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1. Yumeiko and Miyuki found a collapsed Velvet.
2. Yumeiko fled to the front desk.
3. Miyuki helped Velvet up.
4. Velvet nom'd Miyuki.
5. Iris came upon the scene of noms.
6. Iris went full Alpha, let out a big roar and lunged.
7a. Miyuki extracted herself from the scene.
7b. Max heard the beastial roar and hurried to investigate.
7c. Max arrives at the scene
8. Miyuki arrives at front desk and delivers her whole spiel - all the lines.
9. Ghost-chan hurries to the scene.
9a. Gorgon hurries to the scene.
10. Velvet is being pummeled by laughing, snarling psycho-woof. Max throws steak.
11. Ghost arrives and tries to pull Velvet out of the grasp of Iris, who gets baned in the head with a slab of meat.
12. Iris goes to Max and eats her food. Gorgon arrives.

@Xaltwind

Taking into account the small edit since @LupusIntus assumed we were on the same floor (same), this works for me 100%. Does this seem like a reasonable interpretation for all accounted?

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Look if I'm 100%, I don't have a lot of great stuff in my life right now and you guys are like...really sick.

Oh, by the way, for those curious and unfamiliar: this is what Velvet sounds like speaking her mother tongue:

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@LupusIntus Yeah, there's no time pressure on this or anything, I'm perfectly happy to take some more time so people can actually get room to post. Just noticed it when making a skeleton outline and figured it'd be better to bring up sooner than later. <3

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@LupusIntus Ooh, nice catch, missed that.
@CitrusArms This, yes, consistency is what I desperately need, I have some issues lmao. The problem with this chain of events is Miyuki rather explicitly waits for Iris to jump before she heads to reception, so she'd still be there when Max ran in. Might be a wise idea to ask @Xaltwind about this now as well.

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Iris had lunged but it was indicated that she hadn't actually struck yet.

@Kuro

I think this is where my confusion is centered. I read the bit underneath it, "If it wasn’t obvious by the laughing growls and barks she let out while attacking, she was having the time of her life," as Iris connecting with a good solid hit or two. And it doesn't quite ring true for me that if Miyuki left post-Iris transformation as seems to be written, she'd get to reception in time for Suzy to get there before Velvet took a hit.

If you want some blood drawn, I can modify my post a bit to have Iris strike before the steak hits?

@BunniesOfDoom

I really hope it doesn't sound like I just want Velvet to get the shit beaten out of her lmao, it just doesn't really feel like it makes sense that all of these things could happen SO close together without any advance knowledge. The way I read it, Iris doesn't even really make much noise for Max to hear until she's already attacking Velvet, right? So it only makes sense that she'd strike prior.

I'm really really sorry for bothering you guys with this and forcing rewriting, I just don't really know how I'd write it actually happening while making sense, since it feels like events seem to overlap.

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I think the thing I'm most confused by is how Max and Suzy are both able to stop Iris/get Velvet out, when she took the lunge before Miyuki even left.
EDIT: I'm just going to wait for everyone to weigh in on it so we can get it consistent. Velvet probably gets at least a bit injured.

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@Dragonydas@Kuro@BunniesOfDoom@LupusIntus Okay, wait, I'm trying to figure out the order of events here. Miyuki left after Iris lunged at Velvet, not before. So wouldn't any assistance to the scene have only come after Iris had been in wolf mode for a while? As I'm writing the beginnings of a post out I'm starting to realize that the order of events doesn't make a ton of sense. Otherwise Max would've seen Miyuki, right?

I feel like we should iron this out now before things get more confused. Tl;dr, wouldn't Iris spend a little bit of time ripping and tearing at Velvet before anybody else can intervene?

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I have a personal hope that one day she and Velvet can get along, even if she's inimical. I feel like she'd take "I was starving and my instincts grabbed hold and wouldn't let go" better than Miyuki. She's far too pure for this sinful earth, after all.

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She's so PRECIOUS

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@Dragonydas Ah, for what it's worth; Velvet is currently not savoring the blood. Rather, she's on her ass after being zooped by Suzy, thanking every entity above and below that Suzy decided to help her and that Max throws a better Wagyu fastball than anybody reasonably should, so she's not absolutely shredded. Wide-eyed, not so much frightened as shocked.

Velvet can be dumb, especially when she's hungry. But to stand there savoring as a werewolf jumps at her with intent to kill? She's not THAT dumb.