - Shizen no megumare-noroi.
Handseals: 2.
Description: By utilizing Shizen niku no dōka and keeping the propagating flesh either on himself or implementing it with another individual, he can replace and regrow limbs or body parts entirely. This technique is an extremely advanced healing technique and cannot be used in battle. However, he can utilize the application of this and split a portion of the propagated flesh from his body, using it to track or mark targets as long as the symbiotic cells remain attached.

Weakness: Not useable in battle. Takes time to adapt the cells to other individuals for use in healing. Incredibly chakra intensive. Relies on the use of Shizen nku no dōka. Additionally, direct or indirect contact is required.

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Name of Technique: Mori no ko(森の子 'Child of the Forest').
Type of Jutsu: Kekkei ninjutsu.
Rank: S.
Range: N/A.
Nature Type: Yang; Natural; Mokuton - Shizen no megumare-noroi.
Handseals: 4.
Description: By first utilizing Shizen niku no dōka, Soria then splits up to two portions of it from his body and purposes the cells with a format almost identical to his own. The cells will propagate and alter their purposes, forming vines of mixed symbiotic cells until they weave together and form up to two clones. This jutsu is unique in that, if coupled with a slight use of Kyōsei to extract cells from another individual, it can create what amounts to an almost exact physical copy of either the user or designated individual. These clones are capable of utilizing all of Soria's jutsu with the exclusion of Shurei onjin - Shinzui ten no Utsuri. The thing that makes these clones so special is they acquire the ability to merge with other flora seamlessly, either to imbue their life force and partial sentience, to hide, or for another purpose, such as traveling between the connections of flora much like Kagerō, though detectable and only with the sacrifice of all other jutsu while in use. Additionally these clones cannot be dispersed, an aspect worked in by Soria's studies of the Moku bunshin no jutsu. Additionally, due to the Mori no ko's strange nature, any damage done to the clone will appear the same as if you had damaged the actual Soria. The only notable difference between Mori no ko and Soria himself is their lack of totally independent sentience and the fact that the chakra system of any given Mori no ko is not nearly as complex as the chakra system of a living being, this is their only derivative and thus they essentially trick all dōjutsu with the sole exclusion of the byakugan. It should be noted that when material from a Mori no ko gets on someone, it can be tracked or tapped into by Soria in much the same was that Kyōsei can be used.

Weakness: The clones are limited to two at any given time, Soria can only create 8 of these, in total, before becoming totally exhausted regardless of his extensive chakra pool and natural energy. While they cannot be dispersed, Mori no ko can be damaged like any other being and can and will become crippled or die from extensive wounds. A single clone takes a whole 20 seconds to fully form and become useable making them especially vulnerable until fully formed.

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Name of Technique: Genshi-ko no taihai(原始子の退廃 'Decadence of the Primal Child').
Type of Jutsu: Kekkei ninjutsu.
Rank: S+
Range: N/A.
Nature Type: Yang; Natural; Mokuton - Shizen no megumare-noroi.
Handseals: 10.
Description: Soria's best hidden, most advanced, and darkest jutsu, the Genshi-ko no taihai is a well guarded secret. Created through something of an accident and an attempt to vent the seed of hatred in his core, Soria utilized Shizen niku no dōka and the result was this unnaturally jet-black seed. Beginning to grow at a rate far out of Soria's control, the seed parasitically sapped his chakra almost to the point of death, even robbing him of a few years of his life in the process. Having barely managed to cut the flow of the seed, Soria found that its presence latched on to the secret garden of his laboratory and began to drain the life force of the surrounding flora as well. He quickly suppressed and cut its link once more, but not before it had accumulated an absolutely astonishing amount of chakra that he could not risk extracting without danger to his life and those of the surrounding individuals and nature itself.

Bottom-line, the Genshi-ko no taihai is an extreme parasitic life form of unknown intelligence and filled with the blackness of Soria's hate and anger. To keep it as isolated from its surroundings, Soria has actually designed part of his internal body to house the Genshi-ko no taihai safely. This area of his body cuts off the seed from growth and the rest of Soria's body, becoming the literal seed of hate and anger inside of him. Incidentally, Soria can, at the risk of himself, draw upon the massive chakra within the seed by temporarily allowing it to cannibalize on his negative emotions and degrade his life force at an exceptional rate. The only individual who knows anything regarding the Genshi-ko no taihai is his wife, Shinsei, and it should be noted that should he ever have to use this technique and its corresponding evil for longer than even a minute, he would be consumed and the consequences would be impossible to predict.

Weakness: Listed in the jutsu itself. This allows an extremely limited, 30 yard hemisphere negative emotions sensing ability –the ability can only sense very strong killing intent, hatred, and anger.

[Ouroboros]

Yoshua and Beta have been selected as my Co-GMs. Show them the utmost respect as you would myself and adhere to their criticisms regarding characters, OOC/IC disputes and all matters pertaining to the lore of Naruto and the lore of the AU.

This should go without saying, but should either of my Co-GMs display behavior that reflects badly upon my own judgement in electing either of them to this position I will not hesitate to remove their title and smack them silly. With that said I have chosen Beta and Yosh as they have both proven themselves good writers in my opinion and I will hold them to a much higher standard than the average player. I expect them to be fair, balanced and most of all cooperative with other players.

Now let's get some posting IC guys!

[Yog Sothoth]

I'm almost done with my Konoha Jonin

[Yog Sothoth]

Ouroboros said
Yoshua and Beta have been selected as my Co-GMs. Show them the utmost respect as you would myself and adhere to their criticisms regarding characters, OOC/IC disputes and all matters pertaining to the lore of Naruto and the lore of the AU. This should go without saying, but should either of my Co-GMs display behavior that reflects badly upon my own judgement in electing either of them to this position . With that said I have chosen Beta and Yosh as they have both proven themselves good writers in my opinion and I will hold them to a much higher standard than the average player. I expect them to be fair, balanced and most of all cooperative with other players. Now let's get some posting IC guys!

So will you still be accepting characters or are you leaving it to your Co-GMs?

[Gowi]

Iwa still needs a jonin-sensei for it's team which I moved Nadra to...

[Salroka]

Just so everyone knows...

Yes, I am a huge fan of trolling and messing around. But when it comes to administration in RPs, I take the job very seriously. I will henceforth reduce the faffing about to a minimum and take a more serious tone.

[Yog Sothoth]

[here is my Konoha Jonin, it took me a long time to finish, and if he's accepted then the Konoha genin can start posting :)]
Name: Boru Nagimari
Alias: Demon of The Leaf
Age: 26
Gender: male
Rank: A Jonin
Appearance:
[change the forehead protector to the leaf symbol and that's what he looks like.]


Personality: Beru is a very serious and stern shinobi who will not take rudeness or snobby attitudes from anyone with the exception of his superiors. He can be merciless to those he considers his enemies and has almost problems with killing. Like with many from the Nagimari clan, Boru has dark side to him and if it is not kept under control than he could be consumed by the darkness within him. He also really dislikes the Uchiha clan, which is common among his clan, and the only Uchiha he respects is the Hokage because he is the leader of Konoha. Despite his flaws, Boru holds loyalty and honor among the highest qualities of a shinobi and considers those ideals as part of his ninja way.

Village: Konohagakure

History/Background: The Nagimari clan was third clan in Konohagakure to develop a dōjutsu Kekkei Genkai, and they prided themselves by claiming to have the strongest dōjutsu. The Uchiha and the Hyuga disagreed with their opinion, calling them an arrogant and foolish clan. The Uchiha were especially snobby in their insults to the Nagimari clan, and this soon caused there to be bad blood between the two clans. They became fierce rivals and wanted to out do the other. Because of this rivalry, the Nagimari clan grew to dislike the Uchiha, and they were especially displeased when an Uchiha was made Hokage of the Leaf Village. They are still hoping to have members of their clan become the greatest shinobi in all of Konoha.

This brings us to Beru Nagimari, when he was young, he showed only mild skill in the ninja arts of his clan which was expected since he was the son of two lower class members of the clan. This made him envious of his more skilled clansmen and he wished to overcome everyone expectations by becoming the most powerful ninja in his clan. His academy years were hard for since he wasn’t seen as being very talented and it would be years until he could possibly unlock his clan’s dōjutsu, the Eyes of The Devil. But despite his basic skills, he was determined to become a great shinobi and overcome all the doubts that people had about him. By the time he began his training as a genin, his skills improved and he had risen above the average for ninja of his age and rank. His sensei and teammates were impressed at his growing skills, but he still needed to activate his Eyes of The Devil to become great. His time came when he and his teammates were sent on a B ranked mission to Iwagakure. The mission was dangerous and his teammates were almost killed. But Beru unlocked his clan’s Kekkei Genkai and managed to save his comrades from death and complete the mission. From then on, Beru was regarded as a talented shinobi and he quickly began to rise in skill and power. By the time the chuunin exams came, he was consider one of the most powerful genin in the exams and completed them. It wasn’t long until they made him a chuunin and he was considered one of the higher-class shinobi of his clan. Now he is a Jonin and has become one his clan’s most powerful members, unlocking many of his clan’s incredible abilities. He has now been assigned to his first team of genin to teach them and prepare them for the coming chuunin exams. This was the annoying part about being a jonin, but he would have to deal with the annoyance.

Tools: basic ninja tools and a scythe

Chakra Nature: fire and wind

Kekkei Genkai:
Eyes of The Devil:
The Eyes of The Devil is a dōjutsu bloodline technique that has been in the Nagimari clan for many generations. The origin of the dōjutsu is unknown, the founder of the clan would not say of its origins, wanting to keep it secret. all that is known is that the founder of the Nagimari clan entered a ominous cave which radiated powerful negative chakra and he was the only shinobi brave enough to enter it. he did not come back out of the cave for about three hour, and when he came back out, his eyes were glowing demonic red, he had activated the Eyes of The Devil. this bloodline dōjutsu passed on to his clansmen and it made them a powerful clan among Konoha. the first ability that the dōjutsu grants the user is the ability to see a person's soul and there emotional aura. The second ability is powerful genjutsu techniques, and the third are very advanced fire jutsus. the dōjutsu gives the user demonic looking eyes that glow red and are like staring into infernos. Many wonder what was the better dōjutsu, the Sharingan, the Byakugan or the Eyes of The Devil? But the Nagimari always boasted that they had the better dōjutsu. Despite its great power, the Eyes of The Devil techniques require a large amount of chakra to perform and can have bad side effects on the user especially their vision.

Special Traits:
Huge chakra reserves
Very fast and pretty strong
Great chakra control
Skilled Taijutsu user

custom jutsu

Name: Demonic Flames
Rank: B
Range: Mid
Nature: fire
Type: ninjutsu
Effect: the user creates demonic creatures made of pure fire that attack his/her opponents. the temprature of the flames are about as hot as any B ranked fire technique.
Weakness: the technique requires a good amount of chakra to perform and it steadily uses up the user’s chakra the longer they keep it activated. The creatures cannot venture too far away from each other or the ninja who cast the jutsu otherwise the technique end, and the technique can temporarily damage the user’s eyesight if it used for too many times.

Name: Hellfire Aura
Rank: B
Range: short
Nature: fire
Type: supplementary
Effect: the user surrounds themself in an aura of extremely hot red flames. This technique is used as a form of defense to counter taijutsu techniques, close ranged attacks and wind release techniques. the flames are hot enough to severely burn flesh.
Weakness: it can take its toll on the user’s chakra and temporarily damage their eyesight if it is used for too long. Also it not very effective against long ranged and projectile attacks, and it is very weak against advanced water release ninjutsu.

Name: Fire Release: Blazing Twister
Rank: B
Range: mid
Nature: fire
Type: ninjutsu
Effect: the user creates a large tornado of fire which can do a great amount of damage to the area around the place where the jutsu is cast. the flames are about as hot as any other fire technique of its rank
Weakness: it requires a large amount of chakra to pull off and can be countered by a high ranked water technique.

Name: Fire Release: Fire Great Breakthrough
Rank: B
Range: mid
Nature: fire
Type: ninjutsu
Effect: this technique is a fire release form of the Wind Release: Great Breakthrough technique that creates a powerful wave of fire that the user shoots at their opponent. the flames are about as hot as any other fire technique of its rank
Weakness: it takes up a good amount of chakra to perform and is fairly weak against water techniques.

Name: Fire Release: Shadow Clone
Rank: B
Range: mid
Nature: fire
Type: clone technique
Effect: this technique allows the user to create a shadow clone infused with fire, it is able to perform techniques and interact with the environment due to it having physical substance; and also evenly distributes the user's chakra to each clone. If the clone is injured, it will revert to its natural fire-state, at the same time burning whatever it is touching.
Weakness: it only takes an average amount of damage to destroy the clone, water techniques are also very effective against this type of clone technique. because the clone can be more unstable than other clone techniques, it can only last for about two minutes before it reverts beck to its original state.

Name: Flames of Hell
Rank: A
Range: mid
Nature: fire
Type: ninjutsu
Effect: this technique allows the user to create a huge amount of hellfire that takes the form of a mass of demons made of pure hellfire using the Eyes of The Devil, the flames then fly towards an opponent and can be manipulated to follow its target if they try to run away from it. The hellfire is hotter than ordinary fire and the flames are a glowing crimson red color.
Weakness: it takes up a huge amount of chakra and requires the user to have his opponent in his line of sight. When the technique is finished the user temporarily becomes blind in the eye that is used to activate and focus the technique, and that eye stays blind for about an hour. The jutsu can also be countered by high ranked water release techniques.

Name: Hellish Inferno
Rank: B
Range: none
Nature: illusion
Type: Genjutsu
Effect: when the user’s opponents look into their eyes they are put under the Genjutsu and are put under the illusion of being burned alive by fiery demons.
Weakness: it takes up a good amount of chakra and can be countered by powerful genjutsu counters. it also causes temporary damage to the user's eyes.

Name: Hordes of Hell
Rank: A
Range: none
Nature: illusion
Type: Genjutsu
Effect: it is extremely power genjutsu that tricks the user’s opponents into believing that they are being attacked by hordes of demons, it can cause mental damage since the technique can fool the victim’s senses.
Weakness: it takes a huge amount of chakra to use and it will cause the user to go blind in one eye for about thirty minutes. It also can cause a good amount fatigue from the sheer concentration of maintaining the technique and it requires the user to stay in his position without moving. The jutsu can broken by using very advanced genjutsu counters or by making him lose his focus, and it requires a great amount of concentration to pull off.

canon justu

Fire Release: Great Dragon Fire Technique
Fire Release: Great Fireball Technique
Fire Release: Flame Bullet
Wind Release: Gale Palm
Wind Release: Great Breakthrough
Blade of Wind

[Sloth]

Devilgan? Not sure what to think about that, or the clan's seeming to think they have a more powerful dojutsu than Sharingan. Unless of course hellfire > Amaterasu and whatever the genjutsu is > Tsukuyomi/Izanagi/Izanami.

Also, just a note: Shadow Clone Jutsu by itself is a B-Rank, so a Fire Release shadow clone would be at least B to A Rank, not C.

[Yog Sothoth]

Sloth said
Devilgan? Not sure what to think about that, or the clan's seeming to think they have a more powerful dojutsu than Sharingan. Unless of course hellfire > Amaterasu and whatever the genjutsu is > Tsukuyomi/Izanagi/Izanami.Also, just a note: Shadow Clone Jutsu by itself is a B-Rank, so a Fire Release shadow clone would be at least B to A Rank, not C.

Okay because water clone seems similar to it and it's listed as a C rank technique but I will change it to B. Also his Eyes of The Devil techniques do take up a lot of chakra and have some nasty side effects. Every technique has a way of being countered, hell if you're a water user then you can counter most of his jutsus

[Salroka]

Yog Sothoth said
Name: Wind Release: Blazing Twister
Rank: B
Range: mid
Nature: wind and fire
Type: ninjutsu
Effect: the user combines the wind chakra nature with the fire chakra nature to create a large tornado of fire which can do a great amount of damage to the area around the place where the jutsu is cast.
Weakness: it requires a large amount of chakra to pull off and can be countered by a high ranked water technique.

Name: Wind Release: Fire Great Breakthrough
Rank: B
Range: mid
Nature: wind and fire
Type: ninjutsu
Effect: this technique is a more advanced form of the Wind Release: Great Breakthrough technique that combines it with fire to create a powerful wave of fire that the user shoots at their opponent
Weakness: it takes up a good amount of chakra to perform and is fairly weak against water techniques.

Not without edits. Combining two natures in such a way to make a single jutsu is either a Dual-Element KG, or a collaborative technique requiring more than one ninja. So unless he magically has two Kekkei Genkai, These jutsu in particular will need to be removed or edited significantly. In addition, "Blazing Twister is basically a copy of Kirino's "Inferno Style: Flame Cyclone". I'm not too keen on that.

Sloth is also correct. Shadow Clone is a B-Rank. Adding elemental effects would increase the rank, not decrease it.

Yog Sothoth said
Name: Flames of Hell
Rank: A
Range: mid
Nature: fire
Type: ninjutsu
Effect: this technique allows the user to create a huge amount of hellfire that are full of fiery demonic creatures using the Eyes of The Devil, the flames then fly towards an opponent and can be manipulated to follow its target if they try to run away from it.
Weakness: it takes up a huge amount of chakra and requires the user to have his opponent in his line of sight. When the technique is finished the user temporarily becomes blind in the eye that is used to activate and focus the technique, and that eye stays blind for about an hour.

Make up your mind if this is a summon or a ninjutsu. It can't be both.

As for the rest of the CS... it needs to have spaces between things, so it's not a huge wall of text, but does not conflict with anything in particular regarding the setting. If you edit the requested things, you have my acceptance.

[yoshua171]

This seems to both mess with continuity in terms of there being a "demon" with which a contact can be made, though we'll have to check with Ouro on that, and it doesn't have enough specifics regarding the power of the flames themselves, which is further specified below in the rest of the review.

review

Fire Release: Shadow Clone

It seems like something like this would be highly volatile, or at least not very stable as to have a clone constantly be on fire/have burning effect the chakra would have to be constantly emitting. I think you need to add a limited time period for the clone to be on the field because it exhausts its chakra stores.

Demonic Flames, Hellfire Aura, Wind Release: Blazing Twister, and Wind Release: Fire Great Breakthrough

So...how hot are these flames. How much damage would they do to say...a person, or a rock, or a tree, or metal(melted somewhat?) You're not being specific enough. What degree of burn would a person receive from each of these techniques.

Flames of Hell

So what are the properties of this hell fire. You've not gone into any detail regarding that, could you please do so, that way we can figure out what they actually /do/ in comparison to say normal fire, or something like Amateratsu.

Hordes of Hell

I imagine the user would have to remain imobile for this and that it'd be a "one or two" uses per battle kind of thing, correct?

[Sloth]

Yog Sothoth said
Okay because water clone seems similar to it and it's listed as a C rank technique.

Shadow Clone evenly distributes chakra to each clone. Water Clones have one tenth of the user's actual chakra.

[Yog Sothoth]

Beta said
Not without edits. Combining two natures in such a way to make a single jutsu is either a Dual-Element KG, or a collaborative technique requiring more than one ninja. So unless he magically has two Kekkei Genkai, These jutsu in particular will need to be removed or edited significantly.Sloth is also correct. Shadow Clone is a B-Rank. Adding elemental effects would increase the rank, not decrease it.Make up your mind if this is a summon or a ninjutsu. It can't be both.As for the rest of the CS... it needs to have spaces between things, so it's not a huge wall of text, but does not conflict with anything in particular regarding the setting. If you edit the requested things, you have my acceptance.

Sorry if I didn't describe it right, the demons are not summons, the fire just takes the shape of them, like Kisame's water shark techniques. I will do the edits you requested.

[yoshua171]

@Yog: Keep in mind that I also have a review of your character just above Sloth's post.

[Durnehviir]

lol. What degree of burn would someone get if they came into contact with fire?
I didn't realize we needed to specify what fire does to a person. I'm guessing everyone with Fireball techniques needs to elaborate because, clearly, stating it is hot enough to be an ignited energy source is not specific enough.

In any case! Ouro should post in Uzu!

[IVIasterJay]

Yamigan > Satangan

[Sloth]

IVIasterJay said
Yamigan > Satangan

Yamigan Dojutsu sucks.