Quetzacoatl, a re-application to replace medusa since I feel I wouldn't do medusa's personality justice

plus I want to wrestle, and help scathach with the mooncell education system, and tombstone giant monsters.

Decided to throw in an app. Theseus is such a bully.

Apologies for the longer than usual delay.

Let me see what I have to address, before having the IC up and running.

@Parallel Hearts@floodtalon@Moonlit Sonata@DocRock@Crusader Lord@Reflection@1Charak2@SubjectVision@Pyromania99@Cu Chulainn@Breo@Rune_Alchemist@Duoya
discord.gg/qAmQSf

Thanks. I'll take a look at this later, when I have some proper time.

@Cu Chulainn@Pyromania99@1Charak2
If you wish to change characters for some reason, you are welcome to do so. Just be sure to make a choice you feel comfortable with, since that's the most important thing.

@Froppy
D'Artagnan seems alright, you can move him to the Character's tab if you want.

So just a quick question.

Due to issues with Neil(mostly worrying I couldn't do him justice), decided to look at Henry Ford as I think I noted before, unsure. But anyway, did some digging and found someone had done him before in the make a servant thread. Not planning to take the entire sheet of course, no no, but I was wondering if it'd be fine to use some elements from it? For inspiration, since I'm doing Rider, rather than Caster.

If there's an issue with that, I'll work completely on my own of course.

http://forums.nrvnqsr.com/showthread.php/6950-Create-A-Servant-2?s=4e46536aa078646bb099ed9826938475&p=2463309&viewfull=1#post2463309

Well, I have nothing against taking inspiration from someone else's version of an OC Servant. Creativity isn't a limitless resource, after all, especially when it comes to this issue. You are free to do as you wish.

@Breo
He's alright now. You can post him in the CS tab as well.

@GreenGoat
Hanzo is ok as well. You can do as the others.

@Player 2
I'll take a better look at this Asterios later since it's a modified version of his already existing canon self, so I have to analyze him with a bit of caution.

@1Charak2
If Quetz is your final choice, she's ok. Just bear in mind what I said above since changing characters after they are already in the IC will likely not be possible.

@SSW
This choice is rather unexpected to say the truth, but I don't see anything out of the ordinary with it. And, given that Atalanta is a precedent of beastly looking Servant, you can go forward with it. You can move her to the CS tab like the others.

And the IC is up. Anyway that has an approved character is ok to begin posting.

I'll assign the places in the character's list sometime during this week, to see how far we are from maximum capacity.

@Parallel Hearts

Ay, Quetz is my final choice, Just wanted to play a better team player in all regards

On second thought, things have come up and I don't think I'll be able to participate. Good luck, everyone!

EDIT:
Maybe I'll stick around after all~

@Parallel Hearts
Thanks for the feedback, and never worry about delays, I just wrapped up a big assignment for college, so I'm gonna work on Ford now probably. May just switch back to Caster, unless I do what I saw someone else do with Neil Armstrong, via giving him a skill that makes his Riding EX rank when flying, but with Ford would be EX when inside an automobile or any wheeled transport that came after him.

I dunno, I'm still trying to figure out good Noble Phantasms.

Used a Neil and Henry Ford pair of sheets I saw as for inspiration for ranks of certain skills, while also taking my own take on the NPs used by the Ford sheet. Additionally, used one of my assigned books for a Material Culture class to help with the final Phantasm. I hope this is acceptable. Couldn't get the picture I needed, due to PC Discord being bugged on my end, but one of the others can show it if needed.

I'll confess freely, made him Rider to have him stand out more from Edison his mentor, and also to nod to his impact on history(given how massive the industry is now). I can easily make changes as needed though.

This wouldn't happen to still be open would it? I've got some character ideas that would be great for this.

@Parallel Hearts

This is a note that I'll be switching from Assassin Fierro to a Ruler George Orwell.

This wouldn't happen to still be open would it? I've got some character ideas that would be great for this.

Yes, we are. You'll be the last new player slot I'll be taking for now.

@DocRock

I don't think that there's anything wrong with Ford. You can post him on the CS tab.

@Parallel Hearts

This is a note that I'll be switching from Assassin Fierro to a Ruler George Orwell.

Very well then. Just like I said to the others, be sure that you are picking something you really want to, before making your final decision.

@Player 2

I'm sorry but I'll have to ask you to rewrite that Asterios' CS from the beginning. While I understand that Servants that are featured exclusively on Fate/Grand Order can feel rather incomplete sometimes (lacking some base consistency and trait that Servants from other works in the Franchise would normally have, not to say anything of over-inflated skill ranks just for mechanical gameplay purposes), this CS lacks some basic understanding of how Asterios has been portrayed as a character through the whole of his appearances in the story/events.

I'm just asking that, if you are making him in the same class and all that, you keep him a little closer to his canon portrayal.

@Parallel Hearts

Phew, glad Ford's fine, I'll move him over now, and get started on an in character post.

Class: Shielder (can also be Berserker or Saber)

True Name: Sir Sagramore, "Knight of the Round Table", "King of Britain", "Lord of the Second Round Table", "Sagramore Constantine"

Origin: Arthurian Legends and associated Arthurian materials

Height/Weight: 165cm (height)/51kg (weight)

Appearance: [Hider Below has the image]



Alignment: Neutral Good

Personality: A brave knight with a thing for "cute damsels" and beautiful women, not afraid to flirt or do her best around them to try to impress, though who is truly good at heart when to comes down to it. She has a quick temper, which due to her Riastrad is normally paired with a very healthy appetite and love of food. She also has a soft spot for her friend in arms, a great friend even, Sir Tristan. Despite the sad knight's melancholy moods, she is of the sort who would try to snap him out of it or at least be there for the man and try to raise his spirits. It was because she understood the hearts of others well enough that she kept tabs on him even after he left the round table, that she took his words about the king to heart, that she was among those who most mourned his death after announcing it to the Round Table. That weight that Tristan couldn't handle, however, Sagramore bore in his place at the king's side till the very end.

She never hated her cousin, King Arthur, and even loved her and served her despite the secret of her sex. She even cared about Mordred, who to her mind was like a brother, despite being stuck nearly dead by him as they came to blows. The ability to understand the hearts of men was never said to be an easy one, she knew more than the former king ever did, but as the old round table scattered and she rose as the heir to King Arthur her great resolve became clear. Sagramore continued to prove herself no less than valiant and brave as she held the nation together with her own two hands, and assembled the Second Round Table to help her improve where the first had failed. She gathered her people together as the focus of their praise and hopes, continued to hold back the Saxons, and paved a glorious legend into the annals of human history. Though she has her own regrets, from having to fight Mordred and Gawain in the past to not being able to save her best friend, as a heroic spirit she doesn't desire to try to change the past. What matters to her is moving forward, bearing the weight of the past that one must bear, and forging ahead into the future.

— Parameters —

STR: A | END: A | AGI: B | MAG: C| LCK: C+ | NP: A+

— Class Skills —

Magic Resistance: C

-grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether.

Cancel spells with a chant below two verses. Cannot defend against magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.

Riding: B

-Most vehicles and animals can be handled with above average skill, even vehicles that did not exist in the time period one was alive in, for they are no exception. However, cannot ride the likes of Phantasmal Species such as Monstrous Beasts.

Sagramore could ride horses well, but he also had great misfortunes at jousting as well. What a bother.

— Personal Skills —

Protection of the Faeries: A+

-is a blessing from Elementals; the capacity to increase one's Luck in dangerous situations. Activation is limited to battlefields, where it is possible to perform feats of arms.

Sagramore was married to a fay, whose hand she won after beating Gawain in a duel for her hand. In battle it can be activated to apply a "+" modifier to her Luck parameter (this is where the plus on the parameter listed above actually applies). Unlike the blessing upon Lancelot, which is of a lower rank but more versatile, this one cannot be applied to other stats.

King of Men: A

-The status not of the "ideal king" who remains distant from all others, as King Arthur was, but of the "imperfect king that is ideal for mankind" that is able to understand the hearts of the people and gathers their hopes into themselves. A form of kingship possessed by Sagramore, surpassing her predecessor in this regard. A composite skill of Charisma and Instinct, that also allows the user to draw added power from the presence of allies around them. The more allies, the more power the user is able to receive as a result. (This does not drain others, merely uses their presence as a means to draw in more power for the user.)

Morte Jenue: B

-A phrase meaning "dead youth". A skill combining the instances of Sagramore's perceived weaknesses, both as someone who in life suffered "epileptic fits" as well as was terrible at jousting. Though in life he went on many adventures and even defeated Gawain in combat, on top of forming the second round table and preserving the glory of Arthurian Britain for a time longer, which makes his very nature "deceptively strong".

This skill causes Sagramore to be perceived by others as "weak", "frail", "easy prey", or even "not worth trying to fight", and all of his parameters appear one-rank lower than they actually are. It is similar to the Espionage skill, but in this case originates from aspects and feats from the user in life that rather than any kind of spying skills. It is a skill the causes other to underestimate the user, concealing their true strength.

— Armaments —

Round Table (sword/shield)

— Noble Phantasms —

(Again, follow the recommendations above for Original Servants. Keep in mind that Non-Riders are generally limited to one or two Noble Phantasms, while Riders generally have between three to five Noble Phantasms. Any number exceeding this will require good explanation)

Name: The Round Table

Title: “Glorious Home Of Knights, Raging Tide Against My Enemies”

Rank: A+

NP Type: Anti-Army (sword)/Barrier (shield)

Range: 1-75 (sword)/1-2 (shield)

Maximum Number of Targets: 700

Description: The Second Round Table, assembled from the original Round Table by Sagramore Constantine, both as an object and an organization to fight off the Saxons and retain the glory of Arthur’s Britain. It is weapon of King Arthur’s successor, who was a blood relative of Arthur to boot, which like the original Round Table can “act as a shield to protect Britain” as well as “become a sword to slay Britain’s enemies”.

For Sagramore, since the table is no longer empowered by the power of Excalibur, it is powered by her own warp spasm power. When infused with her warp spasm power, this Noble Phantasm takes on the empowered form of a gleaming red sword, which imitates the power of Excalibur and can fire off an accelerated light beam similar to (but not as strong as) the original Excalibur. Its beam, however, is a red light fueled by rage that strikes down all who try to stand before it. Though it pales to Excalibur, it is not a Noble Phantasm to underestimate. If used as a Broken Phantasm, it can ever so briefly match the power of “that holy sword” at the cost of its own destruction.

When Sagramore is utilizing the “Riastrad” Noble Phantasm, the warp spasm power within the table is instead transferred to her body instead. Due to this, during such a time this Noble Phantasm reverts into the form of a very large shield wielded by the user. In this form, however, the bulk of the shield can be both defensive as well as....used for battering enemies and ramming into them with immense force. Further, activating the shield in this form...whilst costly, allows Sagramore to deploy an A-rank variant of “Lord Camelot”. Yet along with being defensively strong, by first deploying this variant and charging at the enemy this shield becomes an even better ramming weapon.

However, when the Riastrad is turned “off” by Sagramore this shield reverts into a sword form once more.

Even if the round table is lost from her hands, Sagramore can always re-materialize it back into her hands without fail.

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Name: Riastrad

Title: “A Knight’s Warped Frenzy of Monstrous Rage, Inversion of One’s Humanity”

Rank: A

NP Type: Anti-Unit (Self)

Range: 0

Maximum Number of Targets: 1

Description: The knight known as Sagramore is a unique case among heroic spirit, sharing the same trait with the Irish hero Cu Chulainn: the warp spasm, aka the “riastrad”. A battle frenzy that transforms one into an incredibly powerful “monster”, inverting the human body and its parts into an abomination of twisted organs and mighty limbs, hair all sticking out like sharp spears of great sharpness, and incredible physical might. As much as this appears to be the form of a “monster” to the eyes of others, though, the user remains fundamentally human and doesn’t gain the status of a “monster”. This being said, their raw power and frenzy in this state is nothing short of “monstrous” on the battlefield and is capable of leveling armies, going beyond the scale of normal servant stats during this time.

In this state the user does remain in control of themselves, similar to the effects of the skill “berserk” putting the user in a similarly controllable rage. Utilizing this Noble Phantasm for Sagramore, at least, is like flipping a switch, turning it “on and off” at will.

However, its use leaves the servant physically drained and ravenously hungry, rather drained in the aftermath overall. This means its use in longer battles is, on top of the prana consumption that causes Sagramore’s post-use state, risky for Sagramore and their master...but can have immense rewards if used properly.

@Parallel Hearts Above this, i present my servant submission. :D

sorry i forgot to tag you

OwO

Alrighty, I think I have a completed servant.

@Player 2

I'm sorry but I'll have to ask you to rewrite that Asterios' CS from the beginning. While I understand that Servants that are featured exclusively on Fate/Grand Order can feel rather incomplete sometimes (lacking some base consistency and trait that Servants from other works in the Franchise would normally have, not to say anything of over-inflated skill ranks just for mechanical gameplay purposes), this CS lacks some basic understanding of how Asterios has been portrayed as a character through the whole of his appearances in the story/events.

I'm just asking that, if you are making him in the same class and all that, you keep him a little closer to his canon portrayal.

Asterios explicitly ate people and was a near-feral creature for all of his life right up until before Theseus clobbered him, and Lostbelt 1 even makes reference to how the Asterios summoned is, in essence, a softer version of the Minotaur, while Minotauros is explicitly not that and is in fact driven by a childish and sadistic hunger. This is in line with the Minotauros seen in LB1, which is a canon portrayal and not even a Lostbelt exclusive one at that. It is a simple matter of which name he is summoned under, and what the conditions are which otherwise allow for one name to be summoned over the other. Within the Moon Cell, it is safe to assume that the Minotauros is as legitimate a Saint Graph as Asterios.

@Crusader Lord

While most of your character's idea is alright, there are a few important details that need to be addressed.

- While it's not very important (since Arthur had a ton of knights serving "him" on Camelot, anyway), the Original Round Table only had 13 members: King Arthur, Percival, Kay, Gaheris, Palamedes, Tristan, Gawain, Lancelot, Bedivere, Mordred, Galahad, Agravain, Gareth. So, she probably isn't right in considering herself one of them. You can do it, just know that's likely something that would be considered highly dishonored by most knights who know the truth.

Now, for the important bits:

- King of Men is an exaggerated skill if it allows for both instinct and Charisma at the equivalent of a Rank A. If both are at B Rank or lower, then it's acceptable.

- A Shielder shouldn't have a Saber level offensive NP like that Sword. It kinda defeats the point of the class system if you have both. You can either make her a Saber and keep the word, or a Shielder and keep the shield, but the other part that isn't being used will have to be sealed.

@Pyromania99
Shuten-sized Empress is alright. I hope you don't worry if I imagine her dialogue in Aoi Yuki's voice.

@Player 2
I see. I knew he ate people before because well... there wasn't anything else he could feed on. Anyway, I don't follow Japan's FGO so that's rather new for me, but I suppose it's ok.

The only thing I'll ask for is to change that last NP. The idea behind it isn't bad but being able to ignore both the disadvantages of being a Beast and of being Divine is a bit disappointing from a storytelling PoV. It's not exactly that strong (since there are few things that really target these weak spots) but it's underwhelming narratively speaking. He keeping both advantages is ok, but (just like the Gorgon) he should keep both weak spots as well.