Yup, I messed up. Sorry about that, I blame exam brain.
Myst said
I really hope Instantes is okay... :(
Anemone said
I'm not so sure if I can really impose when I just recently hopped in here, but I'd like to give some advice, Hymusia. You may want to reel back the portrayal of them as a wapanese gothic lolita club. It doesn't really create any creepy dissonance between how they behave and their alleged capacity for violence, it just makes it harder to take them seriously. Likewise, the assertion of the ambiguity of each character's backgrounds doesn't really provoke a sense of mystery so much as leave unexplained why they are the way they are. You may very well have already intended to do this, but might I suggest you go deeper into the reasons behind each of the Malkavian's delusions, as well as less ambiguous details on Leo and Demitri?Similarly, they're so involved with what amounts to a pop-goth subculture that they don't really fit as low generation vampires, either. I mean, it's not like freak low-generation Embraces aren't a thing that happens sometimes, but that's a whole lot of them in one place, and they aren't particularly tolerated by the Camarilla. To be fair, we've got a lot of people in the RPG who have Generations that are a tad strange, so you can probably get away with ignoring this detail. But honestly? 7th Generation Kindred is pushing it. Assuming embrace took place after CLD published Alice's Adventures in Wonderland, that gives her 147 years at most.
cthulu said
Harley is in fact one of my main VTM characters and there are about 20 full pages of back story on her, her family and her blood line. Why she is who she is and how she became that way. I've changed her some for this game and so her back story will be different but don't presume that she's just some kooky bint or she'll fuck your face with a rusty razor.
Zed said
I don't want to sound like an asshole (especially since I'm yet to post my shit), but 20 full pages?For one fucking Malk?Jesus, don't you think that's a little bit much?Just saying.
Zacharius said
Zed, I just warned people about being unnecessary.
Don't be unnecessary.
Zed said
Mkay.Just saying, it seems a bit much.
Zacharius said
Congratulations.
You're still doing it.