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Current I'll give you $1.50 for your soul. Still willing to pay, but it is slightly used.
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Here is my CS finally



Looks generally okay- one question though. Where did the Nagant come from? Might be worth something to explain that acquisition.
Introducing Nelly Hacke, fortune teller's assistant! Her backstory might be a little sloppy in terms of writing since I did most of it all in one go last night, but it hits all the important points.



Liiks good to me
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Can do that’s an easy fix, and done


Super!

All looks good. Feel free to transfer to the character page
Don't mind me, just had some fun writing this. Behold, an adrenaline junkie.


Excellent! Accepted
Character Description

Name: Viktor Ulrich
Gender:Male
Age: 58
Nationality: German
Appearance:

Personal Effects: A change of clothes, several books (prayer, exorcism rites, demonic identification etc.) 3 vials of blessed water and 3 of blessed oil, 1 Webly Mk V revolver and enough bullets for 1 reload, a journal of his own study/notes.


Background:

What is your job Bishop of a church in Poland
Backstory: Born in 1875 to a moderate family in the German countryside, Viktor was the oldest of three children. This led him to forcibly adopt a parental mentality and aided in the care of his younger brothers. The family, being neither vastly poor or wealthy, did their best and led mostly normal lives. Viktor was always drawn to the church as he said that it brought him a sense of peace in his life and eventually, when he came of age, took the first steps into the priesthood at the age of twelve. If life had continued this way, life would have been peaceful and that is where his story would have ended.

At the age of thirty eight, as an established priest, the Great War broke out and chaos erupted in the country. Ever the father-figure at heart, Viktor’s heart grew troubled at the thought of his countrymen in a great battlefield without the Lord’s presence and before the Archdiocese had called for volunteers to go and spread the gospel in such forsaken lands he stood at the front of the line willing to go. His family, very much troubled by his decision, reluctantly sent him off with the gift of a brand new revolver. War was an entirely different affair than anything that Viktor had ever experienced. As he took up his position as a military chaplain and aided the medical staff in their duties the untold amount of death and serious injuries slowly took their toil on the priest as he did the best he could to give the peace of Christ to the wounded and dying.

For four years he toiled among the back lines burying countless young men and gave counsel to those that remained. One night a field camp after burying yet another soldier in the wee hours of the morning came a moment that would change his life forever. As he came around the corner at the far end of camp, a sharp metal gleam caught his eyes in the brush. As he turned to face the brush the horrifying sight of a mangled soldier covered in viscera with a twisted and contorted face stare back at him. In a panic Viktor reached for the pistol at his side and when he turned back the creature was in his face and in garbled German it spoke;

”WHERES YOUR FAITH FATHER??”

As soon as it had breached his space, the thing was gone. It wasn’t long after that incident that the war ended and Viktor returned to his parish. That night in the field shook him to the core and for the next two years it haunted him until a meeting with another bishop that he told another soul. The response of demon attack was something he hadn’t expected. With this new information Viktor went on a learning spree and began the self taught route of an exorcist.


Looks good. However, can I make a recommendation to improve a wee bit?

The main thing I'm thinking is a Polish Bishop might be noticed if he's out of his Diocese.

My main recommendation would be to put them closer to the action, as it were. So perhaps make them Archbishop of Munich and Freising or similar.

If you wanted to make them a less public figure, you could go with a priest or mendicant friar?

@Chronic of course! There's no rush. I won't close this to new characters at any point!
@Bingelly looks good to me!
I would like to register my interest... working on a character. Do you have any objections to an epidemiologist?
@Pragia12@Theyra feel free to put your characters on the character tab! I was going to start building a link thingee in post zero.
Character Description

Name: Nicola Hoffman
Gender: Female
Age: 23
Nationality: German
Appearance:5'6'' tall, reasonably slim, with dark hair and eyes

Personal Effects: Suitcase of clothes and some cheap jewelry.



Background:


What is your job Stage Entertainer - assistant to Mr. Rudeanu

Backstory: Nicola Hoffman was born into a middle class German family in 1900 in the border town of Mulhouse (or Mülhausen as it was then known). Nicola's father worked on the railway and Nicola, a bright young girl, received the beginnings of a classical education. The region was always somewhat fractious, though her family, originally from Bavaria, were loyal to the Kaiser and Nicola was sheltered from some of the worst goings on in the Province. And then the Great War broke out.

On 8 August 1914, the French army entered the city. Only to leave again two days later. A week later, on 16 August, the French were back and this time, with soldiers fighting in the city itself, the Hoffman family fled to Strasbourg (Strassburg) where they remained for the rest of the war, in part because the family home had been destroyed during the fighting. Nicola's older brother, Felix, was drafted into the army, where he was killed only a few months later during the Brusilov Offensive.

Matters only got worse from there. Alsace-Lorraine was annexed after the war. Nicola's parents died during the Spanish Flu pandemic leaving Nicola with very little. To make matters worse, at the beginning of 1921 she was deported from Mullhouse to Germany, a country she had never set foot in to that point, having been declared an 'Enemy Alien' in the Francization campaigns. Which was when she first started seeing the man in the top hat. A figure glimpsed occasionally who seems to disappear again when encountered, occasionally leaving the lingering smell of cigars in his wake.

Nicola moved back to Bavaria, initially staying with a spinster aunt before moving to Munich in search of work. The man in the top hat continued to occasionally appear though never in any aggressive way.

Pretty, resourceful and desperate for money, Nicola eventually fell in with Ciprian Rudeanu and while she had initially hoped he would prove the man in the hat to be simply a man, eventually she decided not to raise him, having come to regard the figure as a benevolent guardian. It was a few days prior to Rudeanu that she received a mysterious letter...
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