[OOC] Naruto: True Peace. [ALWAYS ACCEPTING] [Cool guys club inside]

[Savato]

Okay so I posted Neferpitou my stupid char in the bin. Gonna review you all and be extra mean.

[j8cob]

I need to finish my shit but I keep looking at everyone else's characters instead of mine...

@Blue Demon
Noriko is still good, but I don't like the "medical mode" technique that Umary has. For one it's a game technique and for two it's vague. I'm not gonna say to remove it but I'd like it if you personally defined it better to detail her rate of regeneration and her approximate increase in physical output. Likewise I don't like Chieko's "lighting instantaneous" because it is very similar to Body Flicker. I see you already put a limit on it regarding use in combat, but even still it's basically a get-out-of-jail-free card. Unless Partisan or Savato say it's cool, I'd like that to be removed.

Otherwise they seem good. I like their personalities and how they tie in together. Once those changes are made you'll have my approval of all three, though I already approve Noriko.

[Blue Demon]

I need to finish my shit but I keep looking at everyone else's characters instead of mine...

@Blue Demon
Noriko is still good, but I don't like the "medical mode" technique that Umary has. For one it's a game technique and for two it's vague. I'm not gonna say to remove it but I'd like it if you personally defined it better to detail her rate of regeneration and her approximate increase in physical output. Likewise I don't like Chieko's "lighting instantaneous" because it is very similar to Body Flicker. I see you already put a limit on it regarding use in combat, but even still it's basically a get-out-of-jail-free card. Unless Partisan or Savato say it's cool, I'd like that to be removed.

Otherwise they seem good. I like their personalities and how they tie in together. Once those changes are made you'll have my approval of all three, though I already approve Noriko.

@j8cob

I'll work on editing that later. I need to go do chores... and I keep putting them off. >_>

[Raijinslayer]

Nice to see the OOC moving along nicely. Will get my characters up eventually, but since the break is getting close to ending for me, I'm trying to get as much game time as I can, as I've taken to binging on Destiny again.

[Partisan]

@Blue Demon I'm gonna look myself as well so I might have more pointers.

[Partisan]

Any comments I have will be in red to give a clearer overview.

Honma Noriko

“Power has only one duty - to secure the social welfare of the People.”
All hail Kim Jong Un!!

Noriko is the tallest sister standing at five foot seven. She has long red hair and green eyes. She's rather fond of eye makeup and usually adds something to make herself look more intimidating. Like the rest of the women in her family, she is built like a rectangle. She's flat with no assets to speak of. On the trade off she is very densely muscled.

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Personnel files.
Access only by security personnel with a C3 clearance.

【Full Name】
Honma Noriko

【Alias】
Nori

【Affiliation】
Confederation

【Age】
20

【Sex】
Female

【Sexuality】
Straight
As straight as wet spaghetti.

【Birthplace】
Kohona
Is this a new village?

【Rank】
Chūnin

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Psych. report.
Medical secrecy applies.

【Personality】
Noriko is the serious sister. She loves life and enjoys being a Ninja. However she isn't as competitive as her youngest sister. Nor does she feel obligated to be a Ninja. It merely was the logical decision in her mind. After all her parents were both ninjas and it felt natural to her. Overall Noriko is calculating. She comes across as cold to most people, but that's just because she doesn't care about them. The only people she cares about are her parents and her sisters. I like this.

Sometimes Noriko has problems determining right from wrong. Excessive from light handed. She also enjoys having power over other people. Though she does know that's not quite right. She also know if she's not careful she'll go down a dark path. When things don't go her way, she gets even later. She likes being late? I like this bit as well.

【History】
Norkio was the first born of her parents. Due to her parents both being Ninja, they were hardly around. Because of this it often feel to Noriko being the parent for her younger sisters. This propelled her to mature faster. Still, her nurturing nature made it's appearance and she never resented mothering her sisters.

With taking care of her siblings practically a full time job Noriko didn't have much use for friends. Instead she dedicated her free time to learning ninjutsu and taijutsu. When she was of age she joined the ninja academy in Kohona. She pushed herself a lot harder than her teammates and it caused a large amount of tension. For Noriko wanted to be a chūnin as fast as she could, but her teammates didn't.

Eventually she ditched her teammates to join another team, Daiki and Ichiro, going to the Chūnin Exams. Out of the three man team only Noriko and Daiki became chūnin. This severed all good will between Daiki and Ichiro. However during the exam Noriko and Daiki became friends which quickly progressed to lovers. Still it wasn't meant to last. Daiki resented how much time Noriko spent with her younger siblings and left her.
What an asshole.
Heartbroken, Noriko swore off men and became lesbian and instead redoubled her efforts on her shinobi skills. One day soon she hopes to become a Jounin and lead her own team. Probable.

【Family ties】
Noriko grew up in a ninja family. Her parents were often absent leaving her the responsibility to raise her siblings. This created a close bond between her and her siblings. All the women in her family, except Umary, are very competitive and hate to loose. Umary and their father are extremely laid back and often get walked over by the stronger personalities.

Honma Chou | Mother | 39, Kohona, Shinobi- Jounin
Honma Daichi | Father | 41, Kohona, Shinobi-Medical Nin
Honma Umary | Sister | 18, Kohona, Shinobi- Chūnin
Honma Cheiko | Sister | 16, Kohona, Shinobi- Chūnin
I see you adhered to the Japanese naming standard surname-firstname, making me look bad. BANNED.

【Dreams and fears】
Noriko dreams of becoming a Jounin and possibly even someone of vast influence. She fears being alone, having her family die or abandon her. Someday she hopes that Daiki will come back to her and they'll marry and have children of their own.

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Combat reports.
Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.

【Fighting style】
Noriko fights in a wide array of martial arts. She utilizes whatever will take down her opponent quickly. Whether it is close combat or sniping them from a distance. Because of this she likes to fight smart, not hard.

【Ninja techniques】

A rank techniques:
None
You sure? I like underdogs, but maybe add 1 just to be sure.

B rank techniques:
Katon: Gōryūka no Jutsu
Katon: Gōka Mekkyaku
Both good. I love fire jutsu's.

C rank techniques:
Katon: Ryūka no Jutsu
Katon: Gōkakyū no Jutsu
Katon: Hōsenka no Jutsu
All good.

D-E rank techniques:
Katon: Karyūdan
Like above.

【Weaponry, tools and objects.】
Weapon, tool or object name:
Wakizashi
Weapon type:
Short Sword
Description:
An average short sword with a ridged spine.

I'm not sure what a ridged spine is but I assume it's with the little inlets? Anyway..

Accepted.

Honma Umary

“Is solace anywhere more comforting than that in the arms of a sister?”
I mean, have you ever had a real life sibling? If you're ever in their arms either you are being held in a chokehold, or you're dying.

Umary is the middle child in both height and age. Umary stands at five foot five. She has long light red hair that she usually wears half up. The barrettes she wears were given to her by her siblings, one each. Unlike her siblings Umary is very curvy. She's also a little more on the chubby side. Her eyes are more blue than green. Like her older sister she has no identifying marks.

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Personnel files.
Access only by security personnel with a C3 clearance.

【Full Name】
Honma Umary

【Alias】
Doc

【Affiliation】
Undecided

【Age】
18
She's legallllll.....

【Sex】
Female

【Sexuality】
Straight

【Birthplace】
Kohona
Seriously, what is this new village? Is it canon?

【Rank】
Chūnin

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Psych. report.
Medical secrecy applies.

【Personality】
Umary is the cheerful middle child. She loves life and wants to enjoy it to the fullest. As the middle child Umary is often the last to be noticed. Sandwiched between two strong personalities she is often forgotten. But Umary often likes it best that way. She is often away from home spending time with friends.
Sounds cool.

Because of this she was the most reluctant to become a Ninja. She would have rather not, but felt pressured it join. In the end she decided she could do good for shinobi. She is happy that the world is at peace. But the cracks in the peace worry her. Mostly her worries center around her sisters who are pulling opposite directions.
Smart girl.

【History】
Umary was the middle child. Her earliest memories were of being taken care of by Noriko. It's strange, but her elder sister was always more of a mother to her. When her mother, Chou, actually began to be home for longer periods of time, it was an adjustment for all of them. At first Umary resented it. Her mother was a strong woman and often dismissed Umary out of hand because of her docile nature. Mothers can be cruel. Dads, dads is where the good stuff's at. Not really.

Adding to her mother's return was the pressure to live up to their family's legacy. Eventually the desire to be loved and accepted drove Umary to becoming a Genin. It was at this point that her mother actually acknowledged her as a member of the family.

Umary's time as a Genin wasn't the best time of her life. She spent a lot of time over at her teammate's homes and away from hers. In a way she was closer to others than her own family. It was during this time that she was happy to discover her abilities were like her father's. When she made the switch over to focusing on medical techniques life picked up. It was also in this same time period that her father returned from his missions and began to teach her his skills.

Life of Umary was picking up. She had good friends. The love of her father. Noriko who loved her and Cheiko who was like a little puppy. With the help of her family she was able to pass the Chunin Exams. Ironically she was on the same team as her youngest sister Cheiko. As of the moment Umary is very happy being a chunin and has no further designs on upward movement.

【Family ties】
Umary's parents were never at home during her younger years. Instead she was raised by her elder sister Noriko. When her mother came back home she ended up spending most of her time away from them and with her friend's family where she found nurturing environments. Because of this her bond to her family isn't as strong as her sisters. Though she loves her father very much.

Honma Chou | Mother | 39, Kohona, Shinobi- Jounin
Honma Daichi | Father | 41, Kohona, Shinobi-Medical Nin
Honma Noriko | Sister | 20, Kohona, Shinobi- Chūnin
Honma Cheiko | Sister | 16, Kohona, Shinobi- Chūnin

【Dreams and fears】
Umary's dreams are simple. She wants to retire in a small village and live out her years in peace. Maybe she might even marry a man who is a little simple and have peaceful children. Umary fears war. She gonna have a bad time. War in her family or war in the world. Both are equally bad in her book. She also fears death. Unfortunately for Umary she knows peace never lasts and her dreams will never come true and she will undoubtedly die in battle. Well that's dark.

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Combat reports.
Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.

【Fighting style】
Umary is a defensive fighter. All her main skills are focused on healing. Heard this one last time around. Character didn't last long.

【Ninja techniques】

A rank techniques:
Shōsen Jutsu
Cool, not really A rank in my book but I guess.

B rank techniques:
Chakura no Mesu
Dokugiri
Sweet.

C rank techniques:
Rinshin There's an error in this URL, you need to remove the K at the end of ''needles''. That aside it's fine.
Shikomishindan

D-E rank techniques:
None

【Weaponry, tools and objects.】
Weapon name:
Naginata
Weapon type:
Bladed Stick
Description:
A pole arm with a blade on top.
Not just ANY naginata, it's a medical naginata. You know, for precision incisions.

Tool Name:
Double Edge Needles
Description:
Double edged metal needles. Mostly used in medical ninjustsu. Can be used as an offense if pressed.
Senbon are powerful tools. Just ask Ayame.

ACCEPTED.

@Blue Demon

[Blue Demon]

Kohona
Seriously, what is this new village? Is it canon?

@Partisan

So uppity. I'll spell it right and add -gakure at the end. :P

[Partisan]

@Blue Demon gheghehe.

[Savato]

Too lazy to quote CS' like I do with Vuur. Gonna go normal for now.

@OneWayOut Okay going with your char first.

-History and Personality are great, nothing wrong there.

-KG seems balanced enough. I actually like it. Gives good synergy with the general kitty cat.

-For your A rank, just a precision. If there are toxins, I assume they just make the suffocating more unbearable, no super nasty surprise side effect you forgot to mention?

Yeah it's great otherwise. Approved.

@Blue Demon Okay your turn. C:

-Firey older sister is all good.

-For medic middle sis. To be honest I'd judge Mystical palm as something that can be gauged. A rank being perfect mastery, you can heal even a bite from a Walking Dead zombie. Yeah top tier. I suppose that's about right?
Poison mist is pretty nasty. Instant kill gasses are a no go. I heavily recommend having a different effect or simply nerfing it.
And yeah Game only moves should be custom. We're not fan of those.

-For tryhard younger sister. Okay the Body flicker thing won't do for all three of us you get the point.
Dendou Bakuhatsu no Jutsu (Electric Detonation Technique) - There's something called Lightning release clone that does that. It's A rank/ I assume the electrocution is much weaker?
Rest seems fine.

I don't know if I'm being a hardass, I'm mostly pointing out details because I'm a tryhard scrub. They're all good though so approved if you quickly address the dumb things I say. C:

[Blue Demon]

Okay, edited Noriko to Partisan's specifications. +1 A rank jutsu (maybe? Might be OP... you call it. My brain hurts.)

-For medic middle sis. To be honest I'd judge Mystical palm as something that can be gauged. A rank being perfect mastery, you can heal even a bite from a Walking Dead zombie. Yeah top tier. I suppose that's about right?
Poison mist is pretty nasty. Instant kill gasses are a no go. I heavily recommend having a different effect or simply nerfing it.
And yeah Game only moves should be custom. We're not fan of those.

@Savato

Nerfed them. Now she's down to three techniques. Guess she's gonna need a little more work. *Sighs*

-For tryhard younger sister. Okay the Body flicker thing won't do for all three of us you get the point.
Dendou Bakuhatsu no Jutsu (Electric Detonation Technique) - There's something called Lightning release clone that does that. It's A rank/ I assume the electrocution is much weaker?

@Savato

Also nerfed flicker and changed the custom to the official version. And bumped it up to A rank. Unless you think I should tone it down.

[Partisan]

Maybe Savato is a hardass but he raises some good points I should've raised. My bad. :(

[Savato]

@Blue Demon Medics are always a pain to build.

The Lightning Clone is fine as it is in A rank.

[Partisan]

Medics are a pain to build and a pain to play (the right way) so I commend your efforts regardless of the outcome.

[GrafRoy Zeppeli]

me character

“Who might that handsome guy in the mirror be? Ah, it's just me.”

Meet Amatsurahashi Mikoto. A young man standing at 1.79 meters who probably spends more time looking at himself in the mirror than actually fighting.

His long red hair made into a ponytail is probably the one with the best care in the whole army, even among the women.

His fair skin has so many layers of creams and other chemicals that some men think he'll explode if there's some fire near him.

His blue eyes have never been seen in another state than their almost always perfect one in which Mikoto keeps them. There are some rumors going around that say his eyes can't actually be that pretty alone, saying that they MUST be using contact lenses.

He is so picky with his food and training menu to keep his slim, yet strong build, that many come to take his advice on how to take better care of their own physique.

Amatsurahashi Mikoto, the man who spends a lot of time trimming himself and is actually not gay. That is the man standing before you.

Personnel files.
Access only by security personnel with a C3 clearance.

【Full Name】
Amatsurahashi Mikoto

【Alias】
That one not-gay guy that seems gay AKA Metrosexual.

【Affiliation】
Red Sages.

【Age】
20

【Sex】
Male

【Sexuality】
Heterosexual. Might be willing to change in the future.

【Birthplace】
Kirigakure. The Village Hidden In The Mist.

【Rank】
Chūnin

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Psych. report.
Medical secrecy applies.

【Personality】
Have you ever met that one person that just seems to sing everything when he talks? That's the kind of person Mikoto is. A lot of people think he is annoying, but he just shows no signs of changing.

Ever since he was a child he's had one rule with which he lives by. To never change himself even if others want to change him. Always remain true to the desires of his heart. He is that kind of whimsical guy.

He loves art, music and just about anything that expresses the true desires of the heart. He spends a great deal of time in unnecessary and excessive grooming. He also seems to vastly prefer the company of men rather than the company of woman. These are just some of the reason as to why a lot of people think Mikoto is actually homosexual.

Mikoto is only really picky when it comes to women, not to mention that he isn't popular with woman either because of how effeminate he seems at times. Several of his close friends actually know this, and still like to tease him about that.

Having sparked several misunderstandings, Mikoto has made an habit of introducing himself with his sexuality in his introduction line.

Despite his love for his beauty, Mikoto is neither an stranger to fight nor is he scared of them. He is not a ninja just for show. Mikoto's will to fight is just as much, if not even more, than other ninjas. He will never run away, nor will he ever admit he is outpowered. That's why he believes it is wrong for shinobi's to only be after money and not to follow their heart's desires.

He does, however, protect his face a lot more than any other shinobi does.

His reason to be one of the Red Sages is simple; "Doesn't freedom sound like a beautiful concept to you? I'd very much like to see what true freedom is like."

【History】
What can you expect from Mikoto's story?

Yes, he was bullied as a kid. Yes, he was beaten up a lot as a kid. No, he was not mentally scarred or traumatised by this.

Mikoto actually fought back. He's never been afraid of getting his hands dirty. Though he's always been a dilligent student, more than once has he been scolded by his teachers because of how many fights he got himself into. During elementary school, he had to fight his way through bullies and smart-asses who thought he was nothing more than a sissy.

It wasn't until he started going to junior high school that he discovered a better way to deal with bullies instead of fighting them. Completely ignoring them. Why, there's nothing more infuriating than the sissy you are trying to piss off completely ignores your very existance. It ended up either with the guys giving up and moving on to their next victim or them trying to beat up Mikoto, which ended up badly for them. Again.

By the time he entered high school, Mikoto had created a reputation for himself. Never again did he have to deal with idiots trying to piss him off.

Sadly, it was... boring. Extremely so. How could he ever relieve this boredom? Already studying to be a ninja and a Chuunin, and the Hamajo Confederation didn't seem eager to start a war any time soon.

Then, what could little old Mikoto do to relieve his thirst for fighting? The Red Sages was the only thing that came to his mind.

【Family ties】
The Amatsurahashi family. Harsh in their ninja training, lax in their concept of what a man should be. Why you ask?

Mikoto's father died when he was 4 on the way to the hospital when Mikoto's sister was about to be born.

So, Mikoto had to quickly grow up and become the man of the house and so, he had no time to have his lunch handed over to him by some guys who taught were better than him. Not to mention he had an example to set for his sister.

Amatsurahashi Haruka | Mother | 42, Kirigakure, Reitred Shinobi
Amatsurahashi Kanata | Sister | 16, Kirigakure, Shinobi, Chuunin

【Dreams and fears】
His dream is to see actual freedom. To be able to see what it truly means for a shinobi to be able to be free. He'd also like to learn how to play an instrument, ANY instrument.

His deepest and darkest fear is for all that is beautiful to him, including his family, to be taken away from him all at once. To leave him at the mercy of a world where nothing can no longer make him feel alive. Basically, being alive but dead inside is his biggest fear.

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Combat reports.
Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.

【Fighting style】
Many describe Mikoto's fighting style as refined and entracing. They say it is like watching him dance instead of fighting. Still, Mikoto's taijutsu is deadly and precise. There is no wasted effort, no wasted moves. Everything is made to be a beautifully perfect fighting style for Mikoto.

Rhythm and tempo are the bases for his taijutsu style. He always tries to imitate a song playing inside his head as he fights, trying to match the timings of his strikes and the timing to avoid and counter-attack. Thanks to his being knowledgeable about several types of music, it is easy for him to change gears in the blink of an eye.

He tends to use bojutsu, a fighting style through the use of a staff, when he thinks taijutsu is no longer enough to defeat someone. He usually combines bojutsu with ninjutsu to make an even more lethal style.

He is more of a physical fighter rather than using ninjutsu and genjutsu. His ninjutsu acts more as a support for his fighting style and he tries to avoid using genjutsu, mainly because it isn't his best subject.

His ninjutsu focuses on the use of water as a high speed waterjet to cut through things.

【Kekkei genkai, or bloodline limit】

Doesn't have one.

【Ninja techniques】

A rank techniques:
Water Release: High Speed Jet

B rank techniques:
Water Release: Water Beast
Water Release: Hiding in Water Technique

C rank techniques:
Water Release: Water Gun
Water Release: Water Whip
Water Clone Technique

D-E rank techniques:
All basic Academy E ones.

【Custom made techniques】

Jutsu name:
Water Release: High Speed Jet

Rank:
A

Range:
Short Range, can only be use in hand-to-hand combat.

Description:
The user releases a high speed stream of water from their finger tips and envelops both of their hands in a water jet that can cut through just about anything.

This technique, however, is as harmful to the user as it is to their opponent, and can only be used once in a fight to avoid further damage to their hands and/or weapons.

Depending of the Chakra output of the user, this move becomes more powerful and becomes able to cut through harder materials. How much the chakra is being used also determines how long this jutsu can last.

At minimum output, the Jutsu can cut through wood easily and can last about an hour (6 posts) without damaging the user's skin. In a weapon, it can last for a complete hour (6 posts) before it starts eating away at the materials of the weapon.

At medium output, the jutsu can cut through bone, rock and even iron. The user can mantain it for 15 (3 posts) minutes without major damage to their hands. In a weapon, it can last for 30 minutes (4 posts).

At maximum output, the jutsu can cut through just about any kind of metal standing in its way, though it won't be able to cut through chakra enhanced weapons, diamonds or crystal release jutsus. In the user's hands, it can only last for a minute (1 post) before there is major damage and in a weapon it can last for 5 minutes (2 posts) before it destroys the weapon completely.

【Weaponry, tools and objects.】
Weapon Name:
Sonatta

Weapon, tool or object type:
Staff

Description:
A large white and black staff that is about the same height as Mikoto himself. It is made out of wood and has two metal plates at both of its ends, so it can withstand Mikoto's High Speed Jet Jutsu.

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Pretty much done with this. Going to come back later to edit some and whatnot if needed.

For now, I am being called by my aunt to help her with some chores so blegh.

I'll try to be finished soon.

[Blue Demon]

Alright. I edited Umary.

So far I haven't heard the final verdict on Noriko. I'm assuming Chieko is now good?

-Moved to CS tab-

[Partisan]

@Blue Demon Noriko is accepted, I said that in mine.

[Blue Demon]

@Blue Demon Noriko is accepted, I said that in mine.

@Partisan

I know, but I changed stuff. Like adding a custom jutsu. :D

[Partisan]

@Blue Demon Oh. It looks good. I'll accept it all the same.

[Partisan]

I just wanna throw it out there - a kekkei genkai is NOT required. We have a lot of characters right now who pretty much all have a KG. Just because something is in the form, it's not something you'll 100% need to fill in.

[KenyeIsMyLife]

Cool game you've got here, ill post a character soon.