[OOC] Hikari Academy

[Flood]

Redone.

Trey Black

Trey Black

Age: 16
Species: Half Human/ Half Elemental
Abilities:
- Darkness Manipulation: Trey can also manipulate the darkness, making it solid to lash out at people or shaping it around him to hide from others. He uses it pretty often due to the fact that it doesn't have the explosive consequences that messing up with Light Manipulation does.
Skills: Trey is a naturally quiet person for the most part, making him very good at sneaking around wherever he pleases. In contrast to this he's quite the talented musician, being naturally gifted with an amazing voice for singing. He also plays a little guitar, but he's still learning.
Inventory:
- Stars of Yomi: A set of enchanted throwing stars, they will always return to their owner after thrown.
• Sample Post:

Trey's Farewell

Trey sighed as he threw another throwing star at the ceiling of his new dorm, lying down in his brand new bed as his dad searched over all the furniture just one last time. His father was a large man, but one look at him told you everything you needed to know about him. From his white hair which seemed to shine with a holy light to his impressive size, about 6'2, which just screamed that this was a strong warrior. But through it all was a gentleness, you looked at this man and knew he wasn't just a warrior, he was a hero. His dad had just put down the last of Trey's books on his bookshelf and was looking over at Trey with the same nervous expression he has had on all day. He'll probably be asking the question in 3, 2, 1...

"Are you sure you haven't forgotten anything at home Trey? Your mom can always pop over and grab it for you really quickly." Trey rolled his eyes as his dad asked if he needed anything from his room for the third time today. He rolled out of bed and got to his feet, giving him a hug to try and comfort the nervous man.

"Dad. I'm fine, seriously. If I ever need anything, I'll call you or mom ok?" Speaking of the woman, she strolled into the room followed by a floating platform of darkness carrying a box of clothing. She was a imposing figure, with a visible darkness clinging to her at all times. She had jet black hair that rolled past her waist, but if one looked closely they could tell it wasn't quite hair at all. It was closer to strands of shadow that imitated hair.

"Lay off the boy Sigmund, he's not a 6 year old. He knows how to take care of himself, right Trey?" He would never admit it, but Trey liked his mom best. She knew how to give him his space and didn't baby him like his dad did. "All joking aside Trey, make sure to call if you ever need anything. I'll be over before you can even hang up!" She laughed boisterously as she clapped Trey on the back, a small "Ooph" escaping his lips as he disengaged from his hug.

"Sure thing mom." He replied as he hugged her as well, breaking it off after a few seconds of silence. His mom took his dad by the hand and waved as the darkness began to surround both of them, pulling them into the ground and leaving no trace they were ever there aside from his mom's lingering perfume. Trey sighed and picked up the book his dad had set down. A tome on energy conservation and casting spells efficiently. One of his mom's old tomes most likely, his dad wasn't the mage type.

He put the book back down and walked over to his guitar, tuning it to pass the time while he waited for his roommate, whoever that may be.

Other: Optional. Anything else not mentioned above that you may wish to add goes here.

[TheWendil]

@floodtalon

Accepted.

[KoL]

Either tomorrow or the 26th, I will post. I definitely won't be able to at christmas

@Silver Carrot

No worries.

@floodtalon

Accepted.

[TheWendil]

A post will be coming tonight.

[EpicKDP]

Reggie

• Name: Reginald (Reggie) Maxwell
• Age: 16
• Species: Human
• Abilities: Herbalist-Mancer?: Reggie is a mage who also enjoyed science. In particular botany. Because of this, he has developed an affinity for plant based magic. Manipulating and summoning plants.
• Skills:
Tech Specialist: Reggie specializes in computer technology and engineering. He can change your broken mouse out and build one from scratch. Can both heal your computer and infect it with cyber boogers. Basically, if it has a computer or mechanical component to it, he can fix or create it. He’s an all around type man.

Botanist: as a herbal plant mage Guy.......Reggie loves plant life. So, he has a hobby of raising plants in his spare time. Lots and lots of plants.....is there a Botany club here?

• Inventory: An assortment of Seeds he carries to cast spells on him.

Herbal remedies from his personal collection. From healing tonics to various status changers.

Magic Staff that is collapsible and is world on his waist when not being used. (For Power amplification.)

•

Sample Post

It was his first time. Reggie had never done anything like this before. She was ready, he was not. Her experience was radiating over her tightly wrapped body. It intimidated him, her confidence I mean. There was nothing more frightening than feeling the expectations no one bearing down onto you. Yet, her hand was extended, inviting him into her playground of dreams. Reggie’s friend had told him about this woman. She was both an angel and a devil, giving you joy and pain all at once. Yet knowing all of this, Reginald was resolved to conquer her love.

Reggie inspected her body closely, taking in every detail with his eye to make sure things were just right. Satisfied with what he saw, he then raised her to his mouth and placed her between his lips. His body was shaking, not yet knowing what to expect from then forward. The first step, after all, is always the hardest.

After a few moments of though, he warmed her up and took a deep breath. Reggie could feel her essence enter his body like a warm rush of power. Filling his lungs, he held his breath for a second, before exhaling out. It seemed as though he released all of the worries of the world with one breath. Each inhalation, her healing powers seems to get stronger and stronger as he could move farther and farther away from the pains in his life. Her spirit ran wildly through his body as her physical gradually disappeared from his hands. At the end, he was lost in her world lying with a smile on his face. “Oh Mary Jane, how I love thee.”

Let me know if anything needs work. I hope this isn’t too uncomfortable

[KoL]

@EpicKDP

Your CS is not uncomfortable, but it's hard to understand. There's so many grammar errors all over it that it's next to impossible to make sense of anything you wrote.

First, the image is not working. You can either fix that or give us a text description.

Second, that set of powers/skills is very weird and has no synchrony at all. Being able to fix any computer or machine in the modern world is way too advanced for someone who is supposed to be a student. It's an incredibly unrealistic skill given how fast the technology evolves and how hard it's to understand either of them (computers or machines). To make it even more unrealistic, you tossed plant magic and knowledge of botany on top of being a gadgeteer. That just doesn't make sense.

I'll ask you to choose between one of the three powers/skills (computers, machines, or plants) and then regulate it to a level compatible with your character's age.

Third, using terms like "status changers" further breaks the already thin suspension of disbelief of your CS. The world is not a videogame; avoid that.

Fourth, and last, what is happening on that sample post? It's too random to the point that I can't comprehend anything you tried to to do there.

Just to be clear, we are not taking in any piece of writing without the least quality control. I suggest you correct the grammar errors, expand it and make your message clear. Then we will evaluate your CS again.

I hope that this information was useful.

[Silver Carrot]

Does anybody want to interact with Duccan and/or Miss Mako? Or should I just post them solo?

[RoccanIronclad]

Me and conscripts are about done with a collab post that should get us back to the main group.

[KoL]

@Gummy1295

That last post of your was a collab or something like or did you just get authorization to control @Cerces22's character from them? Just a question, because that's bordering on some pretty direct godmodding that you did there, if the answer to at least one of these questions isn't yes.

[EpicKDP]

Lol it’s fine. The sample writing was a bit too cryptic. I was trying to get this out while I had time and rushed it. I did it all on my phone because I have no WiFi where I am. I work on a boat and using data for a hotspot doesnt always help if the signal is bad to begin with. So that’s why the frantically errors are so prevalent. I am still kinda new here so it I don’t know what I can get away with. I also went big for my character because I would rather be realed in than not go far enough. If you know what I’m saying.

The writing sample is about Reggie and his first high. I just wanted to desguise it as a woman because marijuana is often referred to as Mary Jane.

Thanks though I have role played before but every GM is different .

[TheWendil]

@EpicKDP

I would rather you take your time with your CS than rush it out and have KoL chew it. In any case, we await your edits and resubmission.

[Awesomoman64]

Does anybody want to interact with Duccan and/or Miss Mako? Or should I just post them solo?

@Silver Carrot

I haven't done an intro post for Roland yet so I could have him bump into one of them?

[Gummy1295]

@KoL Aye, I must've gotten a little carried away right there, since my well of inspiration was running dry and I was paranoid over the size of my posts. I'll edit the post to fix it; it'll never happen again.

[TheWendil]

@Gummy1295

If @Cerces22 is fine with it, there's no need to edit. Be sure that it is fine with other players if you intend to control their characters; if they're not fine with it, it is prohibited.

[Silver Carrot]

@Awesomoman64

Sure! one of my characters is a teacher and a Witch, and the other is half horse.

[Lonewolf685]

@KoL

I take it none of your associates are pot heads if the Botany and sample post made no sense :3

[TheWendil]

@Lonewolf685

You know KoL only dabbles in "fancy" things.

[KoL]

I will never debase myself with such peasant matters.

[chukklehed]

I understood it, I just don't understand why that was his choice of subject for the post. If the first defining trait you can think of for your character is "smokes weed", I think there are some issues.

[Cerces22]

@thewindel@gummy1295

I am ok with it for that post, only for the simple fact that Circe would of dipped right after the speech, she's lived on the streets for 6 years, she's not really a trusting person or a people person. That convo alone was awkward and painful for her