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First of all, I would like to state that if this character sheet would have been submitted without prior knowledge on my part about the character, it would have definitely been rejected for various reasons, even without the additions granted by claimed magical coins. However, you've done a lot of work to establish how this character would behave and utilize her skillset in the setting itself. A fate-correcting agent who so far has worked unseen so as to not alter the future is a novel concept, especially because it successfully utilizes the established story to give both direction and conflict to her, and tie her up with the current storyline without major inconsistencies.

There are some changes I would like to see to her abilities. First off, while it is understandable that the Fates would have given her Illusion magic powerful enough to avoid attention even from Third Eye-users and other Patrons, it is no longer the case now that she has joined the Crimson Cradle, so the aforementioned methods should be added among other advanced methods to spotting her. Otherwise she can keep the long-duration non-interruptible Greater Invisibility magic to comply with her Gifted status.

This probably goes without saying and you have implied as much, but for clarity's sake, replicating the appearance of attacks using Gifted Gravity magic should only be possible for attacks that don't derive from a unique or difficult-to-replicate source of damage. For example, she couldn't replicate the slash of a fire sword, or a blow that leaves shards of crystal in it's wake. Illusion magic can be used to temporarily fool in this aspect, but only for a short while.

While Coercion is allowed to be empowered in situations where Power of Friendship can be applied, and is capable of being resisted by higher MAG-users than the user, I would like it to also be capable of it being resisted with characters that possess higher LCK than the user to comply with the ruling. In the same vein, activating Parasite in combat should be changed to require the character to spend a turn on feeding, replacing the character's regular melee attacks to bite the target with a two-turn cooldown.

The spool Mystic Artifact should be specified to be capable of only revealing characters' futures with visions as agreed with the GMs depending on where and how it is used.

On a side note, Mac reminds me of Wolfwalkers, which is a cool movie.

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First of all, I would like to state that if this character sheet would have been submitted without prior knowledge on my part about the character, it would have definitely been rejected for various reasons, even without the additions granted by claimed magical coins. However, you've done a lot of work to establish how this character would behave and utilize her skillset in the setting itself. A fate-correcting agent who so far has worked unseen so as to not alter the future is a novel concept, especially because it successfully utilizes the established story to give both direction and conflict to her, and tie her up with the current storyline without major inconsistencies.


For anyone interested in the full story, I've always found the prospect of an invisible magical girl tampering with things to be interesting. For the past few months, I've been going back to my old posts to work Mac in at appropriate moments. I think the first season was the most interesting because I legit left room open for a magical girl to be doing things, like setting up contact between the Bates and Veronica. She's also responsible for things like Alicia's sudden loss of mana during the Justine siege, etc. Some of her posts are just a few sentences long, and there are others that are far longer than that.

There are some changes I would like to see to her abilities. First off, while it is understandable that the Fates would have given her Illusion magic powerful enough to avoid attention even from Third Eye-users and other Patrons, it is no longer the case now that she has joined the Crimson Cradle, so the aforementioned methods should be added among other advanced methods to spotting her. Otherwise she can keep the long-duration non-interruptible Greater Invisibility magic to comply with her Gifted status.


I'm uh, I never really understood how magic worked in this RP, so I'm just gunna take your word for it. I kinda figured she'd be a lot easier to spot now that people can react to her shenanigans. Anyway, edited.

This probably goes without saying and you have implied as much, but for clarity's sake, replicating the appearance of attacks using Gifted Gravity magic should only be possible for attacks that don't derive from a unique or difficult-to-replicate source of damage. For example, she couldn't replicate the slash of a fire sword, or a blow that leaves shards of crystal in it's wake. Illusion magic can be used to temporarily fool in this aspect, but only for a short while.


I would argue that she could create friction burns to replicate a fire attack, but honestly, not really a meme I plan on playing with that much. As you said, it's mostly for stuff that is possible to do with gravity magic. Though the bit about illusion magic is noted.

While Coercion is allowed to be empowered in situations where Power of Friendship can be applied, and is capable of being resisted by higher MAG-users than the user, I would like it to also be capable of it being resisted with characters that possess higher LCK than the user to comply with the ruling. In the same vein, activating Parasite in combat should be changed to require the character to spend a turn on feeding, replacing the character's regular melee attacks to bite the target with a two-turn cooldown.


Can she still use an off-hand weapon attack with her minor-action and keep her full movement speed after a feed?

I'm just shittin' with you, edited.

The spool Mystic Artifact should be specified to be capable of only revealing characters' futures with visions as agreed with the GMs depending on where and how it is used.


That was a little woopsie on my part. She has a replica of endless eclipse liked we talked about in PMs. I forgot to edit out the spool. Regardless, without being able to read ahead in the RP, it's probably gunna be a lot harder to guess what's going on.

Edited, and noted about the Gm thing.

On a side note, Mac reminds me of Wolfwalkers, which is a cool movie.


I'm glad you told me it was a cool movie, because I never saw it.

So

Here's the new version.



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Accepted. You can post to Char tab, check out my latest post for what the most recent happenings are, and place Mac somewhere in Penrose.
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BEHOLD!

It is all COMPLETED!!!




Sheer dramatic theatrics aside, spent a heck of a time trying to get the code right and get things worked out good for the apps themselves. So if I need to fix something just let me know and I'll fix it! Hopefully not much will need to be fixed...but still. (@_@)



















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Accepted; you may post to the Char tab and begin posting IC. Let me know if you need help with placing your characters.
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The time has come. Days and days of work, setbacks and accidental progress loss, and a gamble in the form of her rerolls. All completed! Finally.

Behold, Serenity's app with the rerolls, fixes, neatening up, and other janitorial work done to get it ready for resubmission! :3

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Here's a newcomer in the ring trying his firsthand at a magical girl RP lol.




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Here's a newcomer in the ring trying his firsthand at a magical girl RP lol.





Solid set of powers, even if the pun wasn't relevant, hah. The idea of a bifauxnen type of character is unique, which is impressive considering the variety we have had over the seasons. The Horror is also one of the cutest so far (including the party girl Cthulhu we've had). I'll let co-GMs check this as well, but in my part I consider this accepted. Once they've also checked and there's no foreseeable need for edits, you can post this into the CHAR tab and begin posting IC: your character will start at Al Scarpe's office, having arrived there before Chloe teleported in.
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Hey, just dropping by to say hi. Thanks for having me when I was having a real life conundrum two years ago. I'd reach out to each and any of you peeps who helped my mind be entertained that time, but maybe this is faster. Peace.
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