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Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by Flood
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Redone.

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@floodtalon

Accepted.
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Either tomorrow or the 26th, I will post. I definitely won't be able to at christmas


No worries.

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A post will be coming tonight.
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Let me know if anything needs work. I hope this isn’t too uncomfortable
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@EpicKDP

Your CS is not uncomfortable, but it's hard to understand. There's so many grammar errors all over it that it's next to impossible to make sense of anything you wrote.

First, the image is not working. You can either fix that or give us a text description.

Second, that set of powers/skills is very weird and has no synchrony at all. Being able to fix any computer or machine in the modern world is way too advanced for someone who is supposed to be a student. It's an incredibly unrealistic skill given how fast the technology evolves and how hard it's to understand either of them (computers or machines). To make it even more unrealistic, you tossed plant magic and knowledge of botany on top of being a gadgeteer. That just doesn't make sense.

I'll ask you to choose between one of the three powers/skills (computers, machines, or plants) and then regulate it to a level compatible with your character's age.

Third, using terms like "status changers" further breaks the already thin suspension of disbelief of your CS. The world is not a videogame; avoid that.

Fourth, and last, what is happening on that sample post? It's too random to the point that I can't comprehend anything you tried to to do there.

Just to be clear, we are not taking in any piece of writing without the least quality control. I suggest you correct the grammar errors, expand it and make your message clear. Then we will evaluate your CS again.

I hope that this information was useful.
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Does anybody want to interact with Duccan and/or Miss Mako? Or should I just post them solo?
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Me and conscripts are about done with a collab post that should get us back to the main group.
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@Gummy1295

That last post of your was a collab or something like or did you just get authorization to control @Cerces22's character from them? Just a question, because that's bordering on some pretty direct godmodding that you did there, if the answer to at least one of these questions isn't yes.
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Lol it’s fine. The sample writing was a bit too cryptic. I was trying to get this out while I had time and rushed it. I did it all on my phone because I have no WiFi where I am. I work on a boat and using data for a hotspot doesnt always help if the signal is bad to begin with. So that’s why the frantically errors are so prevalent. I am still kinda new here so it I don’t know what I can get away with. I also went big for my character because I would rather be realed in than not go far enough. If you know what I’m saying.

The writing sample is about Reggie and his first high. I just wanted to desguise it as a woman because marijuana is often referred to as Mary Jane.

Thanks though I have role played before but every GM is different .
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@EpicKDP

I would rather you take your time with your CS than rush it out and have KoL chew it. In any case, we await your edits and resubmission.
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Does anybody want to interact with Duccan and/or Miss Mako? Or should I just post them solo?


I haven't done an intro post for Roland yet so I could have him bump into one of them?
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@KoL Aye, I must've gotten a little carried away right there, since my well of inspiration was running dry and I was paranoid over the size of my posts. I'll edit the post to fix it; it'll never happen again.
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@Gummy1295

If @Cerces22 is fine with it, there's no need to edit. Be sure that it is fine with other players if you intend to control their characters; if they're not fine with it, it is prohibited.
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@Awesomoman64

Sure! one of my characters is a teacher and a Witch, and the other is half horse.
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@KoL

I take it none of your associates are pot heads if the Botany and sample post made no sense :3
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You know KoL only dabbles in "fancy" things.
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I will never debase myself with such peasant matters.
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I understood it, I just don't understand why that was his choice of subject for the post. If the first defining trait you can think of for your character is "smokes weed", I think there are some issues.
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I am ok with it for that post, only for the simple fact that Circe would of dipped right after the speech, she's lived on the streets for 6 years, she's not really a trusting person or a people person. That convo alone was awkward and painful for her
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