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Would you guys like to have an Knight under your service for eternity? Cause I have a idea on a phantom Kingsguard who serves the royal family even during death. If its allowed of course to have an undead kingsguard
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Might have to make a kingsguard who actually takes the role seriously to conflict with our current kingsguard character that views the position as a way to gain power. and that would make good on my claims to make a light character to go along with the dark. bonus points for giving him conflicts completely unrelated to my other one. the cs may be really boring though.
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Can you guys just quickly skim through this and let me know if I'm onto something? A map will follow if what I've written is favorable.

@Leslie Hall, I've cast the Queen as a kind of "hand behind the throne" type, who either manipulates or empowers an impotent king. This is subject to change, with what you may have in mind on your part. I thought I'd better get something up though, to stir conversation if nothing else.

EDIT: I've left things vague as to not suffocate the dark side characters - basically the ruling class of Celakor have allowed the evil camp to gain followers, which has in turn allowed them to sow their rebellion.

The Kingdom of Celakor


Prelude to War


Oh my sweet Celakor!

Long have you prospered; long have you existed under the umbrella of social cohesion and military prowess!

Alas, all great things, no matter how big, and no matter how small, must come to their end. Years of unchecked bureaucracy and corruption have robbed the country of its honour. Decades of deceit and injustice have bankrupted its moral coffers. A thousand years of regional dominance threatened by the continuity of incompetent rulers. The world trembles at the darkness that such negligence has allowed to arise.

Celakor's soldiers number in the tens of thousands. Her cities are large and productive; her rural communities fat and bountiful. However, under her gleaming skin there lurks dark innards made plump by the blood of the innocent. Men of strength hold all the power, and those who abide by the law are often left at the mercy of he who wields a sword, rather than the local magistrate. This is a practice that has evolved over centuries, and such injustices are now boiling into open revolt.

King Oakenshield IV, distant offspring of Ferof Oakenshield - the Raider from Across the Red Ocean - has finally laid his scepter to rest, after the Gods cursed his heart to stillness one fateful Summer's night. His son? An impotent but well mannered boy of a mere 18 years, married to a woman who commands over him both in years and in wisdom. Their union was one of political convenience, but together, they are both wiser and kinder than any ruling king and Queen that has graced the throne in over the century.

Alas, their arrival was too late to stem the tide of civil revolution!

Villagers, townsfolk, slaves, bandits and beasts have unified in a loosely knitted alliance of common evil. Already the borderlands have fallen, gorged and rented by the hands of those who would murder to proclaim justice. Little does this alliance know, that it is being guided by greater beings who have arisen to prominance in Celakor's darkest hour. These beings are vile, disgusting creatures, long banished to the history tomes - but no longer! They now marshal themselves against the Kingdom, daring to undo a thousand years of peace!

But perhaps, they should? The folk of Celakor barely fared well under the firm and corrupted rule of their own kind. Yes, better perhaps that another hand take the helm....

But no!

Such evil cannot be tamed or reasoned with - it cannot be contained with petty victories or promises of compromise. The revolution taking place in Celakor is but a match light compared to the great fire that will ravage the entire world should it be left to flourish.

And so, in their ascension to the throne, King Furlong the Unread and his Iron Queen [Name?], enter the fray at a pivotal moment in the world's history. The task falls to them to repair the injustice of a millennium, and also to quell the resurgence of an evil not seen in an age.

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Name: king Furlong the Unread

Age: 18

Gender: Male

Race: Human

Side: Light, King of Celakor.

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Abilities/Powers: Divine Empathy; is able to see through the eyes of those he faces, as if he lived their lives. This is family trait of all those tied to the Oakenshield bloodline, and allows the user to understand without bias the view point of any person who cannot actively mask themselves from this power. It is the key to Celakor's longevity, allowing the Kings and Queens of her history to skillfully navigate diplomacy throughout the ages.

Talent(s): Expert orator, moderate swordsmen.

Personality: Fearful of death, strong of spirit, unusually wise for one so young but lacking the iron gut required to act upon it.

Biography: King Furlong the Unread began his life as Oliver Oakenshield, Crown Prince to the Kingdom of Celakor. Smothered by his mother's love, and spited by his father's iron, he lived his earlier years in a permenant state of inner conflict. Whilst his mother might praise him for reading half a library and making himself fluent in several languages, his father would punish him for holding an improper fighting stance. Where he would kill a criminal in place of the executioner, his father would cheer him on gleefully, but his mother would weep.

As a result, King Furlong the Unread grew to be an indecisive, yet well intentioned individual. His ascent to the throne could not have come at a worse time however; for a weak hand on the Scepter of Celakor would certainly spell doom for a Kingdom fraught with the ghosts of its long living incompetence.

Luckily, the Queen of Celakor is not so weak - and though she lacks the formal powers of the Crown, it is said that it is she who really leads the Kingdom, and she has many supporters amongst the commonfolk. However, the nobility frown upon this notion, and act to sabotage her at every turn. Therefore, King Furlong is constantly torn between listening to his beautiful queen, and his vassals. It is a political struggle that threatens to immobilize the country in its darkest hour.

Other Info: The King and Queen have no children; a fact often turned into insult by the King's critics regarding his sexual preferences or potency. Therefore, senior royal positions are taken by his step-brothers and uncles (or the female equivalents) - or high ranking nobles.

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@Frengo

Uhh they do have kids... The position calls for about 3-4 of them...

Never mind. AVAN IS DUMB!
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I'm loving it. Will write up a queen when I get home.
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I'm loving it. Will write up a queen when I get home.


Awesome! I look forward to getting this thing knitted together.

@Frengo

Uhh they do have kids... The position calls for about 3-4 of them...


Yes, you're quite right.

Well we can resolve this in two ways. Either I rewrite things to state that the King and Queen do indeed have children (although they'd be young, if we stick with the whole "young and incompetent idea"), or that the Crown Prince is either his uncle or step brother, and the children are theirs.

I'm happy with either - whatever you guys want really, I'm just here to write and don't mind adjusting things. I kinda went with where my hands typed me...
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@Frengo

Sounds like getting that sword out of the hands of the king will be important to both sides, to the light to get it in the hands of a more competent swordsman and the dark to keep it from cutting into our dark lord.

Divine Empathy makes it very hard for anyone to get away with self serving actions without previous kings having encouraged such behavior. Or Do I misunderstand the power? Also in that paragraph you spell the last name as oakenshielf, thought you might want to touch that up

And yeah they have at least three kids as described in the first post. You may need him to be a tad older... a lot older to accommodate children old enough for combat. Though don't take it up with me probably best to take it up with White Feather sometime later.
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What if the Prince and princesses were the children of my queen and the old king?
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@Frengo

Sounds like getting that sword out of the hands of the king will be important to both sides, to the light to get it in the hands of a more competent swordsman and the dark to keep it from cutting into our dark lord.

Divine Empathy makes it very hard for anyone to get away with self serving actions without previous kings having encouraged such behavior. Or Do I misunderstand the power? Also in that paragraph you spell the last name as oakenshielf, thought you might want to touch that up

And yeah they have at least three kids as described in the first post. You may need him to be a tad older... a lot older to accommodate children old enough for combat. Though don't take it up with me probably best to take it up with White Feather sometime later.


First of all, it's a draft that needs a bit of fattening up and a bit of correcting, so do forgive the odd inconsistency or grammar mistake - I'm going through it as we speak.

Point one, regarding the sword - Yes, I'll give it a more of a history as soon as I've got a moment, but basically it's going to be ancient sword brought over by Ferof Oakenshield a few generations ago (that'll be a story in itself if I ever get the time!), that was crafted by Elfkind to destroy fallen demi-Gods. Either side that possesses it will be in an advantage only when it comes to slaying powerful creatures - it will not single handily fell armies.

Point two, the whole point of the Kingdom's fall is basically that the Kings and Queens have (not always) allowed things to become this bad - perhaps not through bad intent, but through bad management. Also, I imagine a magic user (I assumed this RP would have them from what I have gathered from the intro post) might be able to shield themselves, or others, from it to hide their actions. Therefore a spell like Divine Empathy is fatally flawed if A) the user doesn't really care for someone's motives so long as it serves them, or B) the person they are trying to read spins them a lie through magical means.

Point three, like I say, if the king needs to be older then I'll make it so. I just thought a step-brother/uncle as the Crown Prince might make things interesting, especially if they were after the throne themselves - or even if not, their loyalty would certainly be put to the test if the King continued to ignore their council.

What if the Prince and princesses were the children of my queen and the old king?


That'd work, if you're happy with such an idea. That'd also create some wonderful tension between the King, the Queen's children, and the Queen.

Would be one ugly hate triangle.
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I'm aiming more towards the kind hearted but firm type of queen. She would be, as you said, one who empowers the new king and offers her political advice.

@Cultural Titan GIVING BIRTH IS A BEAUTIFUL THING.
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@Leslie Hall

You don't understand. The current king as written is the son of the last king right? So if the princes are the children of the current queen and the old king... then your character married their own son.

@Frengo

The grammar corrections are not intend as a slight. Just to try and be helpful. You will probably find my own grammar quite terrible in time.

The sword being able to cut through enchanted armor is important for one particular reason. The Dark lord has super enchanted armor. I have no problem with its level of power myself and in fact its existence should be quite a useful tool in creating conflicts.
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You know, I was hoping that our Dark Lord would be more serious, and not an uninspired ripoff of a well-known Warhammer 40k character.

Awesome I know.


No, not awesome. It's an insult. The rest of us are trying to at least make something original, and all you do is plop an image of a space marine and come up with a half-arsed backstory where he falls into a well and becomes a dark archmage for no reason. My incomplete character, Vizir, at least had to go to school to learn some magic; Kalar Splint actually had a reason to found the Rangers and went through a soul-searching revenge phase; King Furlong is a monarch by birthright, but Ahriman version 0.01a pre-alpha just falls into a well and now he's a master elementalist and the man whom we must kneel and bow to? No way, dude.
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@Leslie Hall

You don't understand. The current king as written is the son of the last king right? So if the princes are the children of the current queen and the old king... then your character married their own son.

@Frengo

The grammar corrections are not intend as a slight. Just to try and be helpful. You will probably find my own grammar quite terrible in time.

The sword being able to cut through enchanted armor is important for one particular reason. The Dark lord has super enchanted armor. I have no problem with its level of power myself and in fact its existence should be quite a useful tool in creating conflicts.


Wasn't taken as a slight! Sorry if it came across that way - ah the perils of trying not to express emotions through the medium of text :P

Well, every fantasy setting needs a magical sword... you can't do without one! It's okay though, I don't intend for the King to go on a Dark Lord slaying mission. Alternatively, I would urge any writer that has his/her character gain access to it, not to ruin the story by going on some kind of OP killing spree.

Edit: On the whole marrying thing though - that's a bloomin' good point there ole chap. Well there's a spanner in the works if I ever saw one.

But hey, let's see what the guy in charge has to say. I am carrying 80% of the lore here, and I'd rather he or she stepped in to either smack me down or raise me up before we start casting the plot in iron.

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Name: Dahlia Thurgood
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Race: Witch
Side: Light
Weapon(s): Staff, made out of wood.
Abilities/Powers: Her magic, enhanced by her staff, is pretty powerful but she can't use it to kill.
Talent(s): Tracking, regardless of her magic abilities
Personality: Dahlia is a happy person, she enjoys people and she enjoys being around people. She helps whenever she can and while she isn't naive, she's will trust someone until someone gives her reason not too.
Biography:
Dahlia was born to a mother who didn't want her and a father who was too dead to care. Her magic was hereditary, and both her parents had it, but her mother didn't care to teach her about her powers. A young witch with no control of her powers is dangerous, and she hurt a lot of people before her grandmother found her. Her grandmother gave her the staff she uses now. It channels her powers to do what she wants it to do. Years of training made obsolete due to this staff. It's only restriction is that she couldn't use it to kill, only for protection.
After she had her staff, she was much more in control. Occasionally her magic flares around her, when she's emotional but for the most part she's one of the most powerful beings she knew, simply due to her ability to think about what she wants to happen and it does. She travelled far and wide, and became an acclaimed healer. Eventually she came to the royal family, and became an apprentice to their own healer, learning more than just magically remedies but for the majority of her cases she uses her magic.
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Well that didn't take forever or anything.
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@Cultural Titan Lol Woops. Didn't read that. In my defense, I was trying to read his CS on my phone while at the optometrist
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I have another proposal for the King/Queen thing.

I could write my character to be a young Princess from another kingdom that married into Celakor Royalty through Oliver. Oliver's mother would still exist, but she wouldn't be recognised as the official Queen anymore. At least that way we can still have the Prince and Princesses be related to Oliver even though they aren't his children; and I don't have to marry my son.
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I have another proposal for the King/Queen thing.

I could write my character to be a young Princess from another kingdom that married into Celakor Royalty through Oliver. Oliver's mother would still exist, but she wouldn't be recognised as the official Queen anymore. At least that way we can still have the Prince and Princesses be related to Oliver even though they aren't his children; and I don't have to marry my son.


I can attack the whole subject from another angle if needs be; a reluctant Crown Prince thrust into the running of the Kingdom by the assassination of his brother, the King (by the Dark Lord, no less?). That way I could place him at any age, and the Queen can have all the non-incestuous babies she could ever want.

But we'll wait for the commander-in-chief's thoughts on the subject.

If anyone else wants a crack at this whole king thing, then be my guest! I'm just trying to be helpful, but that in no way means I am the best for the job. Judge me as you see fit :D

Anywhos, I've gotta run, wont be around for a few hours so I'll check back then and see what's what.

Later gators.
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For my own sanity and to keep track of everything...

So our Characters currently include:

A dark lord who is basically a chaos marine sorcerer with a vendetta against the nobility.

An assassin with a mind to kill everyone of high enough authority.

A walking talking ghost story also with a vendetta against the nobility.

A necromancer with a second major in plague magics.

A preist who believes Ahzek is in fact god.

An elf who should never have been hired as a kingsguard.

The king, who may yet go through a revision.

A good witch (Not a bad witch(This is a benefit of language)).

And an undead Kingsguard I have yet to fully read.

Additionally there are four planned light characters

Avanhelsing has stated interest in the second prince.

Leslie Hall is interest in making the queen and a royal confidant.

I am interested in making a kingsguard.

And one planned dark character from Silly Goy that I assume is still a contender for commander.

Which actually brings the totals, assuming all characters are completed and accepted to 5 dark characters, 8 light characters and one other. Not what I was thinking it would end up being actually.
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