Updated my flaws, hopefully its better
and no I didn't just post this update in the wrong tab, what are you talking about....
and no I didn't just post this update in the wrong tab, what are you talking about....
@Earnest Evans - The question still persists here, Evans... why would a man, let alone making his own order which he's supposed to have a life oath to, ever willingly leave his own family? It simply doesn't make any sense to me. I think the only major thing beyond that is... his children have become adults "long ago?" Was he like fourteen when he had all three? Saying long ago implies 25-30 of age, but he's only 40... haha (which I get is the max age). I'm not entirely sure where you were going with having a wife and children, honestly.
@Irisity, I hope that I haven't stepped on any toes in setting my character in Ybella. The concept of a land that has a heavy focus on mercantilism and heavy regard for the capital elite is fascinating to me, and so I tried to expand upon that with Asher.
@lydyn, I've added more detail to my character, and altogether made it easier to read. Hopefully, he'll be able to serve as a foil to several characters.
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Just a quick note that I want addressed before looking again - I didn't mean his father and mother. The family I was referring to is his wife and children. Why would he leave them behind? Or does he plan on dragging them along for the ride? xD I mean, does he not see his wife and children as important people in his life? Almost seems like... they're just there because it was expected of him vs. actually being in love.
The medieval thing I can kind of accept, even though this is a medieval fantasy and some things are expected to be different, but a lot of people consider 16-18 adults too - so that's cool.
WILL BE LOOKING AT EVERYONE ELSE SHORTLY!~
@lydyn After many many edits and reworkings I think I'm finally satisfied with my CS now. It's on Page 2 waiting for your review.
@Earnest Evans I wouldn't mind, but you did not pm and ask me. I created Ybella and you added on things I did not consent to.
Drinking buddy! XD That's what I can see so far.
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Oh no, his wife and children are following him.
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*Bites lip* ... it's quite possibly they will be in danger and maybe even die. Are you really sure you want to keep this part of his character? Unlike Asher, they are not power houses and not likely masters of anything (since masters are pretty rare as it is, it just made sense legendary characters were also masters of their trade). Of course, the group might try and guard them, but no one really has any idea what is in store for them along this journey. I don't even fully know (I don't plan super specifics but instead a general plot so players can interact and change things freely).
@Midori - The alchemist is approved without any hesitation on my part! I am adoring her!~ Sana is accepted!! She will definitely have uses. ^.-
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If Asher's family comes along, so do the rest of the Many Banners. A group of four professional, highly-trained warriors should be enough to maintain relative safety. Of course, they won't be quite good enough to mount a full offensive on any major enemies, but they will be enough to defend the group's assets.
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Aww how cute! You got so excited about my character that you even spelled her name wrong! ^.^