Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by SouffleGirl123
Raw
Avatar of SouffleGirl123

SouffleGirl123 Guild's Sweetheart

Member Seen 10 days ago

@Peridot Did you have room for another?
Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by TheHangedMan
Raw
Avatar of TheHangedMan

TheHangedMan One Week Wizard

Member Seen 3 mos ago

@SouffleGirl123 Sign up and sit down at the table, friend. Plenty of space going on around here.

WaitnoIwaslookingatthewrongRP
2x Laugh Laugh
Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by MissCapnCrunch
Raw
Avatar of MissCapnCrunch

MissCapnCrunch Pᴏʟɪᴛᴇ & Pᴇᴄᴜʟɪᴀʀ / Pɪʀᴀᴛᴇ Pʀɪɴᴄᴇss

Member Seen 2 yrs ago

Still room!
Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by Garden Gnome
Raw
Avatar of Garden Gnome

Garden Gnome Definitely made in IKEA

Member Seen 7 mos ago

Is there a limit on the number of users? If possible, I would like to join. I will work on getting a character up if so.
Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by MissCapnCrunch
Raw
Avatar of MissCapnCrunch

MissCapnCrunch Pᴏʟɪᴛᴇ & Pᴇᴄᴜʟɪᴀʀ / Pɪʀᴀᴛᴇ Pʀɪɴᴄᴇss

Member Seen 2 yrs ago

@Garden Gnome

Not that I'm aware of.
The GM is going to start going through cS's sometime Sunday I believe.
So you have a chance to be accepted before then ^^
Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by Peridot
Raw
GM
Avatar of Peridot

Peridot Clods!

Member Seen 6 yrs ago

@SouffleGirl123@Garden Gnome

Definitely room for more applications!
Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by Peridot
Raw
GM
Avatar of Peridot

Peridot Clods!

Member Seen 6 yrs ago

Also, prior to doing the proper character applications, there's a mistake (An easily done mistake, that is) that everyone has made. Because Hogwarts' school year starts in September, a lot of characters ages, birthdays and school years don't correlate. To clarify:

If in the Fourth Year, your character will either be 14 going on 15, or by some rare chance, has their 15th birthday on the first day of term, meaning they are the oldest in the year and also 15 at the start of the roleplay. All others, who have their birthdays in December, March, or June, will not be turning 15 until those months. Therefore, your character's age should be 14 if they are in fourth year.

For the Fifth year, the same thing applies. Your character will be 15 going on 16, or by some rare chance, have their 16th birthday on the first day of term. You get the gist. If many people are wanting their character's to be 15 - as I can see from the applications - then they will be Fifth years, not Fourth. If you would like them to be in the Fourth year and have their birthday in the IC, that is also fine - but for the time being, they will not have hit that age until their birthdays.

I've made that as clear as possible, so I hope you guys understand - it can be a wee bit complicated.
1x Thank Thank
Hidden 7 yrs ago 7 yrs ago Post by Garden Gnome
Raw
Avatar of Garden Gnome

Garden Gnome Definitely made in IKEA

Member Seen 7 mos ago



Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by Peridot
Raw
GM
Avatar of Peridot

Peridot Clods!

Member Seen 6 yrs ago

Will be posting reviews tonight!
1x Like Like
Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by World Traveler
Raw
Avatar of World Traveler

World Traveler Word Walker

Member Seen 22 days ago

Been itching to get my role playing hands typing again and a Hogwarts role play would be perfect! You can expect my character sheet to be up and ready for review before the day is over!
1x Like Like
Hidden 7 yrs ago 7 yrs ago Post by World Traveler
Raw
Avatar of World Traveler

World Traveler Word Walker

Member Seen 22 days ago



Hidden 7 yrs ago 7 yrs ago Post by Hitman
Raw
Avatar of Hitman

Hitman Mori Quam Foedari

Member Seen 2 mos ago



Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by Peridot
Raw
GM
Avatar of Peridot

Peridot Clods!

Member Seen 6 yrs ago

Whoo, three more applications! I'm afraid you guys will have to wait just a touch longer for yours to be reviewed, which myself and my Co-GM will get to doing as soon as the first few are posted.

And on that note, I shall begin posting the reviews, and announce our new Co-GM!





@Valckyriie@PrinceAlexus

So, for you guys I've put the review in hiders for you to read if you want to, but in all honesty, your sheets unfortunately don't meet this roleplay's qualifications for grammar, characterisation, or length. Even if you changed everything outlined below, it wouldn't be enough for the standard we require in a casual roleplay. Valckyriie, I understand you're new to the guild so perhaps don't know how the writing levels work. But perhaps the Free section, or maybe a Low-Casual (Depends on the GM, really) roleplay would be better suited for you both at your current writing levels. While you're both more than welcome to re-apply, it'll need to be a much higher standard than what you've already produced. Of course, if you're not interested in re-applying, thank you for the interest, and best of luck in the future.









@KazAlkemi
Loving Aibhlinn! I hope you know I'll have a large number of NPCs being confused over how to pronounce and write her name correctly. XD Before she's accepted and put in the CS tab, the only things I'd like is for you to pop your character image at the top of your sheet (Like MissCapnCrunch has!), and a wee bit more description in her appearance. If you're stuck on what to write, consider things like more detail about her hair type/length, maybe some appearance changes she likes/dislikes about herself thanks to puberty, if she snorts and crinkles her nose when laughs... y'know, just stuff to make her a bit more human when we read about her, and something to make her a bit more well rounded. Tag me when you've added a bit more (I'm not looking for lots, just something to make her appearance section a bit meatier), and I'll take another look for you. Other than that, she's awesome! Love the details in the extras bit, and the outcome of her 'riddikulus' charm. XD





@MissCapnCrunch
Awesome - love what you've done with my boring character sheet! Just a few points:
- While I love the picture you've used, I understand the model is 22 years old. At a stretch she could be passable as a teenager, but not sure about 15-years-old. If you could find one of her looking a touch younger that would be great, but until then I think I'll let it slide.
- An explanation for why she was born the States but came to England will be needed.
Other than that, what an amazing character. Loved what you did with the writing sample, it was a really original idea that I hadn't even considered could be possible.





@DeadBeatWalking
I've already passed along my compliments to your sheet via PM, so you're accepted! He can go into the Character Sheet tab, and you can take your place as my first Co-GM! ALL HAIL THE DEAD BEAT.





@PastelWriter
Thanks for the application! She seems to be a pretty cool character, but there are a few points I need to bring up before she can be accepted.

  • "was allowed to attend (Hogwarts) at 10 rather than 11 due to her situation." You don't go into much detail about this. While her backstory is clear on her heritage, there's nothing saying why she'd receive special treatment at Hogwarts?
  • Her Boggart requires a humorous counterpart.
  • Ollivander doesn't use Veela hair in his wands. If she got that wand, it would have had to come from somewhere else in Europe, which seems unlikely.
  • Need more detail in appearance.
  • Need more detail in personality.
  • Her backstory has a couple of issues within it. Firstly, her Ukraine background is fine; however, considering the state of Soviet Russia around this time (Either during WW2, or the Cold War, depending on how old she was when she was rescued), I find it extremely unlikely that she'd be placed in a psychiatric ward after telling people she has powers, and also showing signs of said magic. It would be far more likely that the government would take her, for either investigation or experimentation. Alternatively, she would be lynched, abandoned, or killed for being "a witch".
  • Why would the British MoM get involved in this situation? The Ukraine Ministry of Magic, or whatever their equivlent of a mgical government is, would get involved first. And then once rescued, she'd have been put with European wizards and placed in one of the European Schools. Durmstrang may have refused her entry due to her unknown blood status, but Beuxbatons would have had her before Hogwarts was even considered.
  • She knows Russian, Polish and English, but not her native language of Ukrainian? I may be missing something about language in Soviet-Era Ukraine and how it was handled, but I would have thought she'd know her country's own language.
  • You still haven't written your writing sample. Re-read the rules.






@Ejected
I can't tell you how excited I was to see not only two characters, but they both played Quidditch! I thought for once we weren't going to have any Quidditch players, which is nearly unheard of for a HP roleplay. XD Just going to need a few things first:
- Going to need a more age appropriate faceclaim for Honey. Andreas' is passable, but Honey's looks nothing like a teenager.
- For both of them, their Boggarts don't really turn into something funny when using the Riddikulus charm. As the good Professor Lupin says; "What really finishes a Boggart is laughter! You need to force it to assume a shape you find truly amusing."
- And just for curiosity's sake, did they grow up in Bootle of Liverpool, or Bootle of Cumbria? I do hope it's the former, because a Scouse Accent mixed with Spanish has got to be something amusing to listen to.

So if you guys make those changes, we should be good to go and you'll likely be accepted! If you have questions, comments, or criticisms of my critique, please let me know. I have much to learn in being a GM, and we all learn from our mistakes.





As for you guys, @Garden Gnome, @World Traveler and @Agent 47, I'll get to working on your reviews as soon as possible, along with any other applications that are coming my way. As per the suggestion of my new Co-GM, I'll be advertising this roleplay in the advanced section as a way to garner more interest and applications - therefore, the IC won't be launched for at least another week or so, and by then it'll be nearly Christmas, so I expect there'll be a delayed start just so people aren't frantic in balancing out the holidays and writing. Plenty of time to hand in sheets. :)
1x Thank Thank
Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by Ejected
Raw
Avatar of Ejected

Ejected

Member Seen 7 mos ago

@Peridot Thank you. I'll go ahead and change her face claim and what their Boggarts turn into. And I'll go ahead and throw in the clarification for where they grew up. It's Bootle of Liverpool, and I didn't realize that there was a Bootle of Cumbria so my apologies.
Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by Peridot
Raw
GM
Avatar of Peridot

Peridot Clods!

Member Seen 6 yrs ago

@HushedWhispers
@Typhon
@NameUserOf
@sassy1085
@BlueSky44
@Furiosa
@EldarionI
@PhunkyPhoebe
@SouffleGirl123
@TheHangedMan

Just wanted to check in with you guys, make sure you were still interested. :)
Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by Peridot
Raw
GM
Avatar of Peridot

Peridot Clods!

Member Seen 6 yrs ago

@Peridot Thank you. I'll go ahead and change her face claim and what their Boggarts turn into. And I'll go ahead and throw in the clarification for where they grew up. It's Bootle of Liverpool, and I didn't realize that there was a Bootle of Cumbria so my apologies.


No worries, I didn't know there was a Bootle of Cumbria until I googled it, haha. XD
Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by BlueSky44
Raw
Avatar of BlueSky44

BlueSky44 Tech Monkey

Member Seen 23 hrs ago

@Peridot

Sorry, been busy with exams for school and with work. Should have character ready in the next day or two.
1x Thank Thank
Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by Italicized
Raw
Avatar of Italicized

Italicized

Member Seen 6 yrs ago

Are you still accepting applications, especially from new members? If not then I don't mind but asking just in case~
Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by Peridot
Raw
GM
Avatar of Peridot

Peridot Clods!

Member Seen 6 yrs ago

@Italicized

Yes, we're still open! Glad to have more applicants.
Hidden 7 yrs ago Post by MissCapnCrunch
Raw
Avatar of MissCapnCrunch

MissCapnCrunch Pᴏʟɪᴛᴇ & Pᴇᴄᴜʟɪᴀʀ / Pɪʀᴀᴛᴇ Pʀɪɴᴄᴇss

Member Seen 2 yrs ago

@MissCapnCrunch
Awesome - love what you've done with my boring character sheet! Just a few points:
- While I love the picture you've used, I understand the model is 22 years old. At a stretch she could be passable as a teenager, but not sure about 15-years-old. If you could find one of her looking a touch younger that would be great, but until then I think I'll let it slide.
- An explanation for why she was born the States but came to England will be needed.
Other than that, what an amazing character. Loved what you did with the writing sample, it was a really original idea that I hadn't even considered could be possible.


Right on! I was thinking about this too- figured since it's set in the 50's and women seemed to be a bit older looking back then (I don't know why it seems like that to me, maybe because of the clothing and hairstyles) that it could fly- but i'll look around to see if the model has anything of the younger persuasion- if not, like you said ^^; we'll just let it dangle.

I'll figure out why they ended up in England :) and add it to her history. Thank you!

1x Thank Thank
↑ Top
© 2007-2024
BBCode Cheatsheet