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No to both. There is currently no known Avatar and no one's character will secretly be it. Also, with 5 players filling each available slot, I will be not be playing a singular character but multiple smaller ones that revolve around our main cast. They'll be there to drive plots and provide prompts. One may be more prominent than the rest, but none will be my 'main'.


Ok, thanks for the clarification.
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Gonna put up my work in progress before I head out in case there's some feedback. Got some plans coming up. I'll try to finish the rest of the sheet soon!

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@vietmyke Amazing so far. I really have nothing to critique which is a good thing. In fact, the questions I have to ask are more about exploring some of the ideas you've established further. I'll wait till you're done with your sheet before I message you about it. Also, I'm really liking the way you've turned a line of lore about pipe conveyance into an entire world of it's own. Very nicely done!
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Edit: Copied @vietmyke's formatting as I really like it (sorry not sorry)
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@Exit I think my sheet is done and ready to be perused at your liesure. I'm. Glad you liked the pipe runner angle, I like finding little ways to fit myself into the world. A lot of it is sorta made up on the spot- a sort of lore friendly improv I like to call it. In any case I will certainly take questions and answer them to the best of my abilities haha
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@Abstract Proxy @vietmyke I just wanted to let you two know that I've read through your sheets once and they both seem fine, but I'm also currently 'away' and cannot properly sit down with them and study them closely. I'll go through them both again at a later time and make sure everything is still fine, but from first glance, amazing stuff, both of you.
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Oooh, now the squad is filling out!

We got a potential badass, medic, and tech guy to go with my useless cinnamon roll! Just need to find a firebender. Also cool to note that we've got people to rep for every zone. All three rings and the outside!

Speaking of which, I made a few more tweaks and named the pet shop as well as giving ya boi some actual clothes. I hear nudity is still frowned on even after an extra 100 years.
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If you're not mentioned here and you've already posted your CS above, then your sheet needs no changes.

@Theyra Your addition of drones is great and I may have some things to work out with you in the future if accepted that will help the start of the story. The only thing I have to point out is the library. I'm being strict on the information available on Benders from after the war that attempt to paint Benders in any kind of positive light. The family's library is located in the Upper Ring (is that where it's located?) and information possessed here would lean severely in favor of the Republic rather than Benders. Everything pre-war or pushing Bending agenda would have been thoroughly searched for and destroyed in this ring as there are less cracks for information to fall through. So learned history in this area may leave Reman feeling differently.

However, if you still want him to feel the way he does about Benders, it is possible, but that sentiment would have to be reached another way. One possible solution is that his family does have books before the war, but then you'd have to ask yourself why they hid them and how.

Not that this is the case or that he needs to act a certain way because of his profession, but also consider that he is in the drone business and one of their biggest buyers might be the RSF, purchasing replacements and ordering maintenance on the drones they've bought from Xuoshi Enterprises.. that they use to hunt Benders in the Wild.

@trenenp Good additions of the fighting styles that I had failed to implement myself. I had forgotten about the martial art used by the Kyoshi Warriors so it's nice to see it being honored here.

However, there are a number of things we have to discuss. Changes to information which seems to be coming from a simple misunderstanding of the setting. I am more than willing to help of course.

A martial art associated with the Kyoshi Warriors who are associated with Avatar Kyoshi would not be allowed to be taught anywhere in the city. I'd treat this like bending. If the skill wanted to be mastered despite its regulation, then the first hurdle to clear would be the absence of any teachers or official knowledge on the subject. Of course Mayuki is also a bender and for balance purposes, the only character allowed to improve a martial art in this game will be a non-bender. I will allow Benders the basics of their real world counterparts for each element, ie. Tai Chi for Mayuki, but only after they've improved their bending form.

Continuing from this point, carrying weapons such as an iron fan folded into swords would be rather impractical, especially in the Upper Ring. There is no reason to be walking around armed to the teeth like this. If it helps, imagine it like walking outside with two swords on your hip and a bow staff in your hand. People would ask questions and maybe not politely. It would be less of an issue if it was better concealed, like a sword in a cane, but that again touches on a character's prowess in self defense.

Mayuki is allowed basic knowledge of a martial art that they can practice daily. It's by no means advanced, but will allow them to defend themselves if attacked or hold their ground in a one on one fight.

Moving forward, his jealousy of Benders doesn't entirely make sense to me. He is a Bender himself and if he isn't bending presently, in this world, Benders are very rare and are hunted and killed. What makes him jealous of this fact? And why does he hate the Republic? Given his status and where he lives, everything around him is telling him that the Republic is great and is providing everything he and his family needs. What makes him think differently? Remember that almost everyone dislikes Benders. They're the reason for the state of the world.

Finally, the Jewelry alone could get your character killed immediately.

I know the above is a lot but I want to make sure everyone has a chance at getting in. If the setting confuses you, do let me know so I can try to get you on the same page.
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@Exit Okay, I have made some edits and added some minor details to my cs. Does my char's reasoning for his stance on Benders better now?
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Is energy bending prevalent (amongst the bending categories) in this universe/time? I was just curious since I think I have an idea for someone who can energy bend. I know that means my character would have to be a bender, but I think I have a good idea.
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You got room for a non-bender?
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@Theyra That works great for me! Nice job!

@OddApproved Welcome! Energybending (and all advanced forms of bending) will be available given enough time in our world. It exists but no one knows how to do it and no players can start with it.

@Dog And Welcome to you too! So the game isn't first come, first serve. You are welcome to submit a sheet if you'd like for any of the elements or for the non-bender.
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@Exit Thank you for answering! Under that answer, I am going with the other idea I had.
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@Exit I edited the sheet and also added some more details about him.
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And Welcome to you too! So the game isn't first come, first serve. You are welcome to submit a sheet if you'd like for any of the elements or for the non-bender.

How political can I get with my character?
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Here is my first character attempt. Rip it to shreds if you have to!

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@trenenp Thanks for making the changes! I may have one more for you but I'll shoot you a DM about it in a bit. It will concern Fuyuki's family.

@Dog This game isn't intended to be very political. Despite the setting and how widespread we may be at the start, the goal is to have us eventually grouped together and moving in one direction (not strictly on a railroad) on a more adventure romp with 'quests' and such. That being said, someone who is good at navigating politics may be helpful in more places than just the City and ultimately, later, any lasting changes could only be made by someone who's comfortable in that space. As long as you're aware of that, I think a type of character like this would really work well with what the story needs.

Before this dissuades you, I think I'd really like to see what you're wanting to make.


EDIT: Grouped together and moving in one direction on a more adventure romp with 'quests'.
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@OddApproved This already looks great! No changes needed as far as I'm concerned. Thanks for the submission!
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