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@Kronshi The expansion on the bending style melding is wonderful. I really liked it and I hope that the various story elements that you expanded on in your backstory will come into play if your character enters the RP. I think my only oncern is that it's a pretty complex piece of role-playing, this bending style fusing, and I wonder if you have the writing stamina to weave it into the entire rp.

@Xandrya I genuinely believe that you will get bored with this character. While you hit all the check marks for what should be on the sheet, there's no energy, passion, or interest in her. This character revolves around one major facet of her life, and doesn't have anything else to connect her to the world. This k about her outside of her bending and her drama, and insert some of that into her CS to bring her forward and out of the background. Finding a hobby she likes is always a good one!

@Andreyich Man War Criminal to the max! I'm very interested in his mortal slider here. Why is poisoning a settlement and forcing prisoners of war to work for you more acceptable than looting and stealing? What implications do you think this has on his interactions with the rest of the group and dies he/will he acknowledge that he is in fact, a war criminal?

@Thayr I got a lot of questions here. Why is the Dai Li taking your family? Why are they hunting you? How does a character with little training hold of a squad of Earth Kingdom soldiers? And I'm not gunna lie - friendship issues always make me nervous in rps. There is going to be a lot of character on character time; how do you feel like you are going to get around this roadblock yourselves set yourself?

@Asura Hey, this is great. Right from his character sheet, you can feel that he is a mo k and highly spiritual, despite his attitude towards the Air Noamd culture. I don't have any revisions for you and that is in fact, a threat. Please move your m CS over tho the character sheet tab.

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@Thayr I got a lot of questions here. Why is the Dai Li taking your family? Why are they hunting you? How does a character with little training hold of a squad of Earth Kingdom soldiers? And I'm not gunna lie - friendship issues always make me nervous in rps. There is going to be a lot of character on character time; how do you feel like you are going to get around this roadblock yourselves set yourself?


- Dai Li took the family because they asked questions pursuant to the kidnapping of retired Earth Kingdom soldiers who were more in line with the King Xiong era and had made it known. In making noise, asking questions, they were undermining the Dai Li status quo and thus were removed.
- They are hunting Tomo because of the familial connection and suspicions that she is connected to those retired Earth Kingdom soldiers and, thus, is a dissident who requires removal.
- Because she was fighting a squad who were also exceptionally untrained - essentially conscripts. This combined with a stark difference in goals, survival versus capture, would allow Tomo to apply far more force/aggression compared to the Earth Kingdom squad and so allow her to fend them off until the rebel patrol arrived.
- Likely yes. I imagine at one point or another Tomo, or someone else, will be injured and thus will require caring for. I also imagine that, after a few combats, there will be far more trust. It's those little things that gradually move towards trust and friendship.
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Man War Criminal to the max! I'm very interested in his mortal slider here. Why is poisoning a settlement and forcing prisoners of war to work for you more acceptable than looting and stealing? What implications do you think this has on his interactions with the rest of the group and dies he/will he acknowledge that he is in fact, a war criminal?


I'm trying to go by vaguely pre renaissance perceptions, where anyone not surrendered is fair game. He was ordered to take a city and thus any means were a-okay. To take an example from the Mongol that inspired me for this character, when they invaded the Khwarezmian EMpire any city that surrendered had its people treated well. Any that didn't had its people destroyed to the last. He wouldn't exactly have a conception of a warcrime in that sense. There would also be some emotional undercurrents I haven't written where a hard to take fortress would have inevitably had a large amount of his men dead, and thus momentary rage would have more savage measures less problematic for him, and bring some impulsive desire to avenge his comrades he came to cherish; at the same time, people who already surrendered, and were of no threat being harassed is just cruelty for its own sake, especially since hypothetically everyone robbed would probably die on whatever their long road was but not even having enemy combatants in their number. Thus general Huo would have been seen as a person that is just greedy and violent rather than trying to be a good soldier. And, regarding the getting the waterbender healers to work for him, I figured that one would have been somewhat of a mercy as under him they'd be treated better than in a prison camp, rather than true coercion. While also being able to heal people of both sides rather than their talents of helping people being squandered in some sort of forced manual labour. I was also hoping to write this out IC, but I was thinking that he might have seen one of the waterbender healers tending to one of his own wounded men in the midst of battle which would have been a spark that got him much more interested in decent treatment of the foe; seeing people of the Water Nation humanize his countrymen would have certainly made him think twice about the dehumanization of his foe's people.

I think it would definitely cause some hypothetical issues with people who might know of this, though my character would bank on nobody harming him for this because he would believe that his practical knowledge in helping overcome the Earth nation army would be too useful to throw away for an admittedly dark past. But, as long as it didn't lead to maiming or killing him, I think he would accept and understand any abuses he suffers for what he had done. If someone walked up and sucker punched him over it, he would probably stand and take it rather than fighting back. If it was a merely verbal confrontation, I guess it depends on how far the party progressed in trust. Early on he might try to deflect, bringing up some war crime he saw his foe do on his own countrymen. If confronted when he trusts people of the party more, I think he would probably concede that it was wrong, and that if he had been more worldly and had met the peoples of the other nations before rather than just listening to jingoistic stuff about them being invaders on earth nation soil he would never have done it, and hopes his current efforts stop it from ever happening again.

But this doesn't really make or break the character to me, I can get rid of the savagery/brutality if its too problematic & edgy for the rag tags. I figured it would be fun to butt heads over the past in somewhat of a zuko-esque way but I suppose having fought for the bad guys before should be enough for that
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Put in it Discord so I'll put it here, too, gonna put a deadline on applications for the end of Saturday night, then take Sunday to decide on the final cast
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@Xandrya I genuinely believe that you will get bored with this character. While you hit all the check marks for what should be on the sheet, there's no energy, passion, or interest in her. This character revolves around one major facet of her life, and doesn't have anything else to connect her to the world. This k about her outside of her bending and her drama, and insert some of that into her CS to bring her forward and out of the background. Finding a hobby she likes is always a good one!


I took your advice and gave her a hobby, and I’m planning to use it as a lifeline just in case. Don’t want to spoil the fun by explaining how though.

The edit is at the bottom under trivia. If you need me to further elaborate in her bio, let me know.
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@webboysurf The only appearance question you need to answer is if Huo committed to the leaf loincloth life
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@webboysurf The only appearance question you need to answer is if Huo committed to the leaf loincloth life


As much as I would love to for the bit, I think he will be more clothed. The leaf loincloth will be reserved for any inevitable beach episodes.
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will be posting questions when I get a moment but for those that may have missed it, I'm looking for a small group, so once applications close I'll probably be looking for 3-4 characters in addition to the ones that have been accepted. I appreciate the effort that's been put in and thank you for the interest :)

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@webboysurf First thing's first, this "He leans more on the lean side," physically hurts me! However, his quirkiness is fun and even the darker part of his backstory keeps the lighter energy of the show. It's a well done sheet and I don't have any questions - though it gives me plenty of ideas 😊

@Eviledd1984 Firstly, characters must be between 18 - 24, which you are well outside the range of. Secondly, your backstory is difficult to reconcile with the reality of the setting. Big things like direct monarchy bloodlines should always be discussed with a GM first to ensure that it fits within your setting, the prowess of this character is scaled well higher than it should be, and the weight of this backstory does not match the theme and atmosphere of the rp. I highly recommend that you remove the connection to royalty from the friend, adjust your backstory so it isn't as heavy and aggressive, and tone down the potential power levels of te character.

@Scribe of Thoth Out of curiosity, how much interaction does Tao have with the populace of Ba Sing Se? He basically lived as a normal kid through his upbringing there or was a he mostly aloof? I'm not certain how much connection to some of the existing NPCs he may have without understanding this better!

@JewelSerket My biggest question is the going from the fire nation to the Earth Kingdom. I know the character disengaged from their current life several days before the temple lights appeared but from temple lights to current, it'll be three days. Talk me through the journey between the two places, as three days through heavily contested waters seems difficult.

@Aku the Samurai Okay so I see what we did here, but I got a few questions. Firstly, what is your character joining the Rebellion for. Is it just boredom? If this is the case, take some time to think about it a bit deeper with this character. Secondly, while connecting with major NPCs is a great thing, it needs to be discussed with a GM before starting this. Please change that portion of it from your CS and clarify them motivate please!

@XandryaDM me about how you are thinking about incorporating this drawing atuff that makes you not want to spoil it :)

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@Scribe of Thoth Out of curiosity, how much interaction does Tao have with the populace of Ba Sing Se? He basically lived as a normal kid through his upbringing there or was a he mostly aloof? I'm not certain how much connection to some of the existing NPCs he may have without understanding this better!


He was fairly normal but he kept to the hoity-toity rich areas as an ethnic minority among what I assume was an increasingly jingoistic population during Wei's reign, so he wasn't exactly popular. He'd definitely know any officials that his father would've interacted with openly, even if in a "say hi to Minister Zhong, Tao" capacity, and he'd at least be passingly familiar with other kids from the upper ring, with a probable preference for nonbenders since earthbender kids were basically a sour reminder he wasn't an earthbender.
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@Achronum, I adjusted her sheet a bit to give a more reasonable time frame for her arrival in the Earth Nation! The big change is at the end of her biography, though her description has slightly changed as well to reflect the changes.
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@Double Hey! This is a pretty neat idea, but a few notes.

Firstly, the Rebellion has existed for three days. It only pulled itself together in the aftermath of the temples notifying the world the Avatar was in fact alive.

Two, like I said, really cool concept; however, this guy doesn't really have any need to join the rebellion. Honestly, his status quo stays the same regardless of how the war - his character sheet says he detests the Earth Kingdom, sure, but is that really enough to put himself at risk that joining the Rebellion would do?

Three, I like the mystery of his identity but I just want to make sure you've larrady planned put his appearance for when the mask comes off!
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