@Atrophy I absolutely adore Sloane and what you've done with her lux. I can't wait to play alongside your character, they're very unique and enjoyable to read! ^^
add under the sycamore tree to your sig nerd
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@Atrophy I absolutely adore Sloane and what you've done with her lux. I can't wait to play alongside your character, they're very unique and enjoyable to read! ^^
Hexmark β«» The Curse can be broken by throwing salt, fire, or holy water onto the cursed object. While casting the Spell, Sloane is left vulnerable and is not wise to use this Spell in a fight.
Object of Obsession β«» There are no weaknesses or drawbacks of note.
Counterfeit β«» There are no weaknesses or drawbacks of note.
My weakness. o_o;
Body Temperature Manipulation β«» While heated up, Linqian is more susceptible to water and other factors that would cool her down. While cooled, it's vice-versa; she is far weaker against fire and the heat. She's not entirely immune to the effects of heat/cold, and going too hard can cause injuries. This does not differentiate between friend and foe; she can accidentally burn or freeze a friend touching her. If Linqian quickly shifts from one temperature to another, she can induce thermal shock in herself and possibly die.
Heat & Cold Manipulation β«» These Spells do not differentiate between friend and foe and can be risky during team-based combat. This Spell can also cause her to overheat/overcool faster if she uses it with her Body-Temperature Manipulation.
Ice Hands β«» This Spell weakens her against fire/heat-based attacks and can cause her actual flesh to melt (not pretty).
I've updated the CS, please let me know how to looks.
WEAKNESSES β«» Accessing the Void Light opens AlizΓ©e's eyes to the Void itself... and over time, by utilizing the Void Light, she will begin to see hallucinations of the horrors of the Void. Eldritch abominations and people lost to the Void will appear alongside the mundane universe that AlizΓ©e is used to, attacking her mental state and making her doubt what is real and what is fake. The more AlizΓ©e (or the Apparition she's adjoined to) uses her abstraction, the worse this effect gets so that she will be functionally blind if she goes all out (as she'll see into the Void). This effect wears off over time, but its effects on her mentally will not. However, sapping away someone else strength and energy also begins to drain away at her - it won't be as dramatic as on the victim, but if she does this a lot, she can stop her own heart. An Abstraction like this will unnerve others and make it difficult for people to trust her.
Dominion β«» The act of casting Domination causes Eksa to remain stationary, and she can easily be injured and knocked out of the spell. If she loses the Dominion grudge match, she can lose control of her body, making this a high-risk, high-reward spell.
Amplified Sealing β«» This Spell requires prep time and leaves her vulnerable while she prepares it.
Seek Apparitions β«» This Spell is a two-way door that reveals her location to the Apparitions around her as well.
Black Pact β«» Eksa must also abide by the conditions she sets or else she will lose access to all of her Spells for a day.
Black Shroud β«» While the Black Shroud is active, it also prevents boons from Apparitions such as healing or teleportation.
World Fighting Carnival - Reception Room.
βSure,β
βWho is Oh-One?β
World Fighting Carnival - Tunnel Underneath.
ALERT!
World Fighting Carnival - Tunnel Underneath.
Interface complete, breaking firewalls and accessing internal systems.
Firewall one of twenty, broken. Time elapsed: two minutes. Twenty minutes are estimated before all firewalls and security systems are disabled. Cameras are active and have been interfaced with. All other security systems have been disabled. Will remain disabled for the duration of the Power Stone retrieval. Combatants, security, and spectators are unaware of their presence. The tournament is still ongoing...
ALERT. ALERT. ALERT. SUBJECTS ENTERING THE TUNNELS: ISABELLA LEVAI, FLORIAN WESSINGTON I, MODEL-SEVEN, JADEN RALDO, DAREN METZGER, AND ARIANNA LEGOSE.
ACTIVATING DECOY MODELS.
Calculating the odds of the plan needing adjustment... minimal.
Calculating the odds of the security system requiring reactivating... minimal.
Calculating the odds of personal involvement being required... minimal.
Calculating odds of success... extremely high.
The Beach
Wow, you're fast; I like how you correctly used Emotional-Fields and mentioned the Void. I see where you're going with this, but this character could use just a little work:
1. First, backstory! My first (and biggest) issue was that she's way too young to have been in the original Sycamore Tree Coven - the youngest member I mentioned was ten, and even that got a lot of flack. But, a seven-year-old... I live with a seven-year-old, and I don't even trust her to be by herself for more than five seconds, and I think she would be more harm than good in a fight against a borderline eldritch abomination β abstraction or not.
Also, a teenager being a private investigator? lol
2. Speaking of the backstory, it could use some expansion because of some holes. You don't explain how she got roped into the old Coven; just cuts to her fighting the Stygian Snake. You mentioned that the old coven didn't like her due to night stalking but never expanded on that. The backstory also seems to cut off and doesn't explain her returning to the Coven (or why).
3. As for her abstraction... I'm unsure how I feel about it; it seems to be all over the place. She can summon hands that can bend steel and sap strength away (which is good enough on its own, to be honest). Then she can also detect magic and paranormal beings, create weapons, and teleport anywhere she can see. If you want to keep all of these abilities, she could be like a master of none - where she can do many different things but isn't super good at it.
Could you also elaborate on the sapping strength part?
4. Maybe also expand on the Apparition because it's very vague.