Hi! Aspiring ghostwriter here. Since I assume this position pays in experience rather than the industry-standard by-the-word legal tender, the only thing I'd need to get started helping with this post is to have a few questions answered. (Don't worry about the too much free time to have anything better to do, or the too little self-worth to expect recognition and/or compensation for my work; I've already brought those!)
1. I feel like an opening post from the POV of the Evil Organization could be interesting, kinda like how the Deus Ex games like to start with ominous Bob Page cinematics. Foreshadowing and all that. But I'm struggling to understand what sense they saw in nuking the entire planet? Could you go into their reasons for doing this a little bit?
2. Actually, sorry, I should have started from the beginning......how did the Evil Organization "take the worlds nuclear weapons[sic]" in the first place? I didn't realize world governments liked to leave those things laying around for anyone to take in this setting. (Such interesting worldbuilding so far; kudos!!)
3. The radiation seems to be a very important plot device in this story. But I cannot quite wrap my head around why everybody wanted to shelter underground and hide from it. After all, instead of melting people's DNA sequences at the submolecular level and causing them to suffer horrific burns, lesions, desquamation, and other unspeakably agonizing afflictions, it gives them kickass superpowers! If radiation gave people wings and laser vision I know I wouldn't want to hide in some underground vault somewhere; I'd slather on the sunscreen and say, "Load me up, baby!!"
4. Also, did the Evil Organization know radiation is cool as fuck and liable to give kickass superpowers to spunky teenagers, or was that an unintended consequence? (A potential setup for some moral ambiguity in our story's villains?? Me likey!)
5. But back to our intrepid heroes, and as for perhaps the most important question driving the entire story: if the world is already destroyed and the Evil Organization has already succeeded in nuking it, then what's the point in journeying out to "stop" them in the first place? How does one "stop" an apocalypse which has already happened?
By all means please take your time in answering these questions, but know also that the sooner you answer them is the sooner I can get started writing your roleplay for you, and considering how action-packed and exciting the story sounds, I truly cannot wait!!!
Sincerely signed,
TPP