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@Gardevoiran

I think your character is alright by me as well.

@1Charak2

The same goes for you. After you are done with the things @TheWindel asked.
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@1Charak2

Fine by me. Wait for what @KoL says.
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You know the drill.
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[...] but what would it be next?


Something like this...
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• Name: Illya Reinhardt


Hmm... hmm... hmm...





Putting that aside, since there may be more than one person with the same name in the world (sometimes):

- And where does she put her emblem when she's not transformed? Unless she does walk around the city wearing a cape at all times.

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Volatile Wires: Her Divine Arm is her soul as a magical girl; shielding her from those who refuse to face her head on. Although it serves as the source of her power; the further it is damaged the more her electrical attacks are supercharged. Gaining strength the more critical her viability stands.


Not only does this not make any sense. It also contradicts this:

• Divine Arm: Armads: The duel-bladed axe swung with enough force to cleave dragons in two.


You can have one, not both, since they contradict one another.

- Lastly, fix that backstory. We don't ask for more than a single decent paragraph or two, but this is nowhere near it.
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Does she constantly repair her Emblem?
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Dropping this sheet here. Please direct me to your concerns!
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@I Need A Name

Make your edits we've discussed and you're fine by me. Wait for @KoL's judgement.

@Gardevoiran

I see no glaring issues with her. Fine by me; wait for @KoL's judgement.
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@TheWindel@KoL Yeah, to go with trading he life for strength, she has a way to undo her damage with the help of the mascots. Added the below to the above character sheet.

Well Oiled Machine: As dangerous and painful it is for her to cut her life to gain more power; together with the power of a mascot, she has shown successful in mending her Emblem back together along with a day of rest. Sealing away the volatile power stored inside and restoring her viability back to a clean state.


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Also, sorry for the troubles of getting back to this; but Kiru will be making a return. :3
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@I Need A Name

Once you've done the edits, you're ok with me as well.

@Gardevoiran

You're ok with me as well, I suppose.
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Working on a character~
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Given our player cast, at this point in the RP you're free to go into the Discord to speed up processes if need be.
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@Pacifista

Considering how versatile Lumen Invocation is, you should limit her to only 3 abilities, not 4. I would suggest getting rid of one of the last two. It's also stated in Lumen Invocation's description that the kind of light she uses is indicated by color and intensity. Is this alluding to the type of light she's using specifically in Lumen Invocation, or does it extend to her other abilities?

For her backstory, just to clarify, she's graduating from high school, yes?
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She’s fine by me. Wait for @KoL’s opinion.
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You know the drill.
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Kohane is nearing high school graduation, yes. The light emanated from charging her attacks is limited to Lumen Invocation and Boundary Reflection (which I've added, since it would make sense for it to glow when the mirror has absorbed something). I've also removed Vision Catcher.
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