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Updated my flaws, hopefully its better

and no I didn't just post this update in the wrong tab, what are you talking about....
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@Earnest Evans - The question still persists here, Evans... why would a man, let alone making his own order which he's supposed to have a life oath to, ever willingly leave his own family? It simply doesn't make any sense to me. I think the only major thing beyond that is... his children have become adults "long ago?" Was he like fourteen when he had all three? Saying long ago implies 25-30 of age, but he's only 40... haha (which I get is the max age). I'm not entirely sure where you were going with having a wife and children, honestly.


He didn't quite leave his family of his own volition. It's stated that all able-bodied Knights leave to join the Knights Hospitallier, and Asher, being the son of a knight, would be drafted into the order as soon as he was formally knighted. Knights Hospitallier work abroad until they're no longer able to work (whether it be old age or injury), at which point they and the family they created during their travels return to the lands they were awarded.

Effectively, all knights are cut off from their immediate family, and are expected to have their spouse and children act as camp followers. His brothers are off elsewhere in the order, and his father and mother are back home, enjoying their retirement.

This being a medieval time period, the idea of "adult" and "long ago" is a good bit different compared to a modern period. I was more thinking that the kids would be 16 to 18 at a maximum. Given a one-year difference between each child, that would mean he found his wife around the age of 22 and immediately started having children. Considering how there's very little to do while wandering from place to place and how effective contraceptives aren't quite common in these days and ages, I wouldn't consider this too far-fetched.

I would really appreciate if you could add my name to that list of character sheets you're waiting to be completed. I'm really interested in this setting, and I'm willing to change what needs to be changed.
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@lydyn

Finished the CS, waiting for approval.
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Yea no problem, I'll work on that. Thanks for your input!
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OK, nation app almost done, will finish when I get home
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@lydyn After many many edits and reworkings I think I'm finally satisfied with my CS now. It's on Page 2 waiting for your review.
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@Irisity, I hope that I haven't stepped on any toes in setting my character in Ybella. The concept of a land that has a heavy focus on mercantilism and heavy regard for the capital elite is fascinating to me, and so I tried to expand upon that with Asher.

@lydyn, I've added more detail to my character, and altogether made it easier to read. Hopefully, he'll be able to serve as a foil to several characters.
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@Irisity, I hope that I haven't stepped on any toes in setting my character in Ybella. The concept of a land that has a heavy focus on mercantilism and heavy regard for the capital elite is fascinating to me, and so I tried to expand upon that with Asher.

@lydyn, I've added more detail to my character, and altogether made it easier to read. Hopefully, he'll be able to serve as a foil to several characters.


Just a quick note that I want addressed before looking again - I didn't mean his father and mother. The family I was referring to is his wife and children. Why would he leave them behind? Or does he plan on dragging them along for the ride? xD I mean, does he not see his wife and children as important people in his life? Almost seems like... they're just there because it was expected of him vs. actually being in love.

The medieval thing I can kind of accept, even though this is a medieval fantasy and some things are expected to be different, but a lot of people consider 16-18 adults too - so that's cool.

WILL BE LOOKING AT EVERYONE ELSE SHORTLY!~
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<Snipped quote by Earnest Evans>

Just a quick note that I want addressed before looking again - I didn't mean his father and mother. The family I was referring to is his wife and children. Why would he leave them behind? Or does he plan on dragging them along for the ride? xD I mean, does he not see his wife and children as important people in his life? Almost seems like... they're just there because it was expected of him vs. actually being in love.

The medieval thing I can kind of accept, even though this is a medieval fantasy and some things are expected to be different, but a lot of people consider 16-18 adults too - so that's cool.

WILL BE LOOKING AT EVERYONE ELSE SHORTLY!~


Oh no, his wife and children are following him. There was quite a lot of instances of this happening in medieval times, in the form of camp followers. Throughout the history of organized warfare, armies needed someone to clean the soldiers' clothes, cook their food, and keep their morale up. To that end, soldiers often brought along their families. Asher found Isabel because she was the daughter of one of the healers in the order. Because neither of them really could just desert, the two hit it off together and got married through one of the order's chaplains.

The juicy details of Asher's romance isn't quite something I'd like to divulge right now, as it's supposed to be a way to subtly build his character. If I let everything loose just right now, I wouldn't have much to reveal when the time came to flesh my character out!
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@lydyn After many many edits and reworkings I think I'm finally satisfied with my CS now. It's on Page 2 waiting for your review.


Drinking buddy! XD That's what I can see so far.
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@Earnest Evans I wouldn't mind, but you did not pm and ask me. I created Ybella and you added on things I did not consent to.
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@Earnest Evans I wouldn't mind, but you did not pm and ask me. I created Ybella and you added on things I did not consent to.


I apologize for that, I didn't realize I should have PM'd you. Is there anything about my depiction of Ybella that you want changed?
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@Earnest Evans I'll pm you
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Drinking buddy! XD That's what I can see so far.


All of my characters tend to be alcoholics for some reason. Also, I honestly didn't look at the other characters until now and I've just realized that everyone is some kind of combat oriented person and I'm basically a quirky drunk nerd with a very expensive chemistry set...
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Oh no, his wife and children are following him.


*Bites lip* ... it's quite possibly they will be in danger and maybe even die. Are you really sure you want to keep this part of his character? Unlike Asher, they are not power houses and not likely masters of anything (since masters are pretty rare as it is, it just made sense legendary characters were also masters of their trade). Of course, the group might try and guard them, but no one really has any idea what is in store for them along this journey. I don't even fully know (I don't plan super specifics but instead a general plot so players can interact and change things freely).

@Midori - The alchemist is approved without any hesitation on my part! I am adoring her!~ Sana is accepted!! She will definitely have uses. ^.-

@Spawnling - Good work. ^.^ Accepted! I'll add the castle churchy thing soon to the characters tab.

@Jerkchicken - Sadly this character seems a bit out of place for this adventure, I'm sorry. I can go into detail, but thanks for applying!
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*Bites lip* ... it's quite possibly they will be in danger and maybe even die. Are you really sure you want to keep this part of his character? Unlike Asher, they are not power houses and not likely masters of anything (since masters are pretty rare as it is, it just made sense legendary characters were also masters of their trade). Of course, the group might try and guard them, but no one really has any idea what is in store for them along this journey. I don't even fully know (I don't plan super specifics but instead a general plot so players can interact and change things freely).


If Asher's family comes along, so do the rest of the Many Banners. A group of four professional, highly-trained warriors should be enough to maintain relative safety. Of course, they won't be quite good enough to mount a full offensive on any major enemies, but they will be enough to defend the group's assets.
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@MidoriDon't worry, us fighting types will protect you and inexchange, you keep us alive with health potions and stat boosts.
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@Midori - The alchemist is approved without any hesitation on my part! I am adoring her!~ Sana is accepted!! She will definitely have uses. ^.-


Aww how cute! You got so excited about my character that you even spelled her name wrong! ^.^
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If Asher's family comes along, so do the rest of the Many Banners. A group of four professional, highly-trained warriors should be enough to maintain relative safety. Of course, they won't be quite good enough to mount a full offensive on any major enemies, but they will be enough to defend the group's assets.


If you're really that determined... work things out with Irisity and then let me know when it's all final - I'll look then. ^.-

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Aww how cute! You got so excited about my character that you even spelled her name wrong! ^.^


... ^//^ Not my fault you have an awesome character... *Pouts*
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