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I've added a character sheet :D

Mostly done, xcept for a few things ^^


What @LHG100, Chars tab being reserved for accepted CS is generally an unspoken rule site wide more or less ^^
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I did speak a few words with emperor(that being blade, not THE emprah), though you probably have a point!

In my defense, it's been 1 year since I joined a big RP :D
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C.S. UP



adding it here for formality :D

I'm also going to give a callout to Team Psyker, while I'm at it!
People blessed with extraordinary powers beyond that of common "normies" ought to stick together! ^^
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""Scylla" [Custom-Built Handgun], .50 caliber, 7 round clip size x 3 carried. "

Those are usually referred to as "handcannons" or just variants of autopistols in 40K.

Psykers also rarely get refractor fields but that is up to the GM I guess.

I also didn't know there is Discord :c
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When I searched for "Handcannon", this is basically what I got xD



If this was a comedy show, I might consider using it as a weapon ^^
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wh40k.lexicanum.com/wiki/Hand_Cannon

your weapon is basically just a master-crafted handcannon from the description, perhaps of some non-described pattern
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T'was after all a custom model ^^

I changed its technical description from Handgun to Handcannon. I imagine it's the second best alternative to trying to fit a bolter pistol down your pocket! :D
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So here are the issues with your character that need to be corrected.

First on appearance, psykers are typically fairly drained of their physical traits due to the severe strains their bodies go through when becoming sanctioned. It typically makes them a little more feeble. Another thing I see a bit of an issue with is that your character is this very powerfully built character, but very feminine? I’d need to see an example of this to really understand I guess, but mainly psykers typically aren’t very buff because of the strain their bodies went through.

Powers: Psychic powers are sampling from several disciplines. Canon dictates that while it is possible for Psykers to use multiple schools, it is extremely hard. Divination and Telekinesis are two separate disciplines, Smite and Storm of Lightning come from Biomancy. Thus, Adrianne has skills from three separate psychic disciplines when mastering one is considered a grand achievement.

Equipment:

Main weapon: Weapon misnamed. The weapon described here is a Glaive, not an oversized Saber with an extended handle. Not that big of a deal

Pistol: You’re a psyker? Not sure why you need this, plus it would be more like a autopistol which are honestly not all that great. But I'll accept it if you want to keep it.

Ceremonial Dagger: I’m not against it, but I’m curious as to why?

Refractor field: This is pretty rare tech. Not a whole lot of people use it. White Scars Souldrinkers use them, as well as Imperial Guard officers and enginseers.

Servo Skulls: I’m fine with you having one, but I’d prefer you only have one.

Events:

Savior: Events given are unclear. Personal Augury allows one to see the fate of a willing target, but it was never specified to have been used. Preternatural Awareness gives impressions of future events, but is also not described being used. Overall, very foggy and could use more detail.

Guide: I'll buy that. Glimpse allows for a look into the future to see what might happen. Coupled with Far Sight could make for a pretty effective "Guess and check" system.

Hates Surprises: Why is this here? Feels more like a quirk than a meaningful event.

Fireteam: Prescience is an effective ability, but I don't believe it is that effective.

Warpstorm: This event seems to catapult her straight into "Rogue" territory. The line "What had been a cautious girl that had stepped onto the planet would instead emerge a seemingly reckless with little to no restraint on her powers!" Tells me that she'd probably be suspected of falling to chaos pretty quickly and killed on precaution.
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So here are the issues with your character that need to be corrected.

First on appearance, psykers are typically fairly drained of their physical traits due to the severe strains their bodies go through when becoming sanctioned. It typically makes them a little more feeble. Another thing I see a bit of an issue with is that your character is this very powerfully built character, but very feminine? I’d need to see an example of this to really understand I guess, but mainly psykers typically aren’t very buff because of the strain their bodies went through.
The appearance is more of a flavor thing I did. I did plan to make her sort of like a "battle mage" kind of character, so I figured it'd make sense if she a bit more physical than your run-of-the-mill psyker. In RPG terms, imagine someone who spent a lot of points in stamina! :D
I might draw a picture to illustrate!


Powers: Psychic powers are sampling from several disciplines. Canon dictates that while it is possible for Psykers to use multiple schools, it is extremely hard. Divination and Telekinesis are two separate disciplines, Smite and Storm of Lightning come from Biomancy. Thus, Adrianne has skills from three separate psychic disciplines when mastering one is considered a grand achievement.
That is true. Granted, if she is with the Inquisition, she usually has some notable talent that puts her above the rest. Or at least so I think!
I could limit it just to Telekinesis with a few tidbits from biomancy, if you think the original was too much.


Equipment:

Main weapon: Weapon misnamed. The weapon described here is a Glaive, not an oversized Saber with an extended handle. Not that big of a deal

Pistol: You’re a psyker? Not sure why you need this, plus it would be more like a autopistol which are honestly not all that great. But I'll accept it if you want to keep it.
There are times when even a Psyker could need to rely on more mundane tools! Though if you'd allow it, I would upgrade it to a Plasma Pistol. I was just unsure what equipment would be Ok to start with.

Ceremonial Dagger: I’m not against it, but I’m curious as to why?
How many action scenes haven't you seen when the hero is being beaten by the enemy in a wrestling match, only for the hero to pull out a dagger and shank its determinator foe?! ^^

Refractor field: This is pretty rare tech. Not a whole lot of people use it. White Scars Souldrinkers use them, as well as Imperial Guard officers and enginseers.
Since I'm planning on giving her a background involving the guard and seeing as she's now involved with the Inquisition, I imagined it wouldn't be too far fetched for her to have obtained one!
Besides, who in their right mind would want to risk a stray bullet disrupting the psyker when she was channeling raw, terrifying arcane energies?!


Servo Skulls: I’m fine with you having one, but I’d prefer you only have one.
There goes my plan of a servo skull swarm...

Events:

Savior: Events given are unclear. Personal Augury allows one to see the fate of a willing target, but it was never specified to have been used. Preternatural Awareness gives impressions of future events, but is also not described being used. Overall, very foggy and could use more detail.

Guide: I'll buy that. Glimpse allows for a look into the future to see what might happen. Coupled with Far Sight could make for a pretty effective "Guess and check" system.

Hates Surprises: Why is this here? Feels more like a quirk than a meaningful event.

Fireteam: Prescience is an effective ability, but I don't believe it is that effective.

Warpstorm: This event seems to catapult her straight into "Rogue" territory. The line "What had been a cautious girl that had stepped onto the planet would instead emerge a seemingly reckless with little to no restraint on her powers!" Tells me that she'd probably be suspected of falling to chaos pretty quickly and killed on precaution.

I wrote a lot of these events a while ago. If you want them to better reflect the character's direct abilities, I could adjust them!

As for the whole reckless thing, she plays risky, and has reaped great rewards for it. It's much of the reason why she became so powerful! She is playing with fire, and chaos hasn't claimed her... at least not yet!
Her theme is basically that she is living on the edge, though hasn't gone over it yet :D


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There has yet to be a picture of a "buff" psyker. Every psyker we have seen looks like they were on a hunger-strike for a week, and had only eaten once every two days prior to that; skin to their bones, clear ribs, almost not muscle mass.
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I never said I'd turn her into the hulk ^^
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This is the only example of a psyker that is not feeble I can find, and it is fan-made.



There is also a reason psykers do not carry chainswords, lasguns/autoguns, and the like. They are usually too weak to do so. Even Squats, my lovely Space Dwarfs, have their Psykers get much less muscular and buff as they become Living Ancestors, although admittedly this is due to them being old AF.
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@Rithy Okay.

On reference to appearance it wasn’t really a question of letting you use it. As I said when psykers go through the process of being sanctioned they get pretty messed up by the procedures and are pretty physically weak and their bodies deteriorate a bit, they tend to be smaller and have less muscle mass than normal, while they styill can have pretty average strength or body types they don’t get to be warrior style. I get you want to do kind of a battle mage, but that’s not really how it works in 40k, Psykers are psykers and that’s really about it when it comes to Humans.

Pistol: I wasn’t really offering an alternative weapon in that respect? If you want an autopistol so be it? I’d even accept a las pistol. Having a plasma pistol seems a bit much.

Dagger: Just have a combat knife/dagger ceremonial dagger I mean… Isn’t really ceremonial unless you use it for some kind of ceremony xD

Refractor Field? I mean I get it, but you are a powerful psyker and are capable of great feats regardless of this. A psyker position is more support than being in a direct line of fire, a refractor field is rather rare, and I’d prefer if you gave yourself a chance to perhaps earn one in Roleplay than start off with one. I understand other folks have some pretty cool advanced stuff but they aren’t psykers.

Psyker Powers: This is pretty simple, yeah I’d only want you to have powers from two different schools. So you kind of answered that one yourself, which I appreciate.

Adjusting your events would be fantastic if you don’t mind

As for playing with fire, that’s never a good idea especially in the Imperial Guard it’ll get a Psyker shot almost instantly. I understand you want to have done great things with your powers but Psykers in the military are typically kept on a extremely short leash with a bolt pistol at the back of their head constantly, and regardless of falling to chaos or not chancing falling to chaos would most likely get them shot in the back of the head.
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Guys, can I please do my job and work with her being I'm GM? Rather than having everyone else toss their own two cents in.
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Guys, can I please do my job and work with her being I'm GM? Rather than having everyone else toss their own two cents in.


I get that, but isn't a little peer review good?
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I get that, but isn't a little peer review good?


Peer review is good when its requested.
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[Finished and finalized CS is below]

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I did a small reinvention of the character sheet to emphasize the frail psyker trait :D


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