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a meanie bo beanie has appeared

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a meanie bo beanie has appeared



Looks good to me! There's some placeholder list items left over, but that's hardly a big deal. Welcome back Zoey!
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@Lugubrious hooray! ^^

i left them there on purpose for easier copy and pasting in the future lol, i can get rid of them though. since they are just kinda sitting there
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For the current challenge, these might come in handy. Sorry that I couldn't find named locations for the eastern part of the map, I guess the game died too quickly.


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I have made another lost number


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I have made another lost number



That's another very interesting and creative Lost Number. The only thing I'd want adjusted is the strength related to spirits. Your character can be good at reverse-engineering technology, but I would rather not involve spirits.
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That's another very interesting and creative Lost Number. The only thing I'd want adjusted is the strength related to spirits. Your character can be good at reverse-engineering technology, but I would rather not involve spirits.


have edited it to: Reverse engineering: Dr Yu has a considerable talent for taking things apart and figuring out how they tick, which an be handy for creating replicas or derivative of supplied biological or mechanical components. She can't do magic however.
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I’m sure you thought those where all jokes


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Ehh, I'm not too sure about that one to be honest. I'll have to think about it.
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first I want to apologize for not saying anything. second I apologize in advance for just dropping off of the face of the Earth. circumstances led to my stepmom breaking my tablet and I haven't had access to Discord or The Guild for the past while. truth is I've been dealing with a lot. and it was a struggle because I was sleeping on a first friend's couch for a while didn't know where my life was headed. I still need to save money I'm back where I was living before but I need to save money for a PC. I'm currently using a TV voice to text to write this.
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So anyways I wish you all well.
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I'm sorry things have been so rough for you. I really hope things take a turn for the better. Farewell.
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I'm bad at backstory stuff. One of the few platformer mascot lost numbers I'll be making.

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Although our Lost Numbers have defined origins, that doesn't mean we should just say that they're like one or the other parent in some department and leave it up to the reader to do all the work. You should still describe this character's appearance and personality. I know you mentioned that you're not so good at backstory-related stuff, but the In the Now section could really stand to be fleshed out. Maybe we could work together to put together something, I'd be glad to help. There's no reason to invoke a Consul if he ends up barely being utilized after all, and this backstory doesn't explain Duskwing's involvement with the Lost Numbers.

While I'm fine with having a passive Skill that can be actively intensified, weaknesses shouldn't also be strengths. Limited Flight should replace Hover in stating that she can fly low to the ground, with the limits to that skill explained within it. Likewise, having one's own light could just as easily be a benefit when trying to navigate at night or in dark areas. Regarding her abilities, may I ask for your reasoning for the power creep in her abilities compared to her parents? In Dota Brightwing's Blink Heal only travels 10 units, and Polymorph inflicts a slow rather than a root and damage buff. Spyro's fire breath doesn't have such special properties as far as I can tell.

Just to describe the overall philosophy, the Lost Numbers aren't meant to the cumulative strength of their parents and then some; if anything they're watered down because they're half one and half the other, and rather than try to tread the same ground but worse they'd be more likely to try their own paths, especially without the environments that their parents originated from. Neither of the children of Cloud and Tifa are hyper-competent supersoldiers for instance; they have their own distinct niches.
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That's a really excellent Lost Number submission! You've thoughtfully used the core elements of the World of Light to great effect to set up a compelling narrative for this character that's also quite down-to-earth in terms of scope. And her role as a Lost Number is both humble and very valuable, making her an important part of the team. That's a definite approval.
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